RiKara SS - Amor Intermissus part 08 updated Pg 32 (30/07) Complete - Page 4

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Posted: 8 years ago
#31
awesome update dear
loved itt soo much...
thanks alot for pm sweets
waiting for next part...
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Posted: 8 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: _PrincessPooru_

Hey genie 🤗

Total justification to your name is what you do ... Fulfill wishes and make people happy...
I am glad that you are writing on such a stress free plotline ... Happy Wife Ri Husband Kara are a dreamlike relief
Both being happy in each others imperfections ...
First of all thanks a ton for sketching Artist Kara ... It has been a long long time seeing him work ... The way you introduced Om and his boredom was so simple and sweet ... Moments seem taxing him without Gauri.. The desiring ailment of new found love... The way she excitedly goes to see him is so lovable and believable because such moments do happen ... The way he cannot keep his hands of her wanting to memorize her like a prose ... The way she anchors him emotionally ... These two are made for each other Relationship Goals!
I am happy knowing that their relationship is mature and they know how to handle it ... Not wanting to trouble anybody else and sorting out issues on their own ... They are strong bonded 👏
Their gentle abduction of lips into not doing any kind of talking was a delight to read ... So easy going and smooth ... Comfortable and relaxed ... They are so much in love
Entrapped and Enchanted! Hats off to you for keeping the essence of RiKara intact ... Their level of understanding to be mature and their approach to the relationship very comfortable ... And at last we have Dumbbell Oberoi 😎 with his usual flair and flavor ... His entering in the studio ... Made me remember some good old IB days (Remember the face pack scene!) Little does he idea about what's brewing between Mr. & Mrs. Sufi kara 😉 ... If Rudy was getting bored ... I very well know Om must have planned to bore him in the ocean floor now 😆 ... God save him ... He really does not know that disturbing a Possessive Ri & Romantic Kara is equal to sin ... GHOR PAAP 😆 I hope his bulbul bhabhi saves him ...
This is relatable kind of writing for me genie ... Do continue soon


IB ke OSBaaz se comment! Mujhe chakkar aa rahe hain!
Could I get a selfie with you? You're like a rockstar around here yaar...
I'm so glad you got the chance to read some of my work and wrote such a beautiful comment on it!
The comment is actually better written than the story itself. 😆
Main to bas fiction likhti hoon... aap to poetry likhte ho yaar.

I am in awe of your skills and I love all your stories a whole bunch!

Writing some high voltage drama for SIIC and LC made me crave some mindless fluff... so here's the result of my brain needing sugar.

In my headcanon, Omkara is someone who doesn't commit to anything easily and once he does, he's 100% in for life. To me, he wouldn't accept Gauri as his wife unless he was willing to commit his heart to her fully. And once he's accepted the status quo, there would be no need for ego or the need to hide anything from each other.

Gauri always has been very open about her feelings... she's also never rejected Omkara's advances, no matter how real they are or aren't. I don't think she's one of those sheltered gaon ki gori types. She's well aware of her own feelings and once she gives herself completely to the relationship between her and Omkara, she too, wouldn't need any reasons to step back or shy away from expressing their genuine feelings... because isn't that what Gauri has hungered for, for such a long time?

Anyways, it was awesome to hear from you... hope you'll read the next couple of parts too and let me know what you thought.

An update should be coming your way soon!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: FayeMia

Hello Gen! After a long time! Read this when stuck in a train during heavy rain! (accidentally clicked and then the page wouldn't load completely due to bad network, I actually wanted to shake my fist at it!) The beautiful mausam and then uparse your beautiful writing! Ufff!!!!

Girl, you good!!! This was such a good read! ArtistKara is a dreeeaaammm and Gauri gets to live him. *I don't know what I'm saying, please excuse me*

The level of physical comfort between them makes me go aaawww!! And she's not shy at all and he doesn't have any inhibitions before pulling her away into sensuousness. Yet they remain SO intense! An impatient Omkara is a treat to read and you put in the specs!

I can't wait to read the next part.
Thank you for the pm!


