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Hi Guys,here is the next chapter.Thanks a lot for your precious likes and valuable comments.Do read and comment😊




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Chapter-6



Sleep seemed to elude Kesar later that night.He was still thinking about the hug.The unexpected display of emotions from Gulaal was definitely a surprise...a very pleasant surprise,he thought as he smiled remembering the moment.He had not wanted to let her go at all.It felt wonderful to hold her in his arms.When Gulaal moved back he could see a light pink tinge on her cheeks.There was an embarrassed smile and her eyes were downcast.He should have said something...anything to make her feel comfortable but he remained silent with a smirk on his face enjoying her shy discomfort.He was staring right at her and he knew that she could feel it because he could see her blush deepen.Finally she lifted up her eyes to look at him and quickly left the room mumbling something about helping Rewa.He should have stopped her from leaving.He should have grabbed her hand and...He got up with a start.What did he want to do exactly?He turned to look at Gulaal .He could not see her face as she was turned away from him but she seemed to be sleeping peacefully.He envied her.How could she sleep without a care in the world while here he was wide awake in the middle of the night,his thoughts completely occupied by her?He closed his eyes and tried hard to clear his mind of all thoughts.He took a few deep breaths and finally he felt calm.Now he can enjoy his sleep,he thought with a smile but the very next minute the vision of a smiling Gulaal with her hair open assaulted his senses.He opened his eyes and sighed softly as he looked to his side once more where his tormentor was sleeping unaware of the havoc she was causing within him.



Gulaal was not asleep.She was in fact wide awake.She was excited.It was Kesar's birthday tomorrow.He had not told her.She came to know of it while cleaning his table a few days ago and she saw his driving license lying around.She was curious so she looked at it and that's how she found out that his birthday was coming up.She wondered as to why he had not let her know.It had bothered her that he had failed to mention it but she soon got over it.She wanted to get up early and be the first one to wish him.She looked at the beautifully wrapped small gift near her pillow.She had spent a lot of time searching for this.She wanted to see his happy face when he looked at it.From the tossing and turning and the soft sighs she could make out that even Kesar was finding it difficult to sleep.Maybe he too was waiting eagerly for the sun to rise.After all who doesn't love birthdays??



Gulaal woke up with a start when she felt the rays of the sun hit her face.She looked at her clock.It was late.The alarm had failed to ring.She looked to her side and to her disappointment Kesar was missing."aaj hi ke din Kesar ko jaldi uthna tha kya?...aur yeh alarm ko bhi isi din kharab ho na tha...".She muttered angrily as she quickly took a shower and got ready in an instant.Before leaving the room she took the gift with her and went downstairs.She was puzzled because she could not see Kesar anywhere.She went into the kitchen and decided to make Kesar's favourite kheer.He would love it.She got some help from the cook and within an hour breakfast along with kheer was ready.She went out to the dining room and saw Rewa and Kesar come down the stairs.Rewa was unually quiet and it felt weird.Kesar on the other hand had a blank expression on his face.As he walked towards the table he looked at her.She smiled but she was mildly surprised when he averted his eyes and sat at his usual place looking grim.


"Bhabhi...sorry main aaj aap ki madad nahi kar paayi...chaliye ab bataayiye kya karna hai main fatafat kar dethi hoon",Rewa's voice made her look away from Kesar.

"koi baat nahi Rewa.maine sab tayyar kar diya hai.tum baitho main abhi naashta lagaa dethi hoon...",she replied with a smile.

Rewa nodded and headed towards the table.She brought out the tray with the breakfast and then remembered that Baba was missing since morning.She had gone to give him his morning tea as usual but he had not been there in is room.She had searched for him everywhere then a servant let her know that Baba had gone to the temple.

"Rewa...suno...Baba abhi tak waapis nahi aaye kya?aaj achanak aise mandir chale gaye bina kuch bataye...",she asked and Rewa was about to reply,"woh bhabhi...aaj...".Suddenly she heard Kesar get up and say,"main jaa raha hoon.aaj mujhe jaldi jaana hai.office mein thoda kaam hai...".

She panicked.She needed to give him his present.She needed to wish him.She almost shouted,"RUKO KESAR...thoda sa kha lo...please...".At last he made eye contact with her.He seemed to be in a dilemma but then he gave in and sat down.She quickly went into the kitchen,served the kheer that she had prepared in two bowls and brought it to the table.She served both Kesar and Rewa who were quietly eating their breakfast.She then rushed to the place where she had kept the present,hit it behind her and walked towards the table with a smile.She was just about to wish him when she heard his voice,"yeh kya hai?... yeh kheer aaj ke din kyun banayi hai...".She was stunned to note the anger in his voice.He was still looking at the bowl with both his hands clenched into fists.She smiled hesitantly as she replied softly,"tumne mujhe bataya nahi lekin mujhe patha chal gaya ki aaj tumhara birthday hai...janam din mubaarak ho Kesar...".


There was an absolute silence for a moment and then she got the shock of her life when he smashed the bowl of kheer on the floor.She took a few steps back and kept looking at the broken bowl and the contents which had fallen everywhere.
Rewa tried to speak,"bhaiya woh bhabhi ko patha nahi..."Kesar looked at her, his eyes blazing with anger and Rewa stopped talking.Gulaal was still in shock and she almost jumped out of her skin when she felt his breath on her face.He was standing right in front of her.He stared at her blankly as he said in a cold tone,"main kabhi bhi apna janamdin nahi manaata aur mujhe yeh bilkul acha nahi lagta ki koi mere janamdin ko celebrate kare,mujhe tohfe de,mujhe surprise kare...samjhi tum...".He stared at her for a few seconds before turning around and making a hasty exit.She stood rooted to the spot unable to understand what had just happened.She heard the angry roar of the bike and knew that Kesar had taken off.


Rewa rushed over to her side,"oh bhabhi...meri hi galti hai...mujhe aap ko pehle hi bata dena chahiye tha...main bhi kitni buddhu hoon...socha hi nahi...arre aap toh kaamp rahi hain...chaliye baithiye yahaan..."

Rewa got her a glass of water and sat beside her.She felt a little better after drinking water but she could feel tears sting her eyes .Rewa saw the present in her hand and sighed,"mujhe patha hai...aapke mann mein bahut saare sawaal hain na...par bhabhi aaj ke din woh aise hi hothe hain...chidchide se...woh aap par gussa nahi the...bas apne aap se naaraz hain...".

