my fate ashlok ff part 26 last part updated14/5

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sudhamadhu

@sudhamadhu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#121

Hai Anu mole sukamano. Thanks for ur updates yaar.
I was too busy today.I am working in ICICIBANK prudential yaar.
Today we have a meeting in bank so I was busy. I came now only from bank yaar.
Then read ur updates in one go.
Really Anu mole y r u not showing our shlok. Only showing flash back.
I think shlok is in hospital in America. Something happened to shlok.
In flash back he is loving caring and romancing astha. He was exited in her pregnancy. But now he us not with her. And she asking varad how is shlok now. That means shlok had something and he is in hospital.
Sojal and asthas chatting was super but felt sad for each other.
Anu mole don't make astha to wait so long. V wants to see our shlok coming to astha with lots if love.
Anu mole i an too tired so today i will only comment short one.
But from tomorrow i will try to write some more big ok.
Anyway thanks mole. Eniku othiri ishtamai mole.
Manapooravam ozhuvaakiyathalla ketto chakare. 😛 😛
V r waiting. Continue yaar.

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anumol

@dazzles

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#122

PART 12

I came back from my memories and turned the next page... It all explained how our life goes... But when seeing my life through his eyes, it is so different... I turned to the pages one by one ... I need an answer today ... Why he leave me...? Finally I turned the last page...

31/12
finally one year is over...how the life changed... This year is special to my heart always... How it not to be? I felt all as a blessings... The way I first met her... The first talk... The first coffee with her... First kiss... Now the feelings of going to be a father... She make me a perfect man... With her everything has a special beauty...
I can't believe that I am in madly love with her... I loved the feeling that I got when I see her on my bed near to me on every mornings. The way her hair fall on my face... The way she clutching me while sleeping... It is a special experience to wakeup seeing your wife's smile... I don't know why I loved her this much... Only I know is I don't know live without her... I forget to breath without her... This year is the best year for me... And the coming years will be my favourite years because I am going to spend my every day with her... With her it is so different...
Happy new year asthu...

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'i love you shlok' I whispered. I never thought new year brings darkness in my life...
I flipped the pages again... It is over there... Where he write the rest of our life? maybe our crucial life..i want to know..., what happened to him?... The dairy is over here... There is no another page... Now how can I going to find the truth... I felt my vision get blurred... Tears are started to flowing from my eyes like a river... I want to scream out loud... My plights are not going to over... I stand from the bed clutching my tummy to ensure my girl is safe... I walked up to his cupboard... I searched his new diary everywhere... I threw the contents in the shelf to the rooms carelessly... I don't care the mess that I created on my room... Only mattered is shlok... I want to be with him... I want to laugh with him... I want to loved by him... I want to see our children grow... I want to hold his hand when my vision lost,when I unable to stand I want to be in his arms...
I searched through the entire room for his diary.the only hope to find him... I felt my hands shivering... Tears are rolling from my eyes continuously... I don't know how to stop it.. I felt a sudden pain swipe through my spinal cord... I felt dizzy... Everything in front of me get blurred out... I looked at the door... I want to call someone... I felt I am going to be die... I limped to the door outmost difficultly... I hold my tummy... With outmost care... I felt everything is going beyond my hand... I opened the door partially... I want to scream but my tongue died somewhere in my throat. I hold the door for the outmost support... I slowly slide through the door and collapsed on the floor... I felt I drowning towards some other world... I saw him like a saviour... But before I hold his hand the darkness covers my eyes like a veil... Before anything bad happened I want to see him... I closed my eyes slowly...
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I heard someone calling my name... I tried to open my eyes... I felt the pain over my head... I want to break it... My child, Shlok... Our life... I felt the pain swipe through my body to my soul... I heard my name again..someone is tapping my face... Finally with all the strength I opened my eyes... I saw the fan rotating above my head... I fixed my gaze to it... Again I heard the same voice... I looked around... I found ayi sat next to me... I saw drops of tears on her eyes... Sojal is holding Kavya... My little girl is crying... I saw Ankush bahyia standing near to Dr Malini . I looked at everyone's face... I touched my protruding tummy slowly... My child moves a little... Two drops of tears fall down from my eyes and missed into my hair...
'astha... Don't worry baby is safe... Little BP variation... You need to be careful...' Dr looked at me and said. I nodded my head ... There is no strength left in me...
'ankush... Bring this medicines also... Astha take care... BP variation is not good at this time... Especially for your baby...' I hope you don't made any mistakes now onwards... You are near at your 7th month...'
I closed my eyes and lay there... Few minutes later when i opened my eyes I saw Kavya next to me... I looked at her and smiled...
'chachi... Are you alright... Don't worry baby ko kuch nehi huva'
'kuch nehi... ' I repeated her words... I saw sojal enter the room with the food... I looked at her face...it is devoid of any feelings... I made all of them worried...
She help me to sit straight on the bed... She put the pillow behind my back for support. Then I can sit comfortable..
Without a word she starts to feed me... And i decided to obey her...
'i will ask sita to clean the room' she said. I looked around the room... It is all messed up with my madness...
'sojal... I am sorry...' I mumbled... I don't know she heard it or not... She stay quite and continue to feed me...
'ayi... ?'
'she is downstairs... Today onwards Kavya will stay with you...'
'sojal...' I called her helplessness clear in my voice...
'astha... Do you know how much we all worried... He will come. I am sure about that... You two are meant to be together... He is your fate...' I closed my eyes and a single drop of tear missed from my eyes...
I felt a soft hands wiped my tears... I know it is Kavya... Rest of my dinner is in complete silence... Some time later.. Sita came and arrange my room properly...
I lay down on the bed again with Kavya next to her... Before leaving sojal gave me the medicine that i need to take...
My mind again went back to the dairy and to the last page... I want to know what happened to him... The memories took me to my past days...