I totally understand that feeling though. There are people here who have thrown many invisible things at me just because I keep boring them with my silly OS instead of updating Woh Humsafar Tha and Khamoshiyan! *sailing in the same boat*


Hi there Faye!

It has indeed been a while... that would be my bad cuz I haven't been reading anything on IF for quite a while now. I only come online to post updates and reply to comments. My inbox is bursting with notifications... yours as well among them I'm sure. I promise to get through each and every one once these couple of weeks are done.

That aside, I'm very glad you liked this short. It's nice that you have a commute that let's you relax a while and do stuff. I have to drive 45 minutes back and forth everyday in heavy traffic, which more often than not makes my commute more than an hour and a half long, either way...

Very happy that you like something I wrote. I've been wanting some teeth rotting fluff for some time now and I figured, why not write it myself? Waise bhi, LC is becoming dramatic and SIIC is already chocful of drama. This was a good break.

My headcanon Om and Ri are in a stage in their relationship where they've mentally committed themselves to the other person for life. For Omkara, unlike Shivaay whose issue is Ego, the problem lies with having enough trust in someone to commit to them for life. With the two of them already going through so many events and a literal rollercoaster of emotions beforehand, once they realize the depth, breadth and width of their feelings for each other, they would function more as a single entity than two separate people.

Unlike ShivIka, who seem to thrive with the conflict present in their relationship, I feel Om and Ri would form a much deeper, more mature and a lot more stable relationship. This is the beginning of that... hopefully it translates well in the coming chapters too.

There should be an update coming your way soon... so stay tuned!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#34

Originally posted by: sumaiya10

This os was really much needed one. Thank u sooo much for writing this dear 🤗

First I loved how u connected to the show from start to end and didn't wrote a complete different one. I liked how brought soumya back and showed progression in shivika' relation.

Reading Rikara was a bliss. You write their scenes so perfectly that somehow I dream to write like that one day

Rudy baby kabab mai haddi bangaya and he isn't even aware of it. No worries picture abhi Baki hai 😉

I'm glad that u asked suggestions though it would tough to write with everyone's wishes I would say that's the spirit girl 🤗 here my prompt I would love to read some jealous ri and chulkara scene which all would waiting to read


Thanks for such a beautiful comment luv!

I am positively a puddle of happy emotions here.

I don't know why but I mostly stick to canon and then diverge slightly from there to being about a certain change in the story. I am RuMya 5ever and ShivIka is always a pleasure to write.

But as always, RiKara are the stars of the show and let me tell you, these two are an absolute delight to imagine and write. I've read your writing and I honestly think you write better than I do... I have loved some of your stuff enough to read it multiple times.

Could you PM me about the idea you have for a prompt? I would like to discuss it and try my hand at writing it out. It sounds intriguing.

Anyways, there should be an update coming your way soon... so stay tuned!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: yayini

Genie.. long time🤗

This is such a relief in this hard times.. once again an awesome piece of os with a nice romantic and a feel good flow.. I loved Om ri s convo and their passionate sensual moments were beautiful. Naughty omie is something we all are yearning and I loved how ri is not shy but instead innocent passionate.. best was Rudy s untimely timing.. poor Rudy incurs the wrath of omie shomkie😆. Aise scenes kaash show mein bhi dekhe ko milthe.. keep coming up with such nice writing and we will be delighted 😊


Karthi 🤗 🤗

Ek hug kaafi nahin tha! I am so sorry... meri galti hai ki we haven't interacted for a while now. I haven't had the time to read anything on here for some time. My inbox is fairly bursting with notifications. I know you have a new story out and I have yet to read it I think. I promise I'll get to it soon though!

That aside, I'm glad you liked this happy li'l short of mine. We really do need some fluff from time to time. Om and Ri are a delight to write for... they're such cleanly formed characters that predicting their actions on noncanon things is pretty easy. Extrapolating their feelings for each other and bringing about their future relationship is one of my favorite things to do.

My headcanon Om here is fully committed to Gauri as her husband and Gauri knows that. That knowledge leads her to behave in a manner that is much more relaxed and assured than she would normally. Gauri has never had any issues with accepting Omkara's advances. No need to think she would shy away when they're an actual couple.