"lekin Rewa usne aisa kyun kiya?itna gussa...maine kabhi use itne gusse mein nahi dekha...aakhir baat kya hai?"She saw the tears in Rewa's eyes as she replied softly,"Bhabhi...aaj hi ke din Ma hum sab ko chod ke door chali gayi thi...aaj hi ke din unka car accident hua tha...bhaiya apne aap ko zimmedaar maante hain unki mauta ka...unhe lagta hai ki agar unhone us din zid na ki hothi toh ma aaj bhi hamaare saath hothi...main toh bahut choti thi,mujhe toh unka chehra bhi yaad nahi...phir bhi main unhe bahut miss karti hoon...toh sochiye bhabhi, aaj ka din bhaiya ke liye kitna mushkil hoga...us din se bhaiya ne apna janamdin manana chod diya...pehle hum bhi jaate the Baba ke saath pooja ke liye lekin bhaiya ko bahut takleef hothi thi isliye ab sirf Baba hi jaate hain akele...patha nahi bhaiya kab yeh samajh paayenge ki isme unki koi galti thi hi nahi...woh to bache the...unhe kya patha tha ki aisa ho jaayega...mujhe maa ke na hone ka gham itna nahi satata jitna ki bhaiya ka yeh dukh...please bhabhi aap unko galat math samajhiye...woh bas apne dard ko chupane ki koshish kar rahe hai jo kabhi kabhi gussa banke baahar aa jaata hai..."She started to sob unable to speak anymore.Gulaal held her in his arms and tried to soothe her as she replied,"shhh...Rewa...tum chinta math karo Rewa...kuch nahi hoga...main hoon na...main sab theek kar doongi...".


When Kesar had started the bike he had every intention to go to the office but somehow he took a different road and now here he was standing at his favourite spot near the lake.He always came here whenever he felt confused,lonely or in pain .Today he was feeling none of those things...there was only anger within him and it was directed towards himself.He threw a stone into the placid water.The stone caused a few ripples and then quietly sunk.A picture of a shocked Gulaal entered his mind and he threw another stone to get rid of the image.Everything was his fault .Gulaal had nothing to do with it.He had got so pre-occupied thinking about her the whole night that he actually forgot the day his mother was cruelly snatched away from.It was his fault that he had failed to mention it to Gulaal.It was his fault that he could not control his anger when he saw the kheer.He could still see her happy,childlike,expectent smile and the present which she had been trying to hide.Why couldn't he have just talked to her like an adult?Once again his childish anger caused pain to someone he cared about.Suddenly he felt a sharp pain shoot up his body and he just fell to his knees unable to control his tears any longer.It had been his fault that his Ma lost her life that day.If only he had not been so stubborn...if only he had not made her go out...his childish tantrums cost his mother her life.He was now openly sobbing, crying out his heart unable to bear it anymore.


Gulaal wanted to make things right.She kept calling him but he was not picking up his phone.Why would he?He was hurt and angry with her right now.He had every right to be.She had been so inconsiderate.If only she had known...She sighed as the message "the number you are trying to reach has been switched off"was repeated .Finally she decided to go to his office because she knew she would be restless until she apologized to him but to her dismay he was not there.No one knew where he was.She was now very worried.When she came back home she tried to hide her worry but Baba could make out that something was wrong.She tried to keep the incidents from the morning a secret but then Rewa came upto him and told him the entire story.Baba called her to sit beside him and held her hand as he spoke,"beta...main jaanta hoon ki tujhe bahut chintha ho rahi hai...par fikar math kar main apne bete ko achi tarah se jaanta hoon.woh theek thaak ghar pahunch jaayega.bachpan se hi aisa hai beta...apna dard kisi ke saath bhi nahi baantta.woh humein dukhi nahi karna chahtha isliye hamesha use chupake rakhta hai par woh yeh nahi jaanta ki main uska pita hoon uske bina kuch bole,bina kuch bayan kiye...uski har aahat ko samajh sakta hoon...uske har dukh ko takleef ko jaan sakta hoon.jab woh apne dard aur gusse par kaboo paa lega toh ghar laut aayega...tu darr math...use kuch nahi hoga...".Baba's words made her feel better but still she couldn't let go of the worry.She needed to see him in front of her only then could she rest easy.


It was almost 11 in the night when Kesar made his way into the home.He had a spare key.Everyone seemed to have to gone to sleep because the house was shrouded in darkness.He did not want to disturb anyone.He was just about to go to his room when he heard his father's voice call him,"Kesar...".Baba sounded tired and weary.A light was switched on and he saw his father sit in his favourite rocking chair.He walked to wards him feeling guilty with eyes downcast."jee Baba?...",he asked hesitantly.


"beta...kahaan tha tu ab tak?tere peeche hum sab kitne pareshan the tujhe patha bhi hai?...Gulaal ne subah se kuch bhi nahi khaya...woh tere office tujhe doondhte hue gayi thi par tu wahaan nahi tha...aur kitne call kiye ...lekin koi jawaab nahi...aur upar se tu itni der ko lauta hai...beta tujhe yaad hona chahiye ki teri chintha karne waale ghar pe teri raah dekh rahe hain...".


He falls at Baba's feet and holds onto his knee as he replied,"main jaanta hoon Baba...mujhse aaj bahut badi galti ho gayi...mujhe is tarah se pesh nahi aana chahiye tha...is tarah bina bataaye jaana nahi chahiye tha...main aap sab ko pareshan nahi karna chahtha tha...main bas kuch pal akele rehna chahtha lekin phir waqt ka patha hi nahi chala...main aap ko kabhi dukh nahi dena chahtha...mera vishwaas ki jiye Baba...main aage se aisa kuch nahi karoonga jisse aapko takleef ho...mujhe maaf kar dijiye Baba...maaf kar dijiye...".

Som Mehta sighed.He understood his son's pain.He kept his hand on his son's head and patted him as he replied,"beta main samajhtha hoon...tere dard ko...main jaanta hoon tujhe kitni takleef ho rahi hai lekin ab tu bada ho gaya hai...shaadi shuda hai...tujh par kuch zimmedaariyaan hain...tujhe apni patni ke samman ka khayaal hona chahiye...aisa kuch bhi nahi karna chahiye jisse use chot pahunche...main jaanta hoon ki tu ne aaj jo bhi kiya woh jaan bhoojkar nahi kiya phir bhi beta aage se khayaal rakhna...aur maafi mujhse nahi tujhe usse maangni chahiye...jaa beta...jaa...woh tumhara intezaar kar rahi hai...".


