My beloved - a forbidden love (a happy ending to be updated in pg 11)

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sanum23

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Posted: 9 years ago

#41

nice

but kaka and sam trying to make him understand wat is father in real but he thought after all he is his father never do anything which harm him

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tooba ilyas

@doll.12

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Posted: 9 years ago

#42

part 5 ... It's sad to see this all happens to them ... Maan with determination dropped the bomb on their parent that he wants to marry geet and is in love ... Slowly the shock on their face turned into anger and yash tried his best to manipulate his son mind but failed.. He knew ... Maan will never change his opinion nor will back off... Mohini ... Stepped in and said she will try to make him understand .. In room.. They were happy... And contented ... But damn who knew ... What's in store for them... Sameera .. Ran in room and handed the essential need to them and asked her to run ... Nakul kaka ... Too tried hard but they were fixed on the point that mohini will help them ... Mohini came and gave them the approval making them happy... Uff... Its so heart aching to see this all happening.. Don't know how did they die.. But heart ache so much ... Uff uff

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khwaishfan

@khwaishfan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#43

lovey update! thanks 4 da pm! Maan determined! he tells his parents he wants 2 marry Geet! his dad angry! Mohini says she will speak 2 Yash! Sameera tells Maan 2 elope with Geet! Nakul agrees! Maan refuses! Mohini says she has accepted Geet! update soon

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Priya21

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Posted: 9 years ago

#44

awesome update he confessed love fo her ...loved it

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preetidhawan

@preetidhawan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#45

Nice Update

Maan confessed his love for Geet in front of his parents and his father was angry beyond limits, Maan,s mother assured them and they believed her, Nakul and Sameera were trying to help them as they don,t believe Maan,s parents but maneet did not listen them, maneet,s marriage preparation going on but I think unhe dhoka milega

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kabslocks

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Posted: 9 years ago

#46

Superb update. Has Yash and Mohini planned something to separate them.

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janu2006

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Posted: 9 years ago

#47

gr8 parts,,

cont.soon

wonder what they have planned for maaneet

thanks for pm dear

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Shaun

@Jade0001

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Posted: 9 years ago

#48

Firstly I apologize for such late response , I have been unavailable for a while and only going through my PM's from yesterday

Chapter 5

Maan's father is angry that Maan has chosen Geet to be in his life he tells Maan that Geet is his sister that part is understandable but pushing Geet down to the floor insulting her father that was wrong of Yash .

both Nakul and Sam believes that Maan's parents are surely planning something big but his mother comes to them giving her approval for marriage and now I'm thinking that both Nakul and Sam must be right how can Maan's parents agree so easily when his father is concerned about his status in society

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nadia khan

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Posted: 9 years ago

#49

lovely update sad ending to a great story maaneet were so lost in their happiness they didnt see the danger coming in form of theose ppl whho claimed to love them when infact only had their own greed in their mind geet was at sams place mohini who was faking from start took geet away with her and evn told not to tell maan who was shocked to know when sam told her geet was his mom he felt warniong bells he reached home to see his evil bro out geet was dead and even took her ccomplaint back maan was shattered he was madly looking for his geet finally nakul told her se is at home he came home oo ly to know his geet was dead ghe had got his familys confession of killing her maan was all lost he wasnt alive anymore his family was shocked and in remorse but it was too late as maan went with his geet to place where no one will seperate them ever

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SOUWMIYA MURALIDARAN

@vishuv

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Posted: 9 years ago

#50

Don't say like that dear! You are a wonderful writer! In all your stories I have seen you experimenting different ideas...and even here too...Sheena Bora's murder case. You are very good in this genre...your writing is so fabulous 👏 Why do you get discouraged? We are here for you. Moreover my first ever comment is in your story only...same 'My beloved' story. Even though I am a Rishbala fan...I came here to read this story since you have written it. I think if you want more response...you can post the story in the FF Index. Geet Forum and MB Forum maybe inactive since the show went off-air. So you needn't worry. Next time you post your story in FF Index or Writers Corner. Consider my suggestion dear. There you would get so many readers who would read the story based on your writing skill. If you feel like am advising you, ignore my words.

You are such a talented writer. As you had already said you are researching about any topic you are gonna write so that you won't give any false info to your readers. Your characters have their own shade. No one is completely good or bad, you humanize even the antagonist which is an appreciable job...You have a wonderful future in writing! Your command of the language, your characters and emotions are a huge plus to your writing. They speak about your writing. And please erase the word that you are writing boring stories. I am discovering many traits of human beings in your story. And the suspense and thriller is worth the wait and read.

Ok, I actually forgot that I came here to comment. I am sure you will win the competition. Your efforts, imagination and creativity is gonna pay of. Will be waiting to read your success speech by then 😃

Coming to the story, this is expected. But still I expected Geet to be alive. Oh My! How she would have felt when all the drama is just a game and to be killed by her parents?

The deception by his own parents and the death of his beloved has nearly killed him. He is already dead before he slit his wrist. He became insane seeing his beloved dead. Only his Kaka is good. Others were involved in the crime. This Mohini is a dog. Doesn't think twice before killing her own daughter. I want her dead, not in the prison. Yash is not any better. Is his stature so important than his son's happiness? All for this good for nothing Ranveer!

I was startled when Maan pulls out Geet's heart stating that her heart always beat for him. He became beyond ruthlessness, beyond insanity. Their love is forbidden...but true, genuine and unconditional.

Happy to see them at peace at last. No force can separate them now.

Hats off to your writing! It made me laugh and cry along with the story. Not every writer could do this 👏

Thanks for PM

Edited by vishuv - 9 years ago