Shayad kabhi future mein humein aise scenes show mein bhi milenge. Not really, but one can hope right?

The next part should be up soon... so stick around for that too!
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Posted: 8 years ago
#36

Originally posted by: enthusiastic

awesome update dear
loved itt soo much...
thanks alot for pm sweets
waiting for next part...


Thanks for taking the time to comment luv!

I'm super glad that you liked this li'l short.

The next chapter should be coming your way soon... so stay tuned!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thanks for taking time time to comment my friend!

Look for an update soon...
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello my lovelies!
I am totally overwhelmed with the response for the last short posted! I didn't expect you guys to like it as much as you did. Thank you for all the love, support and encouragement that you guys have drowned me in... I can't tell you just how much it means to me. 🤗 Here's a big, tight hug to each and every one of you amazing people!

That said, here's the next part for your reading pleasure..
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Gauri had been busy with one thing or the other regarding an upcoming Pooja at Oberoi Mansion the following few hours and found herself alone in the kitchen that evening, trying to come up with something to eat as she'd missed tea-time while discussing the rituals and other necessities with Dadi and Maaji.

She'd been seriously contemplating what she wanted to eat when she felt a pair of very familiar hands snake themselves around her waist from behind her and pull her back into a similarly familiar warm and muscular form. Sighing in happiness at once again being in her jatadhari's arms, Gauri leaned back in a leisurely manner and laying her arms on top of his around her waist, interlaced their fingers while she hummed tunelessly, just thoroughly enjoying the moment.

The one shoulder kurta she'd worn that day gave him perfect access to the satin skin of her shoulder and neck and Omkara wasted no time in laying down small kisses on her shoulder, slowing moving up her neck to her ear. The heat of his lips on her skin coupled with the deliberate brush of his stubble made Gauri whimper, her breath hitching, her heart thumping painfully in her chest and her hands tightening on his in helpless response. Omkara knew that he'd have to stop himself before he took this any further because they were in the kitchen in the middle of the day and the way Gauri always responded to him, so uninhibitedly, would only lead to more trouble than they could handle at the moment. He pulled back infinitesimally and squeezed his arms still wrapped around her waist in an affectionate gesture, trying to bring them back to earth from wherever they'd been floating alongside the clouds.

"Bhook lagi hai na?"

He spoke and she could feel it reverberating through their bodies, his words a soft murmur in her ear making her shiver at the sensations that still ran through her from their impromptu session in the kitchen

"Hmmm..."

"Kya khana hai?"

"Humein jo abhi chaahiye, wo to humein yahaan nahin milega"

Though Omkara was very tempted to take her words to mean something entirely different and more than a bit naughty, he knew his innocent wife's thoughts were probably going in a completely different direction from his. Shaking his head to dislodge some of the more stubborn visions quite unrelated to food, he smiled at his own plight and leaned back in to place his chin on her shoulder, simultaneously making a decision to keep it light and flirty for the time being.

"Hmmm... lemme guess... tumhein golgappe chaahiye, right?"

"Aap ko kaise pata?"

She tried to turn around in his embrace without too much success while she could feel Omkara chuckling at her attempts.

"Are meri cute chiraiyya... thoda relax to karo. Golgappe ke naam par hi itna tension logi to jab use khana hoga to kya karogi?"

"Humara mazaak udaane se aap ko kitni khushi milti hai na... Chodiye humein... golgappon ke baare mein baat karke aap ne humari bhook aur bhi badha di. Jaane dijiye, humein bohot kaam hai"

"Tum chali gayi to main golgappe kisko khilaaoonga?"

With that, she couldn't resist herself and squirmed around enough to turn and face him, still caged in the circle of his arms, only now his hands rested on their habitual spot at her waist. Omkara only had a second to appreciate her lovely eyes sparkling in excitement and happiness before she fairly jumped on him. Wrapping her arms around his neck, Gauri pulled her husband down to her and placed a quick but thorough kiss on his lips before letting him up again

"Ye kis liye tha? Not that I'm complaining, trust me, I'll never complain about that... agar mujhe pata chala ki maine kya kiya ye deserve karne ke liye to shaayad baar baar kar sakoon."