Busy ... Will reply later...

Edited by dazzles - 9 years ago

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Saibhargav

@Saibhargav

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#123

very very very great update
written superbly
emotional one
loved it a lot
gud going
waiting for next one
thanks for this wonderful ff

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sudhamadhu

@sudhamadhu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#124

Hai Anu mole gud evening.
Nice update yaar.
But I am angry at u 😡 😡
We want shlok back to astha yaar.
I feel bad for astha. She is suffering so much mole.
Enthina engane cheyunne. Paavamale nammude asthu.
Eni karayikale pls da.
Anyway I enjoyed it yaar
Continue mole.
I am waiting yaar.

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..optimist..

@..optimist..

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+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#125

Wow 👏

Superbly written...

One year completed and then the dead end... Aastha's restlessness shown so nicely... Her desperation to know about Shlok, to be with him as they see their children grow...

Kavya's innocent love and Sojal's care... Nicely written...

Waiting to read more...

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anumol

@dazzles

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#126

Originally posted by: Saibhargav
very nicely written
really u will bcome a great philosopher
it was written with so much feeling i can understand
gud going
thanks for writing
waiting for next one
continue soon

Philosophy... Is very crucial thing sai

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anumol

@dazzles

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#127

Originally posted by: sudhamadhu
Hai Anu mole sukamano. Thanks for ur updates yaar.
I was too busy today.I am working in ICICIBANK prudential yaar.
Today we have a meeting in bank so I was busy. I came now only from bank yaar.
Then read ur updates in one go.
Really Anu mole y r u not showing our shlok. Only showing flash back.
I think shlok is in hospital in America. Something happened to shlok.
In flash back he is loving caring and romancing astha. He was exited in her pregnancy. But now he us not with her. And she asking varad how is shlok now. That means shlok had something and he is in hospital.
Sojal and asthas chatting was super but felt sad for each other.
Anu mole don't make astha to wait so long. V wants to see our shlok coming to astha with lots if love.
Anu mole i an too tired so today i will only comment short one.
But from tomorrow i will try to write some more big ok.
Anyway thanks mole. Eniku othiri ishtamai mole.
Manapooravam ozhuvaakiyathalla ketto chakare. 😛 😛
V r waiting. Continue yaar.

😊 Chechi saramilla... Enime manasillavum... Enjoy ur work... Will wait for your comments

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anumol

@dazzles

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#128

Originally posted by: syvalini
hai anu
how r u?
y so ur looking sad
do u how much iam waiting for ur update
it was amazing yar the way ur expressing the feelings of each character soo nice,
coming to the update i really liked that both sojal n astha sharing their feeling showing concern each other
n thinking about the family so sensible .
want to know wat happen to shlok
i am seeing the shlok in ur ff in a diff way that was soo nice
the dairy writing of shlok n through it astha knows about the feelings of shlok more wat he felt about her
is all interesting to read n to feel.
ur rocking anu with ur writing, atleast for those who r reading write for those n try to stop it yar
keep going...
eagerly waiting... anu for ur further updates

I took the family relationship from my own family...
I loved to watch a good relationship between family members in the show... Now I write it...
Shlok's feelings are too strong... Read today's update... Then comment...

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anumol

@dazzles

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#129

Originally posted by: rd0309
Obviously we all are eager to know about Shlok.. Atleast I am!! Anyways your way of portraying the past is too good, I am loving it!

A good encouraging words always give the power to write more.

Edited by dazzles - 9 years ago