The Seven Year 'Hitch' [2] - Chp 11/ Pg 53 - Page 38

I have to say the beginning of the chapter blew me away completely. There is so much truth to what you have written. I don't dispute that but the way you tied it in with his thoughts and feelings was truly laudable. He finds himself like the clouds drifting and now it is time for this cloud to deliver dreams and wishes of his family. There is so much perfection in this tying in to nature, I am nodding my head but can't even begin to tell you how much I loved it. This new concept in writing really worked perfectly here to get into his thoughts and heart.

Geet is the sea to him, full of love, care and compassion; where he, the cloud ends up after repleting himself. I loved that connection. In a lot of couples, I have noticed that; women tend to be the end which the man seeks at the end of all his drifting and floating during the day. The completeness happens only with Geet, and only if he has kept her happy.

The party incident reminded me of something. Checking on each other means different things to each of the spouses. For a woman it would be at least 5-6 times where as for a man a couple of times does it. The couples described are exactly like those I have seen; physically together but not on the same wavelength. There is a wide enough gap to let boredom and routine drift in. To be honest I think a lot of marriages fail for this reason. If there is no excitement and anticipation left, the whole concept of attraction to each other gets lost. It is truly the edifice that you have to keep building everyday. I think that statement is my hot chocolate guarantor for relationships, Onir. Wonderful way of expressing it.

For someone who is just writing this first story, you have your pulse firmly set on your characters, their emotions and their struggles. I am sincerely in awe of the depth you have brought to these two. It is as if I know them and have read their hearts.

Not because I lub you, I do, but I have to say you are one of the most sensitive and heart touching writer I have read.

There are several favorite lines here but one that stood out for me:

Unity in a relation comes from total acceptance without need for change.

More on second part in a few...

chapter 9-

Yes I will bring Maan ki Mishty to me. I will make this phase to pass away from us, never to return. Yes Mishty, though now you feel we're heading towards the 'Seven Year Itch', I will make you feel that this was just a hitch in our path and we will be beyond a 'Seven Year Hitch' together in love not between MSK and Geet but Maan and Mishty.

finally maan ko hosh to aaya.

loved the update specially maan's realization.

Originally posted by: honeygrape

woah!!!!!!!! soo many facts he is realising now...just a week away from her made him think about all those tyms he disappointed her n he had seen them all in her eyes but never acknowledged...she shoud have done this deed earlier...

loved the first part where you wrote about the clouds n stuffs😊

loved the comparison between maan n moving clouds...

The distance and space was required for him to think and ponder in everything that was forming a big space between them. She too has her own follies in this whole situation both of them are at present, its only that Maan's POV & thoughts are being explored and in front so... 😊

Glad you liked that cloud and sea analogue ... I was nervous about it that I'm going too tangent or out of context 🤗

omg how did you write all those dance steps Onir...haa... i felt like am seeing her dance in front of my eyes

Dance is something I love a lot.❤️ Writing those steps were a bit difficult as I wanted to write it a lot simpler for the readers to understand the emotions behind the steps and feel it all, didn't want to make it very technical ... I'm so happy you could visualise it, it makes my efforts feel worth it. Thanks!

ohh my God, very very beautiful update my dear...i had my mouth wide open by the end of the part...really i was sitting like that...how do you write so beautifully dear...the relief which he felt and all the emotions she went thru i felt like am also goin thru the same...

music is also too good...

am sooo happy to have you here dear...thanx a looot😊😊

feel like comin in thru my lappy n giving u a tiiighttt hug...😳😃 donno y , but this update made me very very happy...

Originally posted by: miyasingh1

nice update😊

Originally posted by: Ubiquitos

Awesome! No words!! It was as if they were in front of me!

Originally posted by: chavvi16

wow i guess all he needs to do is think from his heart
be the maan she fell in love with
or just make her realise that you are still the same maan she fell in love with and married
so close and yet so far
am glad he is somewhere realising what could have gone wrong
yes maan you are what she thinks about all the time
that dance just showed you what you needed to see
so all he has to do now is embrace this
hope it works out
wow those feelings she has for maan came out in the ballet didnt they