He finished with a hint of a devilish smile lurking just beneath the surface.

"Bas... aise hi. For being you... itna sweet hone ke liye"

"Aur agar main golgappe ke baare mein bas mazaak kar raha tha to?"

She pretended to fake anger for a second before her frown melted into a shimmering smile and she shook her head

"Agar aap golgappe nahin laaye to bhi"

The smile that had been quite a rare occurrence before Gauri's advent into his life... the smile she'd found made her weak in the knees, made its appearance as Omkara leaned back from her embrace to pull out a covered tray from the other side of the counter and lay it before Gauri. He then stood back to let her enjoy what he knew was one of her favorite foods

"Ye lo... tumhari favorite dukaan se hai"

She turned to look at him standing a couple of feet away from her, rolled her eyes in feigned frustration like she thought he was stupid and yanked him closer, handing him a bowl she'd pulled out of the lower cabinets and gestured with her head for him to start

"Gauri ye sab main tumhare liye laaya hoon..."

"Haan to hum ne kab mana kiya? Magar hum aapke saath share karna chaahte hain Omkaraji. Aap ke saath poori zindagi share karne ka waada kiya hai... phir ye golgappe kya cheez hain? Aap bhi humare saath khaayenge to humein bohot khushi hogi. To chaliye... khana shuru kijiye"

But before the two of them could get beyond smiling sappily at each other like the dorks they were, their solitude was interrupted by a couple of excited feminine shrieks filling the kitchen

"Are wah! Aaj to meri life hi ban gayi... Golgappe khane ka kitna man kar raha tha pata hai Soumya? Aur main kitchen mein kya dekh rahi hoon? Golgappe! Main bata rahi hoon tumhein, is bagad bille ke saath rahoongi to mujhe golgappe jaisi cheezein kabhi naseeb nahin hongi. Mere pyaare devar ye acchi tarah se jaante hain... Thank you Om!"

"Haan Bhabhi... Australia mein na aise thele waale golgappe nahin milte. Mujhe pata nahin kitne din cravings hoti thi golgappe ki. My god! This looks so yummy! Thank you bade baal waale bhaiyya"

Omkara, standing there looking like a deer caught in headlights, was hugged to death by a delighted Anika and Soumya before they fairly devoured the contents of the tray, leaving a frustrated Omkara and disappointed Gauri standing by.

Trying to make the most of a bad situation, Omkara pulled Gauri aside

"Chalo... koi baat nahin, main tumhein baahar le jaata hoon. We'll eat at the shop itself and come back home. Waise bhi... hum donon akele kahin baahar nahin gaye abhi tak"

Gauri's sparkling smile returned in full force as she nodded delightedly, leaving her husband feeling elated and a little dazed from the brilliance of it. She on the other hand, could only thank her Shankarji for bringing her bhaujaai and devrani to the kitchen at the right moment. Sure, Omkara's gesture of getting those golgappe for her was incredibly sweet... but now due to them, she got to go out with her jatadhari. Nothing could be better!

As the two quietly made their way out of the kitchen and down the hallway, Omkara prayed to a god he wasn't certain he believed in, for them to have no further interruptions before they got out of the house. And to his dismay, as they passed the open doors of Shivaay's home office, they heard his elder brother's voice call out

"Om!... If you're not busy, mujhe tumse kuch zaroori baat karni hai"

The husband and wife stood stock still for a couple of moments, clearly undecided on what to do. What they wanted to do and what they needed to do were two very different things at the moment. Sighing a bit, Gauri put a small hand on his arm and squeezed supportively

"Aap ko bade bhaiyya bula rahe hain... aap ko jaana chaahiye"

"Magar Gauri hum to..."

