Short story: Just one day (Note - P 33)

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khwaishfan

@khwaishfan

Elite

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Posted: 8 years ago

#141

terrific update! well written! Geet sees Maan! she goes n speaks 2 him! she shares her past with him! she says she is a good listener! Maan wants her 2 stay for a while! she agrees! update soon

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KawaiiGeet

@kawaii_geet

Sparkler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#142

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beautful update veil...
i want to write so much but in all honesty, i am very much disconnected with this story
I will read it all over again and get back😳

Edited by kawaii_geet - 8 years ago

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Cartoon.Buff

@Cartoon.Buff

Inactive

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Posted: 8 years ago

#143

Beautiful setting for a heart-to-heart conversation; despite the melancholy, it was somehow soothing.

Good to see Geet reaching out to Maan, her discomfort around him and her wariness due to stutter gone.

Geet has had a difficult life. Her stutter, her brother's suicide and probably her parents' are not around either. She has managed pretty well and I am glad she has people like Param and Tara in her life, who care for her so much.

Got to see a new side of Maan. I liked how he shared his thoughts with her and not drive her away. It was nice to see him accepting his mistakes and Geet not judging him.

Looks like there is more of this night left, please continue soon.

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Sundari

@Param-Sundari

Stunner

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Posted: 8 years ago

#144

Kidhar ho ji, craving for an update

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take_a_hint

@take_a_hint

Inactive

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Posted: 8 years ago

#145

Amazing

Their paths collide and they develop a soothing connection

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khwaishfan

@khwaishfan

Elite

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Posted: 8 years ago

#146

update wen u can, thanks

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Commelina

@Commelina

Voyager

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Posted: 8 years ago

#147

Yippie

Was waiting for this one

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This was so damn beautiful Veil.
I've told this so many times that I guess I'll start sounding like a broken record. You create beauty with your words. It's like you see them in your mind and paint them on the canvas.

And you know what makes this update, this story even more special and dear to me. So thank you for that. He's like the unheard melody here. invisible but still effective.

And the selfish guy is growing on me. It's always the circumstances that mould us. We are the amalagamation of our environment, of our past of the people we spend our time with and of the situations we were met with. This story is teaching me not to take a person at face value and also that people are evolving and changing all the time. He is attached to this house and he has had memories. It makes him feeling man, a person who's not ready to sell a house, man he is an emotional guy. How am I supposed to call him self centric now?

Don't know about G but I am in danger?

Oh Heart of mine! How many times so I have to tell you not to be impressed easily! You are too emotional for your own good.

High expectations we have from our man! He better be ready.

I loved that they are beginning to be comfortable around each other.

And I guess I don't need to tell you that they scene where she is remembering her brother and her brother's name on her index finger,loved that part.

Where's the other guy? Param. I like competitions. Yeah I am a weird that way.

Geet and Mean Guy, they are alike in some ways. Both have lost their favourite people. Her parents? Where are they? Did you mention about them and i have totally missed it?

Both have been lived alone for long now.

And also this dropping thing is beginning to become a ritual. I hope it does. Is there going to be a message again? I love their messages.

Something like...Appreciate it.

Thank you.

Edited by Commelina - 8 years ago

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Kkiran

@Kkiran

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#148

Wow they are going to remodel some parts of the house ! Maan showing this diffferent side might have geet falling for him.

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Sundari

@Param-Sundari

Stunner

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Posted: 8 years ago

#149

Hah... I wait for this like a hawkkk... N small updates just don't quench me,

So that was the reason of the absence of notmepls guy 😆

They can relate to each other so well because of their pasts,

N that's the reason they are drawn to each other at first place

Now to let the guard down n allow someone to enter that deserted heart again is difficult, nevertheless life moves on, n we have to catch up now or later

The memories always make us cry, be it happy or sad,

someone who only has memories of losing loved ones,

Try to avoid them most times, yet sometimes some people make it impossible to keep them at bay, and the mask slips!!