Gulaal: What If chp 26(part II) upd Pg 57

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minizz

@minizz

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Aditi🤗this was such a beautiful chapter.The whole G-K dynamic was wonderfully portrayed.starting at the beginning I really loved the way you subtly indicated that Gulaal did not let anyone else put colour on her except Kesar.Only Kesar has the right to smear Gulaal on her...no one else...that I loved.The DB-PB convo was good.PB's relief is misplaced na.She will get the shock of her life when she comes to know that her son's feelings for Gulaal have only intensified so all her plans of getting him married to Talli or any other girl his age are just not going to happen.DB's dialogues were dhamakeedaar.They packed a punch and every word of it was true.This is exactly what Gullu's mom Poonamba had said in the show too na.My Holi scene...awww it was just so beautifully executed😳loved it to core.very GKish.I loved Gulaal's reaction so much.It reminded me of their first meeting post leap on the show.aur bonus mein hug bhi mil gaya and it did not seem out of place at all.It was very natural.It was great to see Kesar,the charmer who knows how to pataofy everyone...loved how he was able to make DB forget her complaints and go into a defensive mode for him.awww so cute.hahaha so like Kesar...he can ignore her,remain angry with her,never talk to her the whole of those 3 long years but when Gulaal does the same for a mere 10 minutes the guy is not able to bear it na.Very true he always needed a reaction from her even if it was anger and disappointment he could take it but indifference from her-that was one thing he could never tolerate from her.So of course the confrontation had to take place.I loved Gullu's complaints a lot.She was baring her heart in front of him na speaking of her hurt caused by his indifferent attitude.This reminded me of my fav aur tu scene before the puja.I am so looking forward to the next chapter.want to know what Kesar is going to say?This was an absolute brilliant chapter yaar so yeh le jhappi for a job well done🤗

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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

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Posted: 13 years ago

#292

Here goes my update for this week,hope you guys will like it,as always please do not hesitate

to point out any errors,Thanks

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Poster Courtesy: Piyu

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Chapter 16

will I be able to love anyone as much as I did love you?

Gulaal hesitated a bit, so many question, so many grudges and so many complaints, he had to answer for all of that but at the same time she had to honour her promise to him about answering all his questions, her promise to PB of freeing him of this bond so that he could move forward in his life, her promise to Vasant of keeping the family united and above all her promise to herself of eternal commitment to Vasant and his love that transcended many lifetimes, It was time for her to transfer all her responsibilities over to him and move on in her life, mere thought of moving away from this family and more over her Kesar gripped her with unknown and unexplained anxiety, she was unable to understand or comprehend, still looking deep into his eyes that reflected so much affection and care for her, extending her hand towards his...

Gulaal,aaj sham ki tayaari ho gayee kya, koi kami nahi rehni chahiye hamri taraf se,aakhir JK ki izzat ka sawal hai,tumne sabke liye uphaar le liye hai na, PB entered forcing Gulaal to withdrwaw her extended hand immediately

Ha PB,dhyan se nikal gaya tha,main abhi jake phir se ek baar sab dekh leti hu,she left hurridly throwing a backward glance at Kesar who had disappointment written all over his face,Kesar too started walking towards door before PB stopped him with ,"Kyun apni Ba, se baat karne ke liye thoda waqt nahi hai tere paas,aaj kahi nahi jana hai,Devki ki Shaadi ke waqt bhi tu yaha nahi tha,pata hai woh kitni naraz hai tujhse..."

Nahi PB,aisi koi baat nahi hai,theek hai main sham ko ghar pe rahunga,per abhi toh...

Abhi mere sath baith yaha,Tu Talli ko itni acchi tarah se janta hai na,teri bachpan ki dost hai,yehi ghar main pali badi hai,iss ghar ke riti riwaj acchi tarah janti hai aur mujhe bhi bahut pasand hai,main chahti hu ki tu talli ke baare mein soche,agar tujhe..

Kyun Talli ke baare main kyun sochu? Aur kya sochu,Ha Talli meri dost hai per main itne saalo se saher main reh raha hu isliye keh nahi sakta ki usse janta hu,per aap yeah sab kuch...