Kesar got up with a heavy heart as he replied,"jee Baba...".He started walking in the direction of his room when he heard Gulaal's voice from the opposite side,"Kesar...".He turned around to see Gulaal standing near the dining table.She spoke softly without meeting his eyes,"Kesar...tumne kuch khaya nahi hai...chalo aake kuch khaa lo".He walked towards her and to his surprise there was not a trace of anger on her face and her voice revealed only concern and relief...nothing else.He was ashamed as he tried to say,"Gulaal main..."but he was cut off by her reply,"abhi nahi Kesar...pehle tum kuch khaa lo phir baad mein baat karenge".He nodded silently not wishing to contradict her.As he smelt the aroma of food kept in front of him,he realized that he was indeed quite ravenous.He was about to attack his plate when he noticed Gulaal sitting nearby idly."Gulaal...tumne bhi toh kuch nahi khaya chalo tum bhi kha lo...".She replied without looking at him,"nahi ...mujhe bhook nahi hai...".He could make out from her voice that she was lying.He did not say a word instead he went on to fix a plate for her and kept it in front of her.At last she looked a him.He could see the tears in her eyes as he gestured her to eat.She smiled and quickly took a bite of the roti.It made him happy and then he started to devour the food kept in front of him.


After an enjoyable meal in silence Gulaal started to clear the plates.She felt a lot better now.Her head had been on the verge of exploding due to the events which took place today.The stress and worry had took a toll and she had ended up with a severe headache.One look at Kesar back home safe and sound,her headache had almost vanished and now with her stomach full it had disappeared entirely.Just then she heard Kesar's sheepish question,"Gulaal...tumne aaj subah jo kheer banayi thi woh hai kya?maine toh chak ke dekha bhi nahi ..."She looked at him with a wide smile as she replied enthusiastically,"hai...main abhi leke aat hoon"and she rushed into the kitchen to bring him the kheer.

Later as Kesar entered his room he thought about how Gulaal's face had lighted up when he asked for the kheer.That had made her so happy.His smile disappeared when he realized that he had not yet apologized for his boorish behaviour in the morning.Suddenly something bright lying on bed caught his attention.It was the beautifully wrapped present...his birthday present.He had a huge smile on his face as he took the present in his hands and tore open the wrapping curious to know what she had got for him.He could not help but let out a little scream.It was a beautiful watch...a watch he had been wanting to buy for the past several months but how did she come to know?


"tum yehi soch rahe ho na ki mujhe kaise patha chala...par main nahi bataungi...",He jumped a little when he heard Gulaal's voice ring out.He turned around to see her standing at the door with a naughty grin.


she had heard him scream in excitememnt and knew that he had opened her present.He could not resist opening it.He had not even waited for her.He was such a child sometimes.She shook her head and headed towards the room.She stood at the door,saw him wear the watch and admiring it.She could see a small frown appear on his face and could guess what he was thinking about.


Her answer had startled him but he couldn't wipe away the happy grin off his face as he replied,"thank you Gulaal...patha nahi tumne mere mann ki baat kaise jaan li...jo bhi ho yeh tohfa mujhe bahut acha laga...ise main hamesha sambhaalke rakhunga."Then he was reminded of his rude beahviour and his smile faded as he continued,"Gulaal...aaj subah jo bhi hua uske liye I am very sorry.Mujhe maaf kar do.mujhe is tarah se tumhare saath baat nahi karni chahiye thi.I am so sorry...".
He was avoiding looking at her eyes.So she walked upto him and said,"nahi Kesar tumhe maafi maangne ki koi zaroorat nahi thi...galti meri thi maine bina jaane tumhari zakhmon ko khured diya...maafi toh mujhe maangni chahiye na...yakeen maano Kesar agar mujhe patha hotha toh main ..."


He cut her off as he replied,"yehi toh baat hai na Gulaal tumhe patha nahi tha...aur maine tumhare upar apna saara gussa nikaal diya...phir tumhe poora din pareshan kiya...tumne aaj din bhar kuch bhi nahi khaya...meri wajah se...main bahut bura hoon Gulaal hamesha unhe takleef detha hoon jo meri parwaah karte hain...meri wajah se maa bhi...".He stopped talking unable to go on any longer.The heaviness in his heart spread to his limbs and suddenly he felt too tired to stand.He sat down on the bed and then his eyes fell on the photo kept on the bedside table-his ma was smiling at him but today it did not comfort him at all.He did not know when the tears started to stream down his eyes.He was embarrassed.He did not want to breakdown in front of Gulaal.He tried to wipe them away with the back of his hand but he just couldn't stop.
"jaanti ho Gulaal...main jab chota tha toh bahut ziddi tha...har baat pe zid...jo cheez mujhe chahiye hothi use haasil karne ke liye main kuch bhi kar sakta tha aur tab tak sab ko tang karta jab tak mujhe woh cheez mil nahi jaati...us din bhi yehi hua...meri birthday party chal rahi thi...dhoom dhaam se...mere saare dost aaye hue the...sab kuch acha chal raha tha lekin mujhe cake pasand nahi aaya...",he chuckled sarcastically

"...haan mujhe cake pasand nahi aaya kyunki woh mere favourite cartoon character ke shape wala nahi tha...main ro ne laga...Ma ne bahut samjhane ki koshish ki woh kal zaroor leke aayengi par main apne zid pe ada raha...mujhe cake tabhi chahiye thi...meri wajah se Ma khud us cakeshop tak jaane ke liye tayyar ho gayi.main maan gaya...Ma ko gale se lagaya...Ma ne aakhri baar mujhse love you beta kaha aur phir hamesha hamesha ke liye mujhse door chali gayi..."Now that the dam had finally burst open he was completely overcome with emotions.


For a moment Gulaal stood rooted to the spot.She did not know what to say...she did not know what to do and then her instint took over.She walked towards him and gently placed her hands on his shoulders.He looked up with tears in his eyes.He looked like a lost little boy.Her heart melted and she hugged him to her bosom without giving it any further thought.He wrapped his arms around her waist in a tight grip as he spoke hoarsely,"I miss her so much Gulaal...har din har pal...kaash woh aaj yahaan hothi...lekin meri wajah se unhe apni zindagi kho ni padi...meri bachkani zid ki wajah se...".Gulaal remained silent letting him pour out his pain and frustration.She just tightened her grip around him and tried to soothe him by patting his back.They both remained in that position for some time.


