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Dona

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Posted: 11 years ago

#61

part 5 n 6
nice updates...

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Mishti

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Posted: 11 years ago

#62

Updated all three of my res ji ...finally !! I can say I'm waiting for the next !!

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COLOGY

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Posted: 11 years ago

#63

Finally ! Finally!

I was really tempted to read your story, tym constrain was the biggest reason but i also wanted to wait for sometime so that when i read few parts i could grasp few things if not fully! Because i don't understand undercurrent meanings or have intelligence to read between lines... it sometimes becomes so difficult to comment when i have so many queries running around my mind. I don't want to end with one word comments which can never express the gratitude of readers to the writer!

There is a dot point in every update... I felt every update was a piece of puzzle leaving a clue to the reader to join them. There is a stream of mystery which is quite appealing yet distant to break. A stranger who suddenly drops in as neighour who happened have a story to tell and two girls with distinct characters ... there is painting which appears to be the background to this story. Lots of detailing on the characters and characterisation... Its happening !!:))))

Looking forward :)

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mhappy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#64

very nice part

getting more interesting day by day

what a beautiful painting it was

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BloodDiamond

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Posted: 11 years ago

#65

Geet gives out a small part of herself in every painting ... loved the way you wrote ❤️
so an old lady , art lover, Rosa Cruz asks on her scribbled name in every painting ...initials ... wonder whose it could be 🤓

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Flame_of_Forest

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Posted: 11 years ago

#66

loved the update...the question on the initials made Geet more nervous than facing the onlookers crowd...it is not her own initials she uses then, is it? and her artwork is replica of everyday objects, but with her own skill element that differentiates it.

the mystery is growing. You have put us (the readers) onto a mission of deciphering 'da kalam code' 😆... I am enjoying it.

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Kalam.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#67

She crept up the stairs, not wanting to turn back and risk being seen but also hesitant to continue in case Maan had spotted her. She had asked around for the bathrooms and discovered that there was one situated near the utility room.

Which led Pari to resort to desperate measures and sneak off upstairs. Night was beginning to dawn and with the departure of a day, came the arrival of the nightlife. The apartment became more lively, the music a little louder and the drinks increasingly frequent.

She had managed to fend off the attention of Rohit, who was a handsome and charming enough gentleman in himself; but he was not the reason she had arrived. Pari had left him with the promise of a coffee sometime and vowed to pass her number on through Maan - a spur of the moment decision that was still left undecided in her mind.

The last step had been climbed and she followed the small corridor, each of which had two rooms on either side. The balcony was rustic, the floorboards creaky and dusty; either Maan was an enthusiast for natural features, or he hadn't time to renovate the top floor.

She decided to enter the door on her left first. Biting her lips and standing on her tip toes, the door creaked open at first. Pari stopped in her tracks, recollected herself and opened the door a little further. She felt nervous and uneasy at snooping around; privacy was a staple which was very personal to her. She valued her own space and thus respected the space of others too.

Until today, that was.

Her eyes widened and her eyebrows furrowed as she found an empty room. It was hardly unexpected, if he had taken the room opposite. But she had expected more furniture or personal belongings at least; until he was a light traveller.

Closing the door ever so carefully, she shifted to the other side. Assuming she heard footsteps, she froze and pressed her back against the wall in an attempt to hide herself. But it was a false alarm, and Pari heaved a sigh of relief as she opened the door to what she had assumed was his bedroom.

Yet it wasn't a bedroom. This room mirrored its opposite neighbour - bare and painfully plain with not a personal item in sight.

"Are you looking for the bathroom?"

She turned quickly, far too quickly. Her face almost collided with Maan's, and she took a few steps backwards. Her back hit the ajar door, slamming it shut, and she suddenly became unnerved with the passive expression on his face and the emotionless look in his eyes.

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A/N: The empty 'bedroom' which Pari encounters upon (minus the chair)

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Craziest_MG

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Posted: 11 years ago

#68

who is Maan ??
CID pari in full form ...but i bet she herself is confused

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ChandlerBing

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Posted: 11 years ago

#69

Ok this gave me goosebumps. It was as if I was there trespassing in someone's property...trying to find answers to qsns incoherent and unclear. I simply can't wait for twenty four hours

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Flame_of_Forest

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Posted: 11 years ago

#70

thriller update...a lot more suspense and mystery added to the already existing one.

empty rooms...for his loneliness or like a fresh canvas waiting for the painter to put paint upon...nice picture, at least a window is there for the air and light to enter inside.

waise Pari needs to work upon her CID skills, she could not escape from Maan's sharp eyes. 😆