Main chahti hu ki Talli ko tu apne jeevansathi ke roop mein sweekar kare, isse hame bahut hi kushi hogi

He didn't know what hit him for a second he was stunned and shocked into silence before countering with "Aap aisa soch bhi kaise sakti hai...." his voice was quivering with incredulity and anger "Meri shaadi toh Gulaal se ho chuki hai na, Mujhe samajh nahi aata aap ko ho kya gaya hai...."

PB had expected this reaction from Kesar knowing his attachment towards Gulaal which shrouded everything else even his ability to see how impractical the entire equation was ,She went near him and keeping her hand on his shoulder, spoke softly "Woh DV ek samjauta tha, jo waqt ki najakato ko dekh hame sweekar na pada tha,Gulaal ka iss ghar mein hona ham sab ke liye aniwarya tha ab halat badal chuke hai aur hame inn badale hue halato ko..."

Wah,mujhe nahi pata tha,ki rishto ki doriya halato ke jor pe judti ya tutati rehti hai,aap ne bhi toh MB se DV kiya tha na,kya aapne halato ko dekh kar ek samjauta kiya tha ya phir...

Kesar,hamari baat kuch aur thi,hum ne yeah nirnay apni marzi aur samjadaari se liya tha uss waqt hum dono mein yeah nirnay lene ki aur iske parinamo ko zelne ki shakti aur samaj thi,jab Gulaal ne yeah nirnay liya tha tum sirf 12 saal ke the,na hi iss rishte ki ahemiyat samaj sakte the na hi iski jimmedaari...Iseliye ab yeah jaruri ho gaya hai ki waqt aur halat ko dekh kar kiye gaye iss samjhaute ko tod diya jaye,aur tujhe apne jeevan mein aage badhne ka avsar diya jaye...

Chalo maan liya uss waqt mein nahi samaj sakta tha uss rishte ke saath judi hui jimmedaariyo ko,per jab aaj jab sab samaj sakta hu aur inhe nibha bhi sakta hu,toh aap mujhe piche hatne ko keh rahi hai,kyun,kya saari jimmedaari sirf Gulaal ki hi thi,hamari koi nahi uske prati? Aap ka dam nahi ghuta iss ehsaano ke bhoj ke tale dab kar?aur aap mujhse iss samjhaute ko...samjhauta hi na...ko tod kar aage badhe ke liye keh rehi hai...kyun?...kyunki aap ko samaj ka dar hai,kaha tha woh samaj jab apni hi bhai ki patni ke saath,,,,,..aur apne hi bhai ko...he couldn't say anything more...and turned away from his mother..trying to hide the tears that threatened to overflow from his eyes...

Kesar Gulaal ne khud iss rishte ko kabhi bhi sweekar nahi kiya,woh toh uss waqt tujhe uski jarurat...

"Main nahi janta woh iss rishte ke baare mein kya sochti hai,na hi janna chahta hu,Maine toh hamesha se hi usse apni patni mana hai aur main woh jagah kissi aur ko nahi de sakta,aur jaha tak jarurato ki baat hai,toh mujhe aaj bhi uski utni hi jarurat hai jo aaj se 8 saal pehle thi..."Saying he left from there leaving PB completely shocked and stunned...

Pb's talk had upset him, he went to his room and locked the doors behind him and took out Gulaal's diary from under his pillow and started reading it for the umpteenth time...

May 11

Vasant aaj mujhe na chahte hue bhi ek faisla lena pada,kya karti,tumhe diya hua vachan nibhane ke liye yeah jaruri bhi tha aur Kesar ko chod ke kaha jati main...

Tum toh samaj sakte ho na,ki iske alawa mere pas koi rasta hi nahi tha,Jamna kaki aur Dushyantji ke vicharo ko dekhte hue iss ghar ko ekatrit rakh pana kafi mushkil ho raha hai,per unke maan,samman ko banaye rakh ne ke liye mein apni nazaro mein nahi gir sakti thi,main janti hu mere iss ek tarfa nirnay ki wajah se Kesar ke sath kafi anyay ho gaya hai,agar MB hote toh yeah kabhi nahi hone dete,shyad iski nobat hi nahi aati,per mujhe vishwaas hai Kesu per,main usse bilkul waise hi banaungi jaise tumse vaada kiya hai...