"Koi baat nahin. Kabhi aur chale jaayenge. Bade bhaiyya aap se kuch zaroori baat karna chaahte hain... wo aur important hai abhi. Aur hum thodi kahin bhaage jaa rahe hain? Aap baat khatam karke aayiye. Hum aap ka intezaar karenge"

On an impulse that he didn't even try to squelch, Omkara bent down and pressed a quick, sweet kiss to her lips, right there in the middle of the hallway where anybody walking by could see them... that quick peck turned into two, three and then a series of little kisses, as if the two of them couldn't bear to stop. Almost a whole minute later, it was Gauri who took a deep breath and pulled back slightly, reminding her husband of where they were exactly and he sighed heavily at the ceasing of other, more pleasurable activities.

"I'll try to get this done soon and then we'll go, okay? Mere liye wait karo"

Nodding, Gauri watched him walk into the adjacent room and she too sighed, before making her way to their bedroom. Half way there, she was waylaid by a semi-hysterical Pinky Oberoi who fairly ordered her to entirely re-do the invitations for the upcoming Pooja, something that had already been done and sent out to all the neighbors and friends.

So it was, that when Omkara tiredly trudged into their bedroom way past dinner time, after long hours of contract negotiations with the Diwaan Group of Industries over a video conference call along with Shivaay, he found it to be curiously empty. There were no signs that Gauri had even been in the room that entire day and Omkara was just starting to worry about her when she almost walked into him on her way into their room, looking like she'd survived a zombie apocalypse.

"Kya hua Gauri... you look exhausted!"

"Poochiye mat! Pooja ke saare invitations waapis karwaya Choti Maaji ne humse aur humein saare gharon ko nyauta dene bhi bhej diya. Hum abhi bahi laute hain"

Even the mention of Pinky Oberoi seemed to have the brothers trembling in suppressed anger nowadays and this time was no different. Omkara was ready to breathe fire at the woman for making his wife labor at something that was unnecessary and inconsequential. Vowing to do something about it later, Omkara set aside that issue to tackle something a bit more time-sensitive

"I'm sorry maine humari date miss kar di... Kuch khaaya tum ne dinner mein?"

She blushed at his mention of their date, shook her head no to answer his question about dinner and asked him

"Aap?"

He too answered in the negative and they both sighed looking at each other.

"Chalo... fridge mein kuch hoga. Aaj ki humari date kitchen mein hi hogi..."

While she blushed once more at the word 'date', he could see that she was genuinely tired.

"Aap kuch kha lijiye Omkaraji... humein neend aa rahi hai. Humein kuch nahin chaahiye abhi"

Knowing that she wouldn't listen to any sort of logic or advice at the moment, Omkara just put his hands on her shoulders and frog marched her to the kitchen, hearing her complain like a fussy child all the way. But the idea of food was becoming more palatable to Gauri, who suddenly remembered just how hungry she'd been in the evening and Omkara could only grin like a fool at his wife as she started to go through the refrigerator muttering loudly about the entire lack of what she called good food and the abundance of tasteless foreign junk.

The late night found them sharing a plate of parathas and dahi in a leisurely manner, while Omkara teased her about her obsession with Salman Khan and she countered with his weird obsession with having his art supplies laid out just a certain way before he started any project. Their dinner and chat session went on for a while, till Omkara found Gauri nodding off on the kitchen table and quietly cleaned everything up. Gauri awakened to the feeling of being picked up, automatically wrapped her arms around his neck and settled with her head pillowed on his shoulder. She missed Omkara's incredibly tender smile directed toward her but she was way too tired and comfortable at the moment and right where she wanted to be... in her husband's arms.

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That's a wrap on that!

Poori family kabab mein haddi banti phir rahi hai...bechaare lovebirds. Kya hoga inka?

Please like and comment your ideas, thoughts and suggestions if you have any. I would love to hear from you guys.

Cheers!
Edited by writergenie17 - 8 years ago


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Posted: 8 years ago
#39
This was so cute!! I'm loving these shots. Rudy, Anika and Soumya and then shivaye xD Poor Rikara couldn't go out.
I really loved this part too. Om is so caring for his wife Kitchen scene was too good.
Loving their small, cute moments. Waiting for the next shot now :D
Much love 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
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I am loving it. Yaar make shivika and rumya know their secrets or better make them already aware of it. Firstly for poor rikara themselves and secondly to see them being teased. Please second option is more funny for me.

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