Kesar opened his eyes.The tears had come to a stop.He was now feeling very lighthearted.He realized that he was in a very compromising position hugging Gulaal around her waist but surprisingly it did not feel awkward.It felt right.He was thankful for the support and warmth he was getting from her but he knew he had to let her go sometime.He loosened his grip and he could feel Gulaal move back.He looked upto her and was surprised to see that there were tear tracks down her face.He cleared his throat as he got up,"Gulaal...kya hua tum kyun ro rahi ho?"She replied instantly,"main...nahi toh main kahaan ro rahi thi?...". "acha...toh phir yeh kya hai?",he wiped a tear from her eyes and showed it to her.She touched her face and looked at him in surprise,"mujhe toh patha hi nahi chala ki main ro rahi thi...".They both looked at each other for a moment silently and then they burst into laughter.

They never spoke of the moment again.Later that night Kesar looked at the watch and came to the conclusion that this had been the best birthday in a very long time...


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Aww Mini, Thanks for this cutie Kesar, who is still not sure why he feels the way he feels about his wife, he unsuspected hug is enough for him to spend a sleepless night reminiscing the same…sigh how adorable can he get…Gulaal ,well what can I say she has fallen for him in a big way already…planning his birthday, getting him present, wanting to see that happy and content face….and still clueless about his tossing and turning around her….aww sigh these two……..

Kesar blaming himself for his mother's unexpected death…..poor kid who grew up thinking that she would still be around if he didn't insist for his favourite cartoon character birthday cake….he would have poured his heart out to her in that diary of his, it's such a major blow to anyone to accept someone they loved passed away getting something they wanted and he was but a kid of six….it's so difficult to come to terms with something like this….

Kesar's contemplation of what transpired within those few minutes and then blaming himself for that momentary loss of control …And Gulaal's shocked expression, something that will torment him, for unintentionally hurting someone he had begun to care about a lot…..beautifully worded para…

Loved the convo between MB and Gulaal, he is not trying to defend or justify his son's anger but making her understand how it's always been….his hurt and pain for his son's sufferings, his hope of lessening his guilt by understanding and sharing, being there for him…..

And then with Kesar where he is not blaming him for his anger but just making him aware of changed circumstances and his responsibilities, again beautifully penned down….

Coming to present, it was a pleasant surprise for him, and his childlike enthusiasm to get to it even before it was extended to him…aww isn't that sweet….him just extending that haq ,she is getting hand of his likes and fancy, she is beginning to get to know her Kesar…..

And finally the breakdown, something he always hid from everyone around, suffering in silence, enduring it alone for fear of pain it will bring to his Baba or Reva but there was urge to explain his behaviour, there was need for her to know and forgive, he would never intentionally hurt her after all she was his best friend who would understand his every need, every gesture, every emotion without a word being spoken……….

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Mini 🤗...yeh le jhappi for this long update...
So kesar is so restless and unable to sleep because of gulaal...very good...bahut achchi baath hai😉...I loved how she is planning to make his special day even more special...kesar n his gussa😡...poor gulaal...she did so many things for him today n he scold her...but kya kare...he is just like this na...very angry...I am very sorry for him that he lost his om on his birthday day n he is blaming himself for losing his mother...he is such a kid na...wow i liked how u brought up that lake scene here...Ohhh I just loved kesar-MB scene...love their bond...how kesar accepted his mistakes and how MB said him abt his responsibilities...so atlast she is able to make him cry n vent out all his agony of his lose...i am enjoying how their relationship is deepening day by day...loved the chappie...now waiting for the next one...

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Mini A BIG JHAPPI ..🤗for the awesome continuation and man Kuch kuch hota hai..UST hoing dher sara me SUPER LUBBING IT😳Aha to Madam ne pure Birthday ki Surprise planning kar rakhi thi...And Par par...Awww the emotional outburst was heart wrenching..The whole history of Kesar's zid being the root cause of losing his mother(at least he believes that) and the simulatneous Lashing out of Kesar and his inability to control his angerAhhh these two...Both worried for each other..I loved the pond k paas wala scene it reminded me of the original show..same angst and emotions Lovely recreation ...Awww to madam HITLER DIDI had actually got a swanky watch for Kesu which he always wanted..I love how she understands his mind..
Also loved how MB reminded Kesar about his responsibilities😊Nice scene and the final nail was the HUG and sharing of his pain with Gulaal...
"meri ankhon mein ansoo tere aa gaye..
pyaar se hai badi kya kasam..."
Ab jaldi se age k chappi lao..Now I want paap chii and LOTS of chii😳
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lovely chapii minizz loved how kesar tormented whole night awww so cute and gulaal knew his bday and was all set to celebrate his bday..cant be cuter...but the tragedy associated with it was sad and painful...i so feel for him and i loved how kesar vent out his frustration and anger and then then sharing his thoughts his pains with gulaal is what makes them a perfect hubby wifey remember day before she was the one who put her head on his shoulder and cried and now it was our brat...lovely i m lovely the bond they are sharing right now...and now i m waiting for some chiii too😳
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Mini...tereliye...

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Hi all,I just wanted to share this beautiful poster which Piu made for my story.Thank you so much Piu🤗This has made me so happy😃


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Hi Guys,here is the next chapter.Thank you all for your support and encouragement.It means a lot to me.Do read and comment😊



The beautiful posters have been made by Piu🤗


Chapter-7



A few days later Kesar was coming out of the office talking over the phone when he heard someone call his name,"Kesar...Kesar Mehta...".He knew the owner of this familiar voice.It belonged to Dushyant,his nemesis from college.Actually Dushyant was not a student in the college.He was an outsider who used to come into the campus to cause mischief.He was the typical rich, spoilt brat and not in a good sense.There were rumours about him being involved in drugs too though he was never caught in the act.One thing was for certain-he loved to create trouble.Kesar had become his target since the day he joined the college just because he did not give into the humiliating ragging ritual and stood up to him.No one had ever done that and from then on everytime they faced each other it would always end up in fist fights.Kesar still had reminders of those fights on his body.The constant visits to the doctor had his Baba worried.He had even faced threats to his life because he dared to punch Dushyant in front of everyone.They had got involved in a fight even on the last day of college and Kesar had come very close to being thrown into jail If it had not been for the college authorities who were sympathetic to his case.Dushyant had been not so lucky because he was not a student and the authorities had finally had enough of this outsider who kept disrupting the peace and corrupted the weaker students.There were rumours that he had to spend a week in jail because his family wanted to teach him a lesson.After leaving college he had never laid eyes on the guy.



Kesar closed his eyes as he clenched his fist trying not to look too agitated.He did not need this right now.What was Dushyant doing here anyway?He turned around to see his old enemy standing in front of him with a huge grin on his face.Kesar was confused.The guy who had always been ready to thrash him was now smiling at him!"Hey Kesar...kaise ho?"