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Jun 03

Aaj inspector saheb se baat karke aisa laga jaise ham bahut hi najdeek hai,uss accident ka sahi wajah pata lagane mein,Jisne bhi hame alag kiya hai na Vasant,usko apne paap ki saza to bhugatni hi hogi

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Apr 07

Tumne mere saath badi vaada khilafi ki hai,main tumhe iske liye kabhi maaf nahi karungi,mujhe iss vachan main baandh kar akele hi isse nibhane ke liye chod diya tumne...Mujhe agar pata hota toh main kabhi nahi yeah vachan deti tumhe...

Aug 15

Aaj Kesu mere liye bahut saari imli le aaya tha,uski pathshala ke bahar woh ped hai na wahi se,upar chad kar,Tum ne nahi kiya kabhi yeah,woh bahut jaldi bada ho raha hai aur samjhdaar bhi..

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July 7

Pata hai aaj main bahut kush hu, Mere janamdin pe Kesu ne mujhe hari chudiya bhet ki,aur maine bhi apna hath aage dhar diya usse pehen ne ke liye bilkul waise hi jaise tumhare aage dhar diya tha,kabhi kabhi aisa lagta hai ki woh meri saari baate samaj jata hai bina mere kahe...itni choti umra mein bhi...

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Sept 8

Mujhe lagta hai mere parvarish mein kahi koi galti ho gayee hai,Jua khelne laga hai woh,maine usse bahut maara Vasant..kahi woh koi galat raah pe nikal gaya toh,main toh ussi ka muh dekh ke roj jeeti hu na...

Oct 9

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Tumhare taveej usse pool ke pass..

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There was a knock on the door and he hastily closed the diary and hid it below his pillow before opening the door,it was Gulaal dressed in a red gagra choli trying to cover her head with pallu that had dropped off and she had left her hair open,he kept looking at her completely mesmerised

Gulaal snapped her finger at him and he immediately came back to reality getting out of her way so that she could enter..."Tu abhi tak tayar nahi hua,Devki aur uske ghar wale niche hai,MB tujhe bula rahe hai,chal jaldi aaja..." She turned to leave but he blocked her way by extending his arms and softly murmured.."Gulaal tu kabhi bhi kissi aur ko Vasant Bha jitna pyaar kar payegi"...

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Piu Chatterjee

@Transference

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+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#293

reswa🤗

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Adu pehle a big jhappi for always being punctual with updates..🤗Thank you so much for this..And this update actually wholesomely is worth the wait..I am happy..SUPER ECSTATIC!! ..Right from the beginning of the chappi..I loved how your Gulaal is a bit insecure..Her apprehensions are intact...We get to see a HUMAN Gulaal here..I lubbed it..👏

Coming to the PB kESR CONVO..I LOVED LOVED IT.👏..tHE WAY kESAR snubbed Talli ki baat and then not only justified his reason but also harshly reprimanded PB finally trying to knock some sense in her..Lubbed each and every dialogue..Specially the one -mujhe aaj bhi Gulaal ki utni zarurat hai jitni 8 saal pehle thi..This is just WOW!! Brilliantly done Adu.⭐️.I have read it a couple of times...👏

and finally coming to my fav part.👏.Ahhh the diary entries..Totally loved them...I now demand their date very quickly*throws a tantrum...* Awww Take ur time..But I am still in awe of the update..Thanks ...Waiting anxiously for the next one😍

