SS:The kiss/chap6 upd pg37/Spoiler 53 - Page 6

Originally posted by: Hamlet53

The Kiss.. chap.3
Fantastic, update mehru! you bring out the depth of their emotions very well.Dhani,deep love for him, but not deep enough to accept blame for something she is not responsible for. Viplav''s, fury and pressure in his unwillingness to accept that his mother may be in the wrong. You bring out a common issue , that in domestic situations and relationships,a son seldom sees his mother in the wrong. I personally ,always wanted to see the furious side of Viplav.. by bringing this defence of his mother in, you have shown this scene in your story.. How it ends its a bit tit for tat!but Dhani may have taken the right decision.. it was pointless to build on a relationship that was based on his obdurate behaviour.. perhaps he will come around and see the folly of his reaction.. and then do something to make amends.. if they both love each other that is..
Iam loving the tone of this story.. present glitch,then a gradual pulling back towards each other.. sealed with a kiss??
hope baacha's are fine and that diary of yours keep it safe!plz.. out of baacha's reach!
much love hammie

Originally posted by: rama_2010

great going mehru...

waiting for the next part ... want to see what happens when they meet... take your time dear

liked the way you are writing the story anti linear format...

generally i do not like unnecessary separation and mu wala tracks (tv show types)... but am excited to read wa next...

Originally posted by: simplejoy

Mehru keep it up.I am enjoying it.
👏

Originally posted by: mehraan

Thanx dear for ur lovely comments...Bahut din ke baat dikhi ho!!!😃

Originally posted by: simplejoy

Lol I was always there chupke chupke 😃
N u were d one who made me smile when I was totally bored with ishq.

Originally posted by: pearl100

Very well written !!! Eagarly waiting for the next part😊

Originally posted by: mehraan

Mujhe kuch samaj nahi aya...😆😆😆