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spoorthi

@sporthy_smile28

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Posted: 7 years ago

#901

and we are reliving geet days

nice😊

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spoorthi

@sporthy_smile28

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Posted: 7 years ago

#902

i officially declare my self dumbo

how did i not get it earlier

this was your take on "Geet"

the hurried wedding

cheating groom

humiliation

her fighting the world!

office... boss fights... love everything!!

i'm stupid!😆

i didnt figure it out soonar

but that part after muskans revelation to maan was brilliant⭐️

from the panic of her friends, to confusion of maan

and a completely clue less little girl crying for her mother

its so well written!

it was one of the best chapters so far in this story!

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spoorthi

@sporthy_smile28

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Posted: 7 years ago

#903

😲

i had this question running in my head for so long

so muskan!!

this was such an un expected twist

why is life so complicated?

i want to say more but maybe later

mujhe bhi tho ye dhamake ko digest karna hai😆

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spoorthi

@sporthy_smile28

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Posted: 7 years ago

#904

now that every thing is good and everyone is at piece with their lives

happily ever afters are too much for my liking so

i think its time for me to rest this story😊

Doc did manage to turn the heroin to heroine😆

and the whole geet manao thing was way too cute

there are few missing elements which would have added little more depth to the story but this was your first attempt

and first attempt k liye this was far well written

humne suna hai your current stories gems i shouldn't miss😉

thoda zadda makkan maar rahe hai log tumhe

dont you think so😆

will get back to them too but as i said need a little more time

coming back to the story

this was a emotional rollercoster ride

i thoroughly enjoyed reading it

Do keep writing

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spoorthi

@sporthy_smile28

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Posted: 7 years ago

#905

Originally posted by: LovelyUmang5
very nice story..

😲
ye kya hai

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Hope

@LovelyUmang5

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Posted: 7 years ago

#906

Originally posted by: sporthy_smile28

😲
ye kya hai

mera dimaag switch off ho gaya hai.. toh kuch nikal nhi raha baahar..
THanks to you😡

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spoorthi

@sporthy_smile28

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Posted: 7 years ago

#907

Originally posted by: LovelyUmang5
mera dimaag switch off ho gaya hai.. toh kuch nikal nhi raha baahar..
THanks to you😡

enchantress k thread pe M suggested few stories remember
read one them you will come out of it😊

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Hope

@LovelyUmang5

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Posted: 7 years ago

#908

I liked how you laid the foundation of the story..
Clarity of thoughts.. well planned script..
It's something really commendable, specially if it's your first ever writing..
Geet's character was a mix of strength & fragility..
She was strong enough to raise her voice & take stand for her dear ones yet would crumble down if she was in the target zone..
She came so far from her past.. became an independent woman.. reached to the heights of success..
Muskaan's part not only shocking for a certain someone here, but even I was surprised..
Must say, it needs a big & forgiving heart to accept something like this..
But I felt her past was bit rushed up.. you could have it done in a little more detailed manner..

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Hope

@LovelyUmang5

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Posted: 7 years ago

#909

Vikram!! from what I comprehend through the story was not a bad person, but circumstances made him turn bad..
Though it's up to us, what choices we make in life, whatever situation may be.. But let's be honest here..
THis is a big bad world.. everyone is selfish, thinking of themselves first..
Along vikram, his mother & lover were at fault..
His mother for forcing him when she needed to support him & later on supporting him for the wrong..
His gf for leaving him first & then coming back even after knowing he was married already.. So the entire blame cannot be put on him alone..
He according to me was a week man who did not take right decisions at right time..
He was being selfish & only thought of himself, not even once he thought about geet.. Had he given it a single thought, he would know what to do..
Even in his last moments he was selfish enough to give her the responsibility of his daughter without thinking about her grief, after all the baby was a living proof of his betrayal..
Geet's chachaji was another person, who took wrong decision.. he thought about friendship before family.. for a friend who was dead he sacrificed geet's happiness..
Even during the time of her divorce, he did not take blame of his actions & accused her..
Had brij not found out the truth he would never confess it..
During his confrontation with mohinder, he had said geet was his daughter as well, but I feel if she was actually his own blood, he would have done that to her..

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Hope

@LovelyUmang5

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Posted: 7 years ago

#910

Maan's past was equally traumatic if not more..
But I really did not get the logic of hating his mother so much..
His father was the one did more bad, but there was not a scene he said he hated his father,
it was only towards his mother..
I mean come that man cheated his wife, brought him a step-mother & threw him out of his own house to hostel..
Men can leave their wife & children for everything else in the world, but if women do the same, they are hated & called names.. heights of hypocrisy I tell you..
One more thing, for him being a playboy, yet hating the female population, wasn't it too soon to fall for geet..
I think there should have been a little more given to them to build their relationship, it would have been more believable..

P.S- I totally hated it when he blamed geet without even clarifying things, just in the influence of tasha..
For such a great businessman he sure lacks something called as common sense..

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