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minizz

@minizz

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Posted: 13 years ago

#294

RES😭

Aditi🤗this was beautiful.I agree with Piu here.Your portrayal of Gulaal and her emotions is spot on and being ale to show her so realistically inspite of being a self-confessed Kesariya fan is such a huge thing.That first para is definitely my fav from Gullu's point of view.You expressed her feelings perfectly especially that bit where she extends her hand towards Kesar but pulls back as PB makes her entry.I loved that bit a lot.The journal entries were awesome.I really loved the one where she is complaining to Vasant.That was a simple entry but it touched my heart.It gives us an idea as to how hard it was for her to stay strong for the sake of that one "Tathasthu"...brilliant👏I also loved her child like excitement describing Kesar's antics and the Kesar's bangle gift wala entry was beautifully written.She might be writing to Vasant but those entries show us how important Kesar was for her survival.She might not have been able to carry on if Kesar had not been by her side.Now coming onto the dhamakedaar conversation between PB and Kesar.His utter shock and disbelief was beautifully shown.For him there can be only one girl and that is his wife Gulaal.I loved his dialogues so much especially the way he fends Gulaal's actions.Kesar from the show would have done the same if he had got his hands on that diary and knew about her reasons.That's why there is no tinge of complaint in Kesar's tone here regarding his DV with Gulaal at the tender age of 12.and my fav dialogue as I told you before "mujhe aaj bhi uski uthni hi zaroorat hai jithni 8 saal pehle thi"haiii main toh mar gayi😳 but the guy once again made me come close to tears uttering that last line "Gulaal tu kabhi bhi kissi aur ko Vasant Bha jitna pyaar kar payegi"...loved it.

but Kesar you don't worry yaar.Right now she may not love you like she loved Vasant.He will always be a part of her but you my dear friend will slowly become her entire world.You have your own special place in her heart and this time when Gulaal will fall in love with you it will be so different...completely different from the way she loved Vasant.At least that's what I feel.uff sorry rambling again.Let me stop here by saying that this was yet another awesome installment and yes just like Piu I too would like to thank you for your punctuality😃aur yeh le meri taraf se ek badi si jhappi🤗

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SRJKiShraddha

@SRJKiShraddha

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Posted: 13 years ago

#295

res

aditi🤗, i won't say much. mini and piyu said it already.

the kesar-pb scene was bang on!👏

omg i loved it totally😃

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alanta

@alanta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#296

mein yahan ek aur res karun?🤔

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without-fathom

@without-fathom

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Posted: 13 years ago

#297

Finally here, belatedly as has been such a habit - but well, let's start with the hug session

Aditi 🤗🤗🤗

Repetitive as I have sounded the last few times, I love the way you weave in this alternate story track. The diary entries were precisely penned. They started off with a seeming all-Vasant-ness with Kesar as the next primary. Then Dushyant and a brief on the DV, but nothing on the murder, a seeming lapse from writing... and then Kesar, Kesar, more Kesar. Her diary entries were like her Kesar mood of the day modes. And its easy to imagine how warm Kesar's heart must be reading these brief but candid confessions of her ceaseless concern for him, of how - a fact he believed and stated - her life revolved around him, and him only seemed to gain tangible evidence in this diary, her solitary confession place!

The end of this latest update - Kesar's simple question, yet so complicated when you think from Gulaal's POV and all that must go round in that head of hers before she can answer it, is such a bazinga!!! It's funny how the simplest questions, with the most obvious and undebatable answer are the ones which somehow compel us into an abyss of too much surround issues which should technically all matter lesser than the question and its addressed matter, yet somehow, we make all the periphery weigh higher than the consequential stuff, out of whatever worldly compunctions.

I'm ever so glad Gulaal did not over hear PB and Kesar's conversation - no surprises with Kesar's replies there, although a relief in the more resolved way he handled it despite the obvious agitation - but I guess we haven't heard the end of this at all.

Gulaal thinking to herself of the unimaginable prospect of leaving this house and Kesar - yes, the gap is a blackhole! It can pull her whole universe inside and yet feel empty minus of Kesar. And its all the more curious then to see what she will have to say in response to Kesar's question next update. If she does answer him right away of course!

Loving the flow of the story and your writing and detailing as always - and looking forward to the next part already!

Hugs,

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MR21

@MR21

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Posted: 13 years ago

#298

mera late RES 😭

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Aditi 🤗...wow this is another awesome update...