Kesar stood tongue-tied for a moment because he did not know how to respond.Then he smiled awkwardly as he replied,"main theek hoon.tum kaise ho?yahaan kya kar rahe ho?"Dushyant spoke enthusiastically,"main tujhi se milne aa raha tha...suna hai ki teri shaadi ho gayi...hahahaha ab isme bhi hum se aage nikalne ki competition lagi hai kya?...Congrats Kesar...haan toh main yahaan tujhe invite karne aaya tha...main kal apne saare purane doston ke liye ek shaandaar party organize kar raha hoon...toh socha tujhe bhi is party mein shaamil kar loon.".Kesar was bewildered,"Thanks Dushyant...errr par party...mujhe kyun invite kar rahe ho apni party mein?"


Dushyant smiled as he replied in a sober tone,"Kesar...College mein jo bhi hua kyun na hum use bhula de...maine tere saare doston ko bhi bulaaya hai...acha mauka hai purani baaton ko bhoolkar ek nayi shuruaat karne ka...kya kehte ho Kesar?"


Kesar did not know whether to believe him or not.He sounded sincere but Dushyant's murky past caused him to doubt his intentions.Dushyant was now offering his hand in friendship and Kesar not wanting to cause any scene extended his hand to grasp it in a firm handshake."ok toh tay raha tu meri party mein aa raha hai...aur haan apni patni ko saath mein laana math bhoolna..."and before Kesar could give him a reply he rushed off.



On the way home many of his friends confirmed the news about Dushyant's party .They were puzzled by Dushyant's behaviour but they were also quite excited because the entire gang would be meeting up after a long time to have some fun.Talking to his friends put Kesar at ease.It would indeed be exciting.His friends had been after him for some time now.He had not yet thrown them a party or introduced Gulaal to them.Honestly he had been swamped in work but this would be a good opportunity.Gulaal will be able to meet with all his close friends though he was not very eager to introduce her to Dushyant.


He smiled thinking about what Gulaal's initial reaction hearing the news of the party would be and he was not disappointed when he heard her say,"nahi Kesar...party aur main...main kya karoongi us party mein...waise bhi mujhe parties achi nahi lagti...aur yahaan toh main kisi ko jaanti bhi nahi...",
"jaanti nahi toh jaan jaaogi...mere saare dost aa rahe hain...kab se mere peeche pade hain patha hai...woh sab tumse milna chahthe hain...",he replied and then he sighed dramatically before continuing,"lekin agar tumhe mere doston se milne mein koi interest nahi hai toh main force nahi karunga...main toh chahtha tha ki tum aao,un sab se milo...par agar tum chahthi ho ki main akela chala jaaun toh theek hai...",he replied in a visibly grumpy tone.



Gulaal bit the side of her cheek as she tried hard not to break into laughter.She could not believe it.He was trying to manipulate her emotionally but he looked so adorable doing it that she instantly replied with a smile,"acha baba maaf kardo mujhe...galti ho gayi...main chalungi tumhare saath...main bhi tumhare doston se milna chahthi hoon...ab khush".She saw Kesar's face brighten up.
"mujhe patha tha tum mujhe kabhi mana kar hi nahi paaogi...",he replied with a lopsided grin.



Kesar looked at his watch and quietly muttered,"kya kaha tha...haan...main jhat se tayyar ho jaaungi...mujhe toh waqt hi nahi lagta...main yun gayi aur yun aayi".His frown vanished as he smiled at his attempt to imitate Gulaal.He was outside the room waiting for her.It was so easy for guys.He had come back from office,taken a shower ,grabbed whatever caught his eye, which turned out to be a blue shirt and a pair of his favourite jeans and put it on without any fuss.After that he was promptly thrown out of his own room by Gulaal.He had been pacing around for the past half an hour but there was no sign of the door opening up.Now this was strange.He knew that she did not take such a long time to get dressed so he knocked on the door,"Gulaal...kya hua?tayyar nahi hui kya...".He heard some rustling.It seemed as if she was struggling with something and then he heard her muffled reply,"hmmm Kesar please zara Rewa ko bulaadoge...".Kesar was confused.Why did she need Rewa? "Rewa ko kyun?main hoon na mujhse kaho kya kaam hai?",he spoke in an agitated tone.He heard her reply immediately,"nahi...nahi tumse nahi hoga please use bulaado...".

"...mujhse kyun nahi hoga?ab toh main Rewa ko bilkul nahi bulaaunga",he replied feeling offended by Gulaal's statement.She seemed to be standing close to the door because he heard her soft sigh."please Kesar samajhne ki koshish karo..."."dekho Gulaal ab tum behas karne lagogi toh bekaar mein waqt barbaad hoga aur phir hum late ho jaayenge.isliye meri maano aur darwaaza kholo...maine kaha na main help kar doonga".


Gulaal looked at herself in the mirror and frowned.Usually it took her just 10 minutes to get ready but today the situation was slightly different.To be honest she was a little nervous.She was attending a party as Kesar's wife for the first time.She wanted to look good.She did not want to cause any embarrassment to Kesar in front of his friends.She had selected this saree after a lot of careful deliberation.It was a beautiful saree in deep red colour.The border was black and it had red stones beautifully adorned to form an intricate design.She felt comfortable in it.The only problem was the blouse.She now remembered why she hated those strings which seemed to be the only option in some.At home Talli had always been there to help her with these blasted things.She wished she had something simpler to wear but this was an exquisite black blouse with sheer net sleeves and today nothing else would do.She had been trying to tie up the doris(strings) at the back for the past 10 minutes and she could not believe she had been able only tie only one up sucessfully.Her arms were starting to ache and she was getting frustrated.She knew she needed help and therefore had asked Kesar to get help but Kesar's reply tried her patience.why was he being so stubborn? Was he really so clueless or was he pretending?She could not understand but she knew that now she had no other choice.She had to let him in because he would not call for Rewa."theek hai...ek second ruko...".


She opened the door and immediately she was pushed back to a side as Kesar entered in a rush.He was looking all around and she had to clear her throat saying,"uhhhmmm...main yahaan hoon Kesar...".


Kesar slowly turned around as he spoke,"haan bolo kya karna hai...tum..."and then words failed him.He took in the sight of Gulaal standing next to the mirror.She seemed to be exasperated and there was look of utter concentration on her face which was half hidden by her hair.She seemed to be struggling with something behind her.He did not know what to do.He wanted to laugh at her scrunched up expression which made her look like a little kid and at the same time he could not help admiring her.She looked stunning.Red was definitely her colour.The saree just helped accentuate her beautiful figure and he could just not take his eyes off of her.The black bangles in her hands made a melodious sound as they clashed against each other.She was wearing a small black bindi and he could also see that the little line of sindoor high up her forehead.It made him very happy.


