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Posted: 14 years ago
Oh..no chodo..na..Its a fiction story..dont take it to heart re...n I know h u r feeling...its not easy to portray..things about grief.....we are not stone hear ted na...but let it..be..😊now cheer up..Arti...😃





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Posted: 14 years ago

Arti...thanx for such a wonderful chappiii n bonus...!!!
tune to mujhe rula dia re..!!!!😭
Nicly written...!!!!!!
This is for u Arti...!!!!!❤️
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Posted: 14 years ago
Arti arti arti, i love u 🤗 what chapters yar, fantastic fantastic 👏 i dont have words to explain yar how me feeling, sad, happy, crying, laughing, u have put all emotions in these two chapis, chap 10, vasant died, i was like 😛 but suddenly 😕 then 😭 n then wo sab, kesar kesu n all ne bardasht kiya... vasant bha jo kesu k liye sab kuch thay he died 😭 i felt like crying n in chapter 11, at these lines:

he played vcd and sat in the sofa he saw his vasantbha...he saw his vasantbha teaching him to walk .he saw vasant holding his hand and make him walk slowly slowly he saw his vasantbha leaving his hand in middle and with open arms called him "aaja kesu jaldi aa jaa vasantbha k pass" and he came running in his arm..he saw vasntbha palying hide and seek with him he saw vasantbha playing toy gun with kesar he saw his vasantbha acting like a deadman as kesar aimed toygun at him and wen he kesar got frightened vasantbha started laughing, saying don't worry I m here...he saw his vasantbha hugging him wen kesar was afraid with crackers noise vasant put his hand on his head and said don't worry I m here...he saw his vasantbha bringing lots of gifts for him even wen he didn't asked just to see kesar happy...kesar was looking at it and sobbing bitterly...

literally thr r tears in my eyes right now, oh this pain in unexplainable yar when ur dear ones, whom u r so attached with, they go away forever like this n u look at the pics, their videos, listen to their voice in them, u close ur eyes n thr every thing feels like alright, they stand their in front of u, laughing, talking, walking eating... oh arti so fantastically u wrote all this... i love u yar...

n kesu k hath se laal rang on dupatta of gulaal... 👏


oh thank u so so so much yar, thank u thanku thanku... chapter 12 kab ayega 😳???
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: chweetu

Oh..no chodo..na..Its a fiction story..dont take it to heart re...n I know h u r feeling...its not easy to portray..things about grief.....we are not stone hear ted na...but let it..be..😊now cheer up..Arti...😃






siree 🤗 yar kya chapters likhe hen arti ne, fantastic yar, mujhe to samajh nahi araha praise kaise karun, words hi kam par gaye yar, lovely chapters n now waiting for chapter 12, v r so greedy for the chapters na 😆
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Posted: 14 years ago
At last u sent vasantji to YAMLANDdance cat smiley yepeee
but u know the way u have presented the situation after his death it's way too painful yaar, i was crying like hell after reading rest of the story, its so touchy , bravo,wat level of thinking u have
special appreciation for these parts-
Kesar who was standing there blankly turn around and saw his vasantbha lying silently, a holier grace shone on his meek face?..kesar looked at him for few second and then he saw the blood clot on his forehead kesar got scared kesar remebered the day wen he got injuried and his vasantbha came to him embraced him and gently wiped his blood... he came near to his soulmate his companion his father his best buddy he took the bed sheet in which vasant was lying and started wiping his clot- my eyes started burning and tears automaticaly came out,such pathetic and emotional situation.
in the similar way he wiped the blood that already dried he cried "vasantbha ghar chalo na" , ghar chalo na vasantbha"-ahhh its just too painful
But the body was cold, the loss was irrepearable no sorrow now could touch his heart and after several attempts she was no longer left in doubts she struggled no more and the agony of her soul found a vent in one loud long and final scream of despair..she shouted "vasant"-arrey yaar tujhe chappi manga tha tune to flood karwa diya
loved the phrase u included it was awesome.
it was doctor seithi who was shouting -find this man, iske sare bones ka chalk powder bana kar dewar paint karna hai mujko,sadu how dare he shout at our kesuda.
doctor said "mein kya karu agar pehla din hai abhi yanha se jau aur jab job karne k liye ready ho to aana"-main aati hun buddhe, i do chopping jobs very nicely.
Kesar was about to leave gulaal said "kesar agar mujhe jara sa bhi apna mante ho to tum yeh job chod doge"-apse jyada aapna aur kaun hai😉
2 moth passed-arrey arti ko bhi leap ki bimari lag gayi😆
kesar looked at gulaal ..gulaal was walking quitely?..her duppata was half on her shoulder and half brushing on the road kesar bent down and lifted the duppata...he looked at gulaal an gave her duppatta an she took her white duppatta unknowingly the kumkum that was in kesar 's fingers had stained her duppatta red...bingo here comes hamare dil ka chain, yaar phir se 6 mnts ka leap lele aur likh dal mohabbat ki dastan.
and again thank u for chap 10-11 they are fab.
oye u gave us such beutiful chappi's na to tere liye accha wala sher ye le:
Jab roshni na thi rahon mein, tanhayion se the ghire
berang tha hosho alam , khwab the jale hue
andhera odh kar ,apna noor humpar luta diya,
apni badi shiddat se apne lahu ko hamari zindagi ka rang bana diya.
at last one request to sp cv's pls go and sell tuntuna on street and aarti pls take up the charge, u'll do it better.
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: truedecent


siree 🤗 yar kya chapters likhe hen arti ne, fantastic yar, mujhe to samajh nahi araha praise kaise karun, words hi kam par gaye yar, lovely chapters n now waiting for chapter 12, v r so greedy for the chapters na 😆



yes..yaar..kiran...🤗..we are greedy..but Arti is still moody.....kya kare...😕
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Posted: 14 years ago
Truly awesome... vasant death scene was very well written...i jus has tears in my eyes when i read poem... looking forward for passionate scenes betn gulaal n kesar...
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Posted: 14 years ago

Kiran wait kar yaar...sabar ka fal metha hota hai...!!!!!😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
siree: yar v just get on arti's head n yell give us another chap give us another chap, use itna torture de dete hen😳 per kya karen, is men itna maza ata hai aha 😈 so arti chapter 12 now, chapter 12 chapter 12 chapter 12 😆

minu: han han han i want the meetha phal, give me give me, i want meetha phal i want meetha phal, per abhi chahiye abhi chahiye abhi chahiye 😆
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: truedecent

siree: yar v just get on arti's head n yell give us another chap give us another chap, use itna torture de dete hen😳 per kya karen, is men itna maza ata hai aha 😈 so arti chapter 12 now, chapter 12 chapter 12 chapter 12 😆


minu: han han han i want the meetha phal, give me give me, i want meetha phal i want meetha phal, per abhi chahiye abhi chahiye abhi chahiye 😆



hehehehehe...we turned all wicked...😉😆 n Arti...we want chapter 12...😳😆

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