Loved the way gulaal is being sad thinking about going away from her kesar n living without him n letting him free from this DV...she is so real here...aww she had to extend her hand to meet kesar's na 😳...aahhh Pb ki timing😡 n gulaal have to take away her hand and leave kesar...Need to say I loved Kesar-PB convo...Bang on Kesar for just throwing away the thought about talli n just jumping in to take his Gulaal's side...loved how he said that why gulaal has to do all sacrifies in the name of responsibilities...Especially loved this below para...

"Main nahi janta woh iss rishte ke baare mein kya sochti hai,na hi janna chahta hu,Maine toh hamesha se hi usse apni patni mana hai aur main woh jagah kissi aur ko nahi de sakta,aur jaha tak jarurato ki baat hai,toh mujhe aaj bhi uski utni hi jarurat hai jo aaj se 8 saal pehle thi..."

Wow...all that diary entries are superb...loved how it is mostly about kesar...I liked the way she started to compare vasant with kesar in that imli bit saying even vasant didnot do this for her which kesar did...n then that bangle bit on her birthday when she did the same thing with kesar which she did with vasant...oohhh it has to stop at the murder secret revelation bit na

Kesar nighaarofying his gulaal 😳...loved it n he has to be mesmerized na...but that question is so simple but answering it will be a very difficult for gulaal...looking forward for gulaal reply...whether she will give any reply or being in galool mode she will just ignore his question saying some silly excuse...n he hid her diary below his pillow na...so will she see it by chance n come to know that he know everything...

Loved the chapter Adu 😃...looking forward for the next one already...do update soon...

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MR21

@MR21

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Posted: 13 years ago

#299

unres done in previous post 😳

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Aditi Mehta

@enchanted23

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#300

Originally posted by: MR21
res 😳

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Aditi 🤗...me loved each n every bit of this chapter a lot 😳
Thanks a lot Ramya🤗
Coming to the first line where gulaal scolds talli not to color her 😆(feels good as we didnot get it in the show even though when ever talli does any wrong thing gulaal never scolded her 😡
Ahh meri tamanna puri kardi maine..Talli deserved that😆
...bechaara kesar had to get the scolding for the things talli did ) as its only her Kesar's right to do that n the worst is that he is not even talking n meeting her n the family n aliened himself from the last 3 years ...so kesar aliened himself from family n especially his Gulaal without telling them any reason...
Typical Kesar na,never giving anyone reason for his behaviour but demanding answers from Gulaal all the time per fir bhi main toh uski diwani😳
Kudos for bringing up with this convo between PB n DB at this point 👏...Pb feelings happy that now kesar is not that attached to gulaal...how bad that being a mother she not understood kesar where in DB was bang on with her understanding about kesar n his bond with gulaal...DB me love you for giving that gyaan for Pb 👏...she totally need it from many years...
Ha DB is that gap which we always wanted to see in the show na,someone actually understanding Kesar and standing by him,trying to support his case in front of Gulaal
Need to say that I loved the next scene 😳...Kesar being the same kesar of Gulaal even after these 3 years...so just like before he first came to meet his Gulaal n making sure he colors her first...Thank you for this Holi scene 😃...we wanted this in the show after post leap...Gulaal being overwhelmed seeing her kesar after all these years...her reaction is so real when it comes to kesar na 😳...ohh he is very upset n guilty for his behavior na ...but no worries as he is again here for being her kavach...me loved loved loved the hug between them which reduces their distance of all these years ☺️
Ha you need to thank Mini for that one,she wanted it and I just complied,I am glad you liked it😳
Loved the bond between DB n Kesar...he is totally in explanation mode seeing her na...he is so desperate to talk about an exception for his behavior and got a slap 😆...gulaal being his kavach trying to save him from Db...but kesar is too good when it comes to pacify Db na n making sure no one will scold him now...so Pb is thinking about Db words...I hope she understands n dont go blindly with sudha's words for marrying kesar to talli which will never happen...me also liked the way kesar broke down in front of Pb...
Well Kesar has that child like quality in him that's so endearing and he can get away with anything na,phir DB ko toh manana hi tha na,aur ha mera Kesu sirf DB se thappad khata hai Gulaal se nahi😉
Ohhh Gulaal being all ignoring n indifferent towards kesar n he is unable to take it...he is like this na always wanted her full attention 😳...but me liked that gulaal is bhaavkaying n being aloof...he is so desperate to take her punishment n go back to their previous bond...bas gulaal baath karna chod de toh bhanda kuch bhi karne ke liye ready ho jaatha hai na 😉...so he read Gulaal diaries n he know what she is going through all these years n how she is killing herself slowly...not to worry when her kavach is going to make her live again...
Ahhh I just loved the way he said how can she make him a paraaya when he did this to her n I loved that she didnot stop pouring out her heart in front of him n her accusations about his behavior all these years...bas madam baath karne lagee aur sir ne toh punishment lene ki aur punishment kahaa lena hai uss place ka bhi decision le liya 😆...how can you stop the chapter there when he is giving his hand for her to hold without giving us her response to his gesture 😡

