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Posted: 11 years ago
Such a sweet scene you created with them laying down, her head on his shoulder, his jacket used as a pillow and her dupatta serving as a blanket as they talked about their past, present and future. Seeing the shy and reserved Geet voicing out her opinions and standing firm on them in an argument gives me a pleasure. She has evolved a lot in this story and what makes her evolution even more amazing is that Maan was there at every step.

"Having got the best of her, I start the bike and for a second her hand remains on my shoulder. After a minute or two, her hands find their way around my waist as she leans into me, holding me tightly. "
There! That brought a huge smile on my face. This sentence somehow feels to me like the journey of Maan and Geet in such few words.

Brij Thakur. Most of the times, people think that upbringing is what really affects a person, no matter who his blood parents are. It is right, in most cases. But here is one where the blood running through the veins is far more powerful than the twenty or so years of loving upbringing. Of course, it really comes down to the person when he is old enough to categorise right and wrong, about which path to choose. It's a pity Brij chose to follow the father whose existence he hadn't known.

After knowing the truth of his birth, one would have thought Brij would see the Thakurs as his messiah but it wasn't surprising at all when he went completely on a different tangent. There was a thing we used to say to each other whenever we fought as kids. "Jo kehta hai wohi hota hai". Brij lived up to this at the moment. He saw the world the way he was himself, villainous. So it is absolutely not surprising that he's gone from bad to worse. The only relief here was that what Brij thought Thakur Senior might have done is what exactly has happened. And even better, the hidden will has reached the rightful owner.

For a moment, I panicked about him being in the same small town where Geet would be without Maan being around her. But I have faith in you and I am seeing Brij's trip to Hoshiyarpur in the light of this proverb:
"Jab geedar ki maut aati hai toh wo sheher ki taraf hi bhaagta hai".
He is indeed going to fall, and fall soon. This evil will meet its end just like Navika did and just like every evil in this world does.

Dev making an excuse for the missing duo was so cute even though he knew he wouldn't be believed. 😆

I was surprised when Maan and Geet came home with sad faces after such a wonderful time together. But the way Dadima handled it all, consoling Geet as well as soothing Maan, was great. I liked the message behind it: young lovers often forget that it's just not the two of them responsible for each other. They have more bonds around them which need to be looked after too. The guy needs to love and respect the relations of the girl and the girl needs to do the same for that of the guy. Geet had been doing that even before she and Maan were a couple but Maan was lacking here. I am glad Dadima took it upon her to calm his anxieties down and make him realise what his support meant to Geet.

The second cute moment of Dev for me was when he said to Geet that he would cry if she didn't stop. 😆

Reading the separation, I felt mixed feelings. On one hand, I knew the end of the story was very close, but on the other hand, I knew that the next time they meet will be when they can proclaim to the world that they are meant for each other. The excitement of the latter strangely overshadowed the sadness of the former this time.

Thanks for updating! I've loved it then and I loved it now. 🤗

PS: I tell my mother that both my brothers should get married on the same day so neither would be alone while the other spent time with his wife. Is it a twin rule kind of thing? 😆
Edited by mayyo - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
First of all loved maans ways of dealing with dadis wishes about not going to geets room. Plus this way home got to spend the whole night with his hums afar in his arms under the starlit sky. What could be more romantic than this. Geet too not wanting to be separate from him. Glad she is coming out of her shyness and opening upto maan and becoming confident of her position with maan
Feeling bad that they are going to be separated for a while. So proud of maan to think about. His siblings happiness too

Getting scared by brim what he will do. He is also on his way to horsehair put

Hmmm
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: romanceorlove

Chapter 64
Oh boy!! Pari Singhania!! She was forgotten completely, at least by me!!! Both Tara and Dev forgave her as expected, they would eventually!

It must have been so painful for Maithili to go thru all of it. No woman should need to go thru this pain and torture. Credit to you as well for portraying it so well, bringing society's beliefs, MCPs in to the story, questioning their righteousness. Today's women are definitely stronger than they were but there is still a section of women who need to get in touch with their inner strength, identify themselves.

Appreciate the way Dadi maa handled Maithili and bring her face-to-face with her inner self.

Antakshari was fun and icing on the cake was "buddha mil gaya"... 10 15 saal hahahaha ye dono itna intezar karenge?!

Nakul ji what timing!! Could not be better :-) how would he know Maan was doing things in the kitchen not meant to be done?! Poor him, Maan keep scowling him for no reason. "White hair", Nakul ab to definitely gaya.

Billi chali sher ke den mein!! bhugto!! As if!!!! Chukar dekhegi to reh payegi!!!

A perfect song chosen again girl!!!


Maan and Nakul's stars are destined to be crossed by Avi😆

Glad you liked it.