"Kesar...ab madad karne aaya hai toh kar na...wahaan kyun khada hai...",he could hear the annoyance in her tone.He blinked and smiled as he walked towards her,"acha batao kya karna hai?".She looked at him hesitantly and turned around,"woh...ummm...is blouse ki dori ko baandhne mein tumhari madad chahiye...maine bahut try kiya lekin ho hi nahi raha...isliye kaha tha Rewa ko bulaane ke liye...".He looked at her in the mirror.She was looking back at him slightly nervous.He grinned as he replied,"arre bas itni si baat... isme kaun si badi baat hai...main abhi kar detha hoon...".Gulaal's hesitation seemd to vanish when she heard him talk.He did not understand why she was being so nervous.After all it was just tying up a few strings.He knew how to do that.He had been always proud about the fact that he had learnt how to tie his shoe laces perfectly at a very young age.So this had to be no different right.Just then she removed her hair which was covering her back and placed it to her side.The smile on his face vanished and he knew it was not going to be an easy task.He could not see the doris...the only thing that was visible to him was her beautiful,smooth,pale white skin.Thank God she was leaving her hair open.He didn't want anyone else see her like this .Only he had that right...Kesar shook his head.What was he thinking?and where did this possessiveness come from?He looked at the mirror and saw that she was waiting for him to do his job completely unaware of the effect she was having on him.


He moved his hands towards the doris which he could finally see after some careful perusal.To his surprise his fingers were trembling.He tried to concentrate on the task at hand and gave himself a mental shake.He saw that she had tied one dori but it was tied up clumsily which he knew would come off any moment so he decided to tie it properly.No sooner his fingers touched the knot and untied it,he heard Gulaal scream,"Kesar... kya kar rahe ho?..."He realized that his action had caused the sleeve of the blouse to slip off her shoulder and she had caught it before it could fall off completely.He knew he had to say something but he could not stop staring at the bare expanse of her skin.The temptation to trace her skin with his fingers and lips was slowly overpowering him.Who knew that this job was going to be so difficult?He blinked his eyes when he heard her say his name,"Kesar..." and he replied hastily,"woh tumne theek se bandha nahi tha...isliye...".He saw her glare at him through the mirror and then he saw an embarrassed smile on her face,"haan mujhe yeh knots baandhna bilkul acha nahi lagta...theek se hotha hi nahi mujhse...ab jaldi karo warna der ho jaayegi".He smiled back grateful for the fact that she had called him before he could do anything stupid.He quickly tied the doris into perfect little knots taking care not to touch her skin.As it is he was playing with fire,he needed to make sure he didn't get burned.With the job done he smiled in relief.He looked at his handiwork and he was proud of himself.He had done a good job considering the circumstances.He said happily,"Gulaal ho gaya...dekha maine kaha tha na...",his voice faded away when looked at her face.Her eyes were closed.Her face was flushed and he could see that her lips were quivering.So he was not the only one affected.He walked upto her...very close to her ear as he whispered huskily,"Gulaal...".He could feel her shiver and then he smiled naughtily as he almost screamed,"GULAAL...chalo warna pahunchte pahunchte party khatam ho jaayegi"and rushed out of the room.



By the time they reached the farmhouse which was situated a little away from the city, the party had already started.Judging from the sounds coming from inside,it was indeed a happening party.Kesar could see a lot of people.Many of them were unfamiliar to him.Dushyant seemed to be living up to his promise of throwing an extravagant party.As soon as they entered the venue,Dushyant rushed towards them.He looked drunk already as he said slurrily,"Kesar...tu aa gaya...Good...mujhe toh laga tha ki shaayad tum nahi aaoge...".Suddenly he turned to look at Gulaal and exclaimed,"Kesar...wow tu toh kaafi lucky hai ...tu ne bataya nahi ki teri patni itni khubsoorat hai...".Kesar did not like the way Dushyant was looking at Gulaal but he didn't say anything instead he just put his arm around her waist.He could feel Gulaal stiffen for a second.Of course his sudden gesture would have surprised her because he himself was taken aback at his spontaneous reaction .He pasted an artificial smile on his face as he replied,"Thanks Dushyant...haan main jaanta hoon main kaafi lucky hoon...".He turned to look at Gulaal who was looking a little embarrassed.Maybe he should remove his hand.He did not want to make her uncomfortable yet somehow he did not want to do so in front of Dushyant.



Gulaal was feeling uncomfortable due to Dushyant.He was looking at her as if she was some commodity to be sized up.Just then she felt Kesar's arm around her waist.She was surprised yet she almost sighed in relief at the feeling of security it provided.She smiled feeling embarrassed at her silly thought.


Dushyant guided them in and as soon as they entered Gulaal heard screams of "Kesar...finally you are here...".She looked at Kesar who was now beaming and saw a group of guys come over.They must be his friends.She smiled.Some of them looked familiar.She had met them when they had come for the marriage.Kesar introduced her to all his friends.Though there was an air of awkwardness at first it disappeared within no time as she started to interact with everyone.Soon they were treating her as one of the group and sharing stories of their college days with her.She was enjoying it.She was glad that she attended the party.Just then someone came from behind and closed her eyes.She was surprised because she knew who it was as soon as she felt the hands on her face.She removed the hands and with a huge smile turned around and screamed,"Talli..."


Kesar stared at Gulaal as she spoke with his friends.He looked around and saw that most of his friends seemed to have forgotten him and were completely engrossed in talking to her.Within a few moments she had managed to charm all of his friends.His close friends who had warned him and told him that he was making a mistake now seemed to be under her spell.He liked it yet at the same time the thought unsettled him.Once again the possessive side of him wanted to take her away from there.He was just about to do that using the flimsy excuse of meeting with other friends when he heard her scream,"Talli...".His smile froze.Oh...once again he had managed to forget about her completely.


"Talli...tu yahaan...pehle kyun nahi bataya...hum tujhe lene aa jaate na...saath aate toh kitna mazaa aata",Gulaal exclaimed.
"Di,main bas aapko surprise dena chahthi thi...waise papa ne bhi aakhri minute mein haan kaha...jab maine bataya ki aap aur Kesar ooh sorry jeeju yahaan honge tabhi mujhe permission di warna mera aana toh mushkil hi tha..."