Arrey yaar gussa nahi kar toh diya na update
Loved it Aditi 😃...holi scene n of course there meet after all these years n his ways to make her talk to him...so as Kesar read Gulaal's diaries...he will be knowing about vasant's death truth...does he also know about Dushy kidnapping gulaal...if yes then why he is not concerned about dushy in this chapter...or his main n only concentration is on gulaal n his reason to come here to ask about why cant she keep trust in her kavach by letting him know about the truth...we didnot get any convo between kesar n dushy...do u have a plan to bring it up in next chapter...me eagerly waiting for the next chapter now as we will be getting similar scene where in kesar n Gulaal will be going to that outskirts place all alone on his bike without anyone to disturb them...

ps: patha nahi kya kya likhaa hai maine 😕...me in office n ghar mein net is being dabloo from couple of days ...so me unresing in office...there were many distractions when I am unresing it...so bear with my comments...
ALL THE BEST for the exams...prepare well for them...
Thanks for lovely comment Ramya🤗 exams khatham aur don't worry each and everything made complete sense,ab aage padhne ke liye tayyar ho ja😛

Originally posted by: MR21
mera late RES 😭

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Aditi 🤗...wow this is another awesome update...
Loved the way gulaal is being sad thinking about going away from her kesar n living without him n letting him free from this DV...she is so real here...aww she had to extend her hand to meet
Yes I think Gulaal's sole reason to stay in that house was Kesar and she could not have turned completely blunt to his feelings all of a sudden
kesar's na 😳...aahhh Pb ki timing😡 n gulaal have to take away her hand and leave kesar...Need to say I loved Kesar-PB convo...Bang on Kesar for just throwing away the thought about talli n just jumping in to take his Gulaal's side...loved how he said that why gulaal has to do all sacrifies in the name of responsibilities...Especially loved this below para...

"Main nahi janta woh iss rishte ke baare mein kya sochti hai,na hi janna chahta hu,Maine toh hamesha se hi usse apni patni mana hai aur main woh jagah kissi aur ko nahi de sakta,aur jaha tak jarurato ki baat hai,toh mujhe aaj bhi uski utni hi jarurat hai jo aaj se 8 saal pehle thi..."

Thanks yaar again I think this is what Kesar would have said,had he known Gulaal's reasons for hiding the truth

Wow...all that diary entries are superb...loved how it is mostly about kesar...I liked the way she started to compare vasant with kesar in that imli bit saying even vasant didnot do this for her which kesar did...n then that bangle bit on her birthday when she did the same thing with kesar which she did with vasant...oohhh it has to stop at the murder secret revelation bit na

Nahi they not all abt Kesar,if you look He is reading it randomly..the dates would suggest that,again marking the one he would like to re-read,typical Kesar na😳

Kesar nighaarofying his gulaal 😳...loved it n he has to be mesmerized na...but that question is so simple but answering it will be a very difficult for gulaal...looking forward for gulaal reply...whether she will give any reply or being in galool mode she will just ignore his question saying some silly excuse...n he hid her diary below his pillow na...so will she see it by chance n come to know that he know everything...

Loved the chapter Adu 😃...looking forward for the next one already...do update soon...
Thanks yaar,will try and update this Saturday😳

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