Into the Dark - Removed - Page 92

Originally posted by: sporthy_smile28

now that every thing is good and everyone is at piece with their lives

happily ever afters are too much for my liking so

i think its time for me to rest this story😊

Doc did manage to turn the heroin to heroine😆

and the whole geet manao thing was way too cute

there are few missing elements which would have added little more depth to the story but this was your first attempt

and first attempt k liye this was far well written

humne suna hai your current stories gems i shouldn't miss😉

thoda zadda makkan maar rahe hai log tumhe

dont you think so😆

will get back to them too but as i said need a little more time

coming back to the story

this was a emotional rollercoster ride

i thoroughly enjoyed reading it

Do keep writing

Thank you Spoorthi for the high compliments, but makkan badh karo lol
I know how crap this story is, Geet's character wasn't build and you are right the transition wasn't smooth. Come to think of it, i reckon i still lack there.

I loved the heroin😉 lol, i was officially on crack when i wrote this story from the looks of it, and defo after reading your comments.

Thank you for visiting my very first humble home, though now its a guest house somewhere down in the forgotten jungle lol

Thanks Spoorthi

Originally posted by: LovelyUmang5

geet was really lucky in the friends department..
She had so many of them who truly cared for her..
Be it her childhood buddies or the one's she met in later years of her life..
& unlike the serial, her brothers were too good.. loved them for supporting her..
Apart from the minor things here& there, all the characters were well placed & knew what they were doing..
Every event occured with correct timing, other than maaneet falling in love..
Overall, a great story, worth reading more than once..

Thank you very much Lovely or Umang (which ever you prefer, and please let me know how I should address you before i settle for one). You comments were thoroughly insightful and I do agree, the story was rushed especially considering the first 18 chapters were sooo slow. If i were to write this again, i would cut down the first few chapters into 5/6 maybe. But that is something I learnt with time. Again i agree there were flaws in the story and I appreciate the honest views from both you and Spoorthi. it'll only help me think more clearly. Frankly speaking breaks from writing is what causes these bloopers.

As for your comment about Maan's mum, Anita. No i don't remember what i called her, but I decided that Maan's dad was Raj and mum was Anita, in all my stories, always lol. But yeah I showed Maans anger towards her but as you rightly said there was no mention of Raj, hence thought to clarify that. Raj to me was a shit head so deserved no mention, as for Anita circumstance made her the way she is, though not exactly a brilliant mum but still did her part however small and insignificant that may be, hence at the end she was still in her son's life while Raj was long forgotten. I sound so mean, shoot😆

This isn't a great introduction of me, I promise i'm sweet 😉😆

Thank you Lovely

Originally posted by: DaftGirk

Thank you very much Lovely or Umang (which ever you prefer, and please let me know how I should address you before i settle for one). You comments were thoroughly insightful and I do agree, the story was rushed especially considering the first 18 chapters were sooo slow. If i were to write this again, i would cut down the first few chapters into 5/6 maybe. But that is something I learnt with time. Again i agree there were flaws in the story and I appreciate the honest views from both you and Spoorthi. it'll only help me think more clearly. Frankly speaking breaks from writing is what causes these bloopers.

As for your comment about Maan's mum, Anita. No i don't remember what i called her, but I decided that Maan's dad was Raj and mum was Anita, in all my stories, always lol. But yeah I showed Maans anger towards her but as you rightly said there was no mention of Raj, hence thought to clarify that. Raj to me was a shit head so deserved no mention, as for Anita circumstance made her the way she is, though not exactly a brilliant mum but still did her part however small and insignificant that may be, hence at the end she was still in her son's life while Raj was long forgotten. I sound so mean, shoot😆

This isn't a great introduction of me, I promise i'm sweet 😉😆

Thank you Lovely

you can call me what ever you want to, people call me with both the names here, though Umang is my name..
Thanks for clarifying about daddy dearest..
I hate him too much & would have hated maan if he liked his father even a bit.. Coz I hate cheaters( you might have got that from my signature)
Thanks for liking my comment coz I know it's a total bakwas one.. M not that talented in this dept you see..
And you don't sound mean at all.. & i loved this intro..

Originally posted by: ChandlerBing

Bookmarking

Ok I hold you dear to my heart, so it is my duty to be truthful
Do not enter, repeat do not enter Derek Smith style lol (curtesy Rebecca, Shopaholic)
Seriously though if you want to keep your head on, do not bother with this one Bing
It's my first, and should have been the last in all honestly lol
THIS IS SO BAD Bing (writing, Grammer, spelling, you name it)

I hope this warning serves its suppose lol

beautiful story.

Originally posted by: DaftGirk

Ok I hold you dear to my heart, so it is my duty to be truthful
Do not enter, repeat do not enter Derek Smith style lol (curtesy Rebecca, Shopaholic)
Seriously though if you want to keep your head on, do not bother with this one Bing
It's my first, and should have been the last in all honestly lol
THIS IS SO BAD Bing (writing, Grammer, spelling, you name it)

I hope this warning serves its suppose lol

So let me recount you a true story.

Me: I am a rebel. Nobody tells me what to do, you know?

My brother: I have a theory

Me: What is it

My bro: I think you are a nut head. Not a rebel

So I AM reading it😆

-Sincerely,

Your nut head

Originally posted by: ChandlerBing

So let me recount you a true story.

Me: I am a rebel. Nobody tells me what to do, you know?

My brother: I have a theory

Me: What is it

My bro: I think you are a nut head. Not a rebel

So I AM reading it😆

-Sincerely,

Your nut head

Originally posted by: Doracake

beautiful story.

Wondering why I didn't not see it before