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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Neenzm


Hi sparkler (sorry don't know ur name)

Really nice start.

Epilogue: awww!!!!! A small kid was left deliberately at the station. My heart went out to the kid. Thank God the man took him to the orphanage though this is not good for any one.

You gave the nice touch to Ranvir's connection to the harmonica. Amazing creativity there.
I m sure this man would be the important link to the present.

I m guessing now this man might be Mr. Aditya shrivastva (Anchal's dad) coz he came mumbai too for his job.

Interesting


Hi Neen,

I am Sharon.

Thank you for your comments.

Harmonica is said to be an instrument of loneliness. I had a personal experience with one during my childhood. When my parents realised that I preferred not to go out or talk to my friends and spent my time playing it, they took it away encouraging me to talk to people. Slowly I lost touch with it and lost the instrument itself.I feel that harmonica is an integral part of Ranvir Raichand's life. So wanted to put a bit more weight to its importance by making it a gift from someone he trusted.

Cheers
Sharon
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Posted: 7 years ago
#12
nice start..
very intriguing prologue..
part one is great..
continue soon..
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thank you dear😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Glad you liked it!😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: LovelyUmang5

nice start..
very intriguing prologue..
part one is great..
continue soon..


Hi Umang,

Glad you enjoyed the chapters. The updates will be more regular from now on.

Cheers
Sharon
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Neenzm


Part 1: mystery start. I m guessing here too the girl who took the signature mission is Anchal. Well, let's see.

Ranvir n Kabir talks too fishy fishy. Their game rules talk is foreshadowing of their future equation.

Once again u linked Anchal's dad death to Raichands. Nice twist this is.

And now AanVir meeting. Literally blazing n dhamakedaar face off. She spanked him already. This reminds me of the Anchal in first couple of episodes.

Kabir too seems like the promo one kabir. Impulsive and hasty but emotional too for his bade.

Now you built up the platform for the story. Really looking forward to some RACE kinda story.

Continue soon


Cheers
Neen


Hi Neen,

Good guesswork, but I cant reveal yet whether you are correct.

You mention "once again". Is there another fan fic with this premise? I might have missed some of the works posted here. Please let me know if you feel it's too similar.

Race is one of my favourite films. If I can draw this story of a level even near Race, I would be a very happy girl. I have never tried writing in this genre before. So any praise means mountains to me.

Thank you for your encouragement!

Cheers
Sharon
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thank you, Mystic!😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Superb update. Can't wait for next chapter 😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Rubygill528

Superb update. Can't wait for next chapter 😊


Thank you dear!😊
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thank you dear!😊

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