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: romanceorlove

Chapter 65 Part 1
Her time to tease him and he deserves it for all he does to her!! Though I am not a fan of this song, loved the VM. How do you girls make these wonderful VMs and Banner?

Silence and words. Difficult choice, which is more important, infact both have their role in different situations in life.

Pillows fights are such fun :)

It would be so difficult for Geet to walk away seeing Maan swim, aw! poor girl!

Adi and Maan have shared a bond in every story but here you have added a background to it as well :)

This sneaking is fun and creates memories cherishable for life ;) Aw!! Geet calls him "Maahi", how sweet :)


Maahi ve Maahi, maahi re!

Had to have it in here😃
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: romanceorlove

Chapter 65 Part 2

This looks like a continuation from Chap 63 part 5, you tie all loose ends. But how do you manage remembering where you took a break?

Gawd, what a b*****d this Sumeet is! Maan would have been angry with Kabir's tone but would be proud of his thought process. Good job Kabir. Sumeet deserved this thrashing and Maan took care of the rest. Such men should never be spared. Lovely!!! Maithilima turning into Maithili the sherni!!! Loved the transformation. Wish all the females in the world could summon their inner strength in time of need and say no to torture.

Following it up with Part 1, watching Maan is still a treat to the eye. Imagining him in the pool raises goosebumps!! Poor girl, with him watching her affects her so much, how would she be able to match up with him in person ;)

hahahaha Geet asking Dadi about Maan directly? Will happen but not yet :) Can only think of the song "Saathiyaa" from Singham right now.

Girls shopping away is the best ice breaker, brave one Geet for saving Megha's chain for her.

Damn!!! You had to get Maan into an accident didn't you?! What plans have you got girl? Though we know it is fiction, we readers are so involved in it! We almost live the emotions you write, though I believe you go through them even more. It must have been earth shattering for all of them. Poor Geet but as we say, all's well that end's well. Maan though hurt from the crash, is safe. This called for a love filled confession, much awaited with no frills attached. Love you Avi!!!

But I still am waiting for my SRK song...



Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: romanceorlove

Chapter 66

After a love confession, he tells her about he talking to Daarji. Wow! But did he? and when? Of course, Daarji would have been more than happy to say yes. Hahaha, Geet following Maan, oh how he loves teasing her! Tara might be a shrew but Geet is no simple!

Love the hospital scenes, Maan missing to spend time with Geet and the mischeiveous Dev. Hahaha Geet embarrassed yet again due to a song lol

Maan finally got what he had been craving for, did he not! Oho, to good night kiss aise dete hain ;) lol

I so wish I could press like multiple times for your chapters!!! Alas!!


Multiple likes😆 My head will fill up and explode😃 Glad you liked it.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: romanceorlove

Chapter 67 Part 2

Love you love you love you love you so much!!!

This song is one of my favs and you have done justice to it. The attention to detail is amazing! Though people would know about Taj Mahal, you went ahead and wrote about it and boy, were you wonderful!! Love the proposal. I have read this one over and over. If I remember it right you had shared a link with Maan's voice when you introduced this letter in the story for the first time, I can still hear the voice!! I can't say anything to appreciate your efforts enough girl. Can only say, keep it up!!


Thank you😃 Taj Mahal holds a special place for me in my life too.

I wanted to add Maan's voice but the words were different this time.

Glad you liked it so much.😃
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: romanceorlove

Chapter 68

Thanks again for the PM Avi. What a password!! Should have guessed what was coming but then I would not be the reader, would I?!

Another all time fav song!!! Beautiful imagination yet again!! Lion on a mission to change our cool Ms Handa! Least does he know she holds the demeanour with such great difficulty! Lets see how long does this continue :-)

Love Maan in black :-) Enjoy Nakul and enjoy his taking-care-of-Maan lol

Great job again!! Keep it up!!

Too late now, got to sleep, play catch up again soon :-)

4 more to go... though it is nice to have the next chapter ready to read and having to experience desperate need to know what is next, I still would want to get back to the wait, hopefully soon!!!

Kudos to you for being patient with readers like me 😳 and not giving up on your passion to write!!! Thanks again for all the PMs you have been sending me Avi ⭐️



You are welcome. The slew of comments from you made my day😃
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Alamelu

First of all loved maans ways of dealing with dadis wishes about not going to geets room. Plus this way home got to spend the whole night with his humsafar in his arms under the starlit sky. What could be more romantic than this. Geet too not wanting to be separate from him. Glad she is coming out of her shyness and opening upto maan and becoming confident of her position with maan

Feeling bad that they are going to be separated for a while. So proud of maan to think about His siblings happiness too

Getting scared by brij what he will do. He is also on his way to horsehairpur

Hmmm

Glad you are liking it.

The good thing about stories is that good always wins over evil.

Don't be scared.

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Posted: 11 years ago
i liked even before reading he he
and see i was right

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