He heard the animated talk between the sisters and he sighed.Of course he should have known she would be here.He turned around and looked at her.She was looking pretty as usual in a beautiful black dress.He waited for his heart to skip a beat as it usually did whenever he saw her but nothing of the sort happened.He was puzzled.The same thing had happened to him when he had seen her that day in the cafe but at the time he had reasoned that the thought of seeing Gulaal smile had wiped away all other emotions.



"Kesar...Kesar kya hua aise chup chaap kyun khade ho?...",he heard Gulaal ask him.He was about to reply when Talli complained,"rehne do Di...waise bhi jab se shaadi hui hai tab se yeh kuch badal gaya hai...hamaari dosti ko toh jaise bhool hi gaya hai...baat karne ki bhi fursat nahi na ise...".He smiled awkwardly not knowing what to say because Talli was saying the truth.He had changed.Before he got a chance to say anything he was rescued by some of his friends who took him away with Gulaal's permission.They had taken him to the counter where they were serving alcohol.They tried to make him drink but he did not give in deciding to stick to a soft drink.Somehow he didn't think Gulaal would like it.


Even though he was standing far away he kept an eye on Gulaal and Talli but then he lost sight of them when the lights dimmed and many couples took to the dance floor.He got worried.He did not want to lose sight of either of them.He excused himself and went looking for them.He reached the place where they had been standing before but they were missing.He looked around but he could not seem to find them.The lack of proper lighting and loud music was only making his task much more difficult.He was about to move away when he heard a commotion behind.

He heard Talli's familiar voice say,"Dushyant,please main dance nahi karna chahthi...".He turned around to see Dushyant holding Talli's arm and trying to take her onto the floor against her will.He got angry.The guy was back to his old tricks.He pushed through the people and reached Talli's side in an instant.He caught hold of Dushyant's hand as he said in a low but cold,menacing tone,"Dushyant,tum ne suna na...usne kaha ki woh dance nahi karna chahthi toh chodo uska haath...warna bekaar mein yahaan tamasha khada ho jaayega...".Dushyant who looked humiliated by Talli's refusal refused to let go and Kesar stepped closer to him and repeated,"maine kaha chodo uska haath Dushyant...warna bahut bura hoga...".Dushyant lost the battle of wills as he left Talli's hand.He stared at Kesar for a few seconds before he scurried off into the crowd.He looked at Talli.She looked a little shaken up.He held her by the shoulders as he asked,"tu theek toh hai na Talli...tu yahaan akeli kya kar rahi hai?Gulaal kahaan hai?woh tere saath kyun nahi hai?kahin dikhaayi nahi de rahi...woh toh yahaan kisi ko jaanti bhi nahi...".Talli smiled as she replied,"main theek hoon...tujhe Di ki bahut fikr ho rahi hai?...kyun?...woh yehi thi mere saath bas abhi-abhi wash room gayi thi...lo aa gayi...Di se is baare mein kuch math kehna...warna woh Dushyant ko nahi chodegi...yahaan bahut bada hungama ho jaayega...please...".He nodded silently and looked at Gulaal.



Gulaal could feel that something was wrong.Both Kesar and Talli had a fake smile on their faces and she knew immediately that they were trying to hide something but before she could ask them about it Talli did a vanishing act saying she had spotted some of her friends and she needed to talk to them.She was about to question Kesar when he spoke out in a rush,"kya tum mere saath dance karogi?"


Kesar could see that his question had caught her off guard.He could make out from her face that she was not convinced by his smile and was about to ask him what happened while she was gone and he did not want to lie to her.Now that he had asked her he decided to do it properly.He held out his hand as he repeated,"Can I have this dance with you?".He could see her smile as she replied softly,"Sorry Kesar lekin mujhe dance karna nahi aata...".He quickly cut in saying,"arre yeh toh slow number hai...isme dance karna toh bahut easy hai...please dekho sab log dekh rahe hain...hansenge mujh pe...mere reputation ke baare mein toh socho...".He gave his best puppy dog expression which he knew would melt her easily.He was proven right when she laughed and said,"acha baba...tumse behas mein jeetna toh naamumkin hai...ab chalo...".She took his hand as they made their way to the dance floor.At that moment the song ended and a new song started.This was not a slow number.It was a popular peppy song.He took a look at Gulaal's face.She looked ready to bolt as she said to him,"is par toh main dance kar hi nahi sakti...chalo chalte hain Kesar...".She turned to leave but he caught hold of her arm.She turned around and he pulled her closer to him.She collided into his chest as she held his arms for support.He smiled as he whispered,"Do you trust me Gulaal?"She looked into his eyes and she nodded her head silently without a moment's hesitation.He could see the absolute trust in her eyes and it overwhelmed him.He grinned as he said,"toh phir meri baat suno...sab kuch bhool jaao...just give into the rhythm and follow my lead...bas".She nodded once more .He placed her right hand on his shoulder and placed his hand on her waist.He then proceeded to hold her left hand firmly in his grasp and started moving to the music.The song started


Pyaar Ki Yeh Kahani Suno
Ek Ladka Tha
Ek Ladki Thi

Hoti Kya Hai Jawaani Kya Hai Suno
Ek Ladka Tha
Ek Ladki Thi
Woh Bhi Ek Daur Tha
Waqt Hi Aur Tha
Jab Woh The Ajnaabi
Dono Tanah Se The
Per Woh Kehte Kise
Baat Jo Dil Mein Thi

Gulaal felt a little nervous.She looked around and saw people all around.How could she dance in front of all these people?What if she made a mistake... then she felt Kesar sqeeze her hand.She looked at him as he said,"apni aankhein bandh karo aur yeh socho ki yahaan pe sirf hum dono hain aur koi nahi...koi bhi nahi...".She took a deep breath and closed her eyes.She listened to her heart beat...the rhythm of the music and without knowing it she started to move along with Kesar to the beats.


Gumsum Gumsum Rehte The Dono
Phir Bhi Dil Mein Kehte Dono
Koi Sapna Hum Bhi To Paaye
Ek Din Tute Gum Ke Woh Ghere
Jhilmil Jhilmil Aaye Savere
Masum Badla Jaagi Fizaaye

Kesar saw the dreamy smile on her face and knew she had let down her guard.The stifness in her posture had vanished and she was letting the music take control of her movements.She opened her eyes and grinned at him as she started to match his steps with confidence.He twirled her around and she moved around in a circle gracefully.He could see that the other couples had moved away from the floor.They were the only couple dancing right now.Everyone was watching them.He stopped thinking and followed the same advice he had given Gulaal.

.Woh Mil Gaye
Woh Khil Gaye
Aur Pyaar Ho Hi Gaya
Jo Chaha Tha Woh Paya To
Hosh Kho Hi Gaya

When the music came to a head he lifted her up gently and she threw her hands in the air in sheer abandon.As the music started to come down to a gentle beat he loosened his arms a little.He felt her hold onto his hair as her soft,sinous body slided down his own.They stood there for a moment,foreheads touching each other,breathing hard .Then in a sudden movement, he held her hands as he pushed her back and pulled her back in, her back facing his chest.

Pyaar Ki Yeh Kahani Suno
Ek Ladka Tha
Ek Ladki Thi
Hoti Kya Hai Jawaani Kya Hai Suno
Ek Ladka Tha
Ek Ladki Thi

His arms were around hers holding them captive.He loosened his grip a little as he caressed her face with his fingertips lightly.He felt her shiver.He continued to trace her skin along her arm and finally held her hand in a tight grip.He closed his eyes and placed his face alongside hers as they swayed gently to the music.

Holle Holle Ab Woh Deewane
Gungun Gaaye Dil Ke Tarane
Sunsun Jhoome Saari Hawaaien
Dhadkan Dhadkan Hai Bhehki Bheki
Tanmaan 2 Chahat Hai Mehki
Sapne Apne Jaddoo Jagaye

Inhe Dekhoge Jo Jaanoge
Kya Hai Nasha Pyaar Ka
Yehi Sochoge Yehi Chahoge
Sang Rahe Yeh Sada

She turned around in his arms,her hands holding his face.He opened his eyes and was amused to see the naughty look in her eyes as she moved away from him.She turned sideways, clapped her hands and tapped her feet along with the beat of the music.He followed her lead and did the same grinning at her.

He held out his arms as she moved back into his embrace.He held her close and he felt her arms snake around his neck.He could feel every inch of her soft curvaceous body against him.He looked at her.She was completely flushed,her hair was in total disarray,some of it falling on to her face and her sparkling eyes seemed to hypnotise him.He could see the real Gulaal for the first time-she had always been this wild spirit,completely uninhibited and carefree.

Gulaal could feel his intense gaze.She did not shy away or avert her eyes from his this time.She wasn't surprised when she felt his grip tighten around he waist as he pulled her closer.She had never been this close to him before.She could almost feel their lips graze but she didn't feel conscious.She was actually enjoying it.They swayed together gently to the soft music.

Kesar loosened his grip around her and moved back a little taking care not to let her go too far.

Pyaar Ki Yeh Kahani Suno
Ek Ladka Tha
Ek Ladki Thi
Hoti Kya Hai Jawaani Kya Hai Suno
Ek Ladka Tha
Ek Ladki Thi

Woh Bhi Ek Daur Tha
Waqt Hi Aur Tha
Jab Woh The Ajnaabi

Dono Tanah Se The
Per Woh Kehte Kise
Baat Jo Dil Mein Thi


They danced around the floor in fluid motion.They were now moving as one body.Both of them were smiling widely at each other as he ended the dance with a dip.Kesar held her in his arms completely ignoring the fact that staying in this position was causing his body discomfort.There was magic in the air and whatever pain he was feeling was forgotten.Their smiles slowly faded as they realized the position they were in.Their faces were too close,they could feel each other's breath.They both stared into each other's eyes and Kesar could see her eyes travel down to his lips.He wanted to kiss her,he did not care where they were...he just wanted to feel her lips against his.Just then he heard the room erupt into shouts,whistles and claps.He blinked and realized that the song had come to an end.He got her back to a standing position.He could see the crimson streak across her cheeks.He held her hand and led her to the side.She remained silent.He too did not know what to say.He looked at her and said,"Tumhe pyaas lagi hogi na...ruko main tumhare liye soft drink laata hoon" and he took off without waiting to hear her reply.




Edited by minizz - 13 years ago
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Mini, I am sorry I will have to res again...it's so late and I am tired so can't read but I promise I will update my comments as soon as I read the chapter...I have just managed to post my comments for the previous one...😳

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Mini once again I need to apologise for getting so late here, When you make it a point to comment as soon as you read my chapter all I can say is I will try and get better

So coming to the chapter I like introduction of Dushyant, college dada who's also involved in drugs and happens to be rich and spoilt child matlab puri tarah se bigde nawab and ofcourse Kesar had to stand up to him na,I am looking forward to the skirmish that will result everytime this two meet….Kesar is real boluram na,he meets his biggest nemesis from college who has turned a new leaf all of a sudden and this guy believes him….hey bhagawaan

I like manipulative yet adorable Kesu and this easy going Gulaal who loves being manipulated by her best friend,who she is falling for slowly but surely…And then Mr. grumpy who is hardly realising his wife's dilemma when he decide to be stubborn about wanting to help her…

I loved that tender moment between them, wonderfully penned down, both drawing closer and both are having that effect on each other let's see who is the first one to realise it…

The way his protective arm comes around her waist in an instant and the thought that crosses both their minds sigh! Again beautifully done, even though they are yet to realise it but they have already form a bond that is only getting stronger day by day….

Aww Kesar already Talli ko bhulne laga hai, just proves how strong the bond was in the first place,chalo no loss…

And finally the dance…beautiful, it was just magical, I could visualize each and every move as if it was happening in front of my eyes, awesome Mini, lovely…I want one more dance before it all ends…okay…Yeah le ek badi Jhappi for this beautiful update….Looking forward to the next one…

Edited by enchanted23 - 12 years ago
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Mini 🤗...what a magical chappie...
Offo...so Dushy is here...and that too in a spoilt brat avatar who is rich n bad too...what a change of behavior when he invited kesar for the party..looks like its just start of his revenge...may be I am wrong n may be he is actually interested to start new with kesar...but for now let me think that he is the same bad guy...wah wah what a way to convince gulaal to attend party with him...total nautanki with full on emotional athyachaar😆...the scene when he wants to help gulaal...ha ha ha he is so into helping her mode...that was a nice intense moment 😳...i liked the way both gulaal n kesar thinking abt kesar keeping him arms around gulaal waist...dushy is eyeing on gulaal...lagtha hai its gonna be a fight between dushy n kesar...so talli is here n kesar is full on shocked to think that he never thought abt her after marriage n she now doesnot have any impact on him...kesar saving talli n not informing the same to gulaal...looks like soon kesar's so called love for talli will be out...coming to dance...wow just wow...its s magical n I can actually visualize it...its so good with so much passion...
Looking forward for the next chapter now...please do update soon...

Edited by MR21 - 12 years ago

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