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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ddgcmgfan

Hey Avi:
I like this Daarji...sooo much better than the actual serial. The relationship between a Grandchild and her parent, her grandfather so beautifully brought about with an equally beautiful song. So Geet is not going back???? I understand why, but why????😭...oh well I know you will find a way for Maan and Geet to meet. Great update, thanx for the pm. Hope you had a wonderful B'day.

Oh no tears please. I already gave you a hint. Darji values education too much to let Geet stay...
Glad you enjoyed it Phoram...🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago

Chapter 9

Absolutely loved it Avi and to an extent I agree with Dev. The way Singhania was asking for Dev's opinion it was clear that eh wanted bosses' touch. Sometimes it does not matter enough what is there but a special tick is required. Dev was doing his job as brand ambassador. Many a times, when senior stakeholders do not attend meetings, I ask my boss to arrange for the call. He chairs it, I present and decisions are taken. Only thing he does is sending the invite and opening hello and closing bye. But it still makes a difference as people come to the call and try to resolve issues instead of ignoring them. It is power of position.

I-Star is a power package……

But what is the mystery abt Pari and Dev…hmmm…yet to be unraveled.

Chapter10

Lessons of life and love…..those blissful days of college……I was actually ported to those days where every word, every glance had a special meaning. Today I felt as if romance is big time out of my life and I need to do something to get my kids grow up a little faster…LOL

Awesome update. Aisha taught him an important lesson – think from customer's pOV not from technical and most importantly…be with her, she will be yours once she accepts your presence…..very very beautifully emoted. Just loved the concept. Actually this is the foundation stone of arranged marriages but I guess it works equally well when one is just beginning to feel the love.

Chapter11

It brought tears to my eyes. I just loved this update. It was so poignant yet so full of love. A grandfather trying to take care of his granddaughter…learning to take care of a child. A man of honor and full of love. It is so tough for me to explain the emotions I am feeling. It was one of the best chapters and one of the best narration of Geet's relationship with her family across FFs. It had simplicity and groundness of a village, simplicity of unadulterated love and respect in the heart of a girl for all her grandfather is and means to her. Very very well written….

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: heytal

Chapter 9


Can I say a fiery update😉

For NT there is one name that comes in my mind 'Fataakdi'
You are right she is a fire cracker...

Superb narrative from Dev's appearance to NT dil main kuch kuch😳
Yup, loved writing that...Embarrassed
Dev's curt and bang on target remarks are just hilarious😆
I would just give it to u for such amazing work Avi
👏 👏 👏
Thanks Heytal

NT too observant and also a bit disturbed with Dev- Pari relation🤔
The presentation and then the anticlimax 😳
Poor NT and meany Dev😡
isigner kapde pehente pehente khud ko designer tag samajta hain
dream on🤢

I want NT to give him mooh tod jawab soon👍🏼

She will, believe me ab aur thapad baki hai...😆
Dev neend ke bahaane chance maarring
I guess time for another thapad😉

Superb one yet again
😃

🤗
Glad you are liking them. I noticed that you picked up on everything I wanted to state..
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: heytal

Chapter 10


Breezy update😳

Avi ko Juhu Beach yaad aa rahan hain
mujhe bhi college time ki yaad aa gayi
I love Juhu beach. Even now if there are a few hours between my flight, I go to the beach before coming home, grab a nariyal pani and dip my feet in.
Superb song
aptly supporting his inner turmoil, his chupke chupke romance, her sharmana😳, his fears etc...

Aisha ke saath u should have added Aisha song😉
Aash ke nakhra, latke jhatke ke saath😆
Isse jyaada kuch aur bolne ki zaroorat nahi
hain na🤔
Aisha itni special hai woh khud nahi jaanti...😆
😉😉
Jokes apart
Loved the re-intro of the two lovers one settling down with the the love of her life and others unsettled state of mind found some respite😊
There is that in common. If she every gets around to it, that is.
Yet another facet of younger Maan reveals😳
Finally Maan's gets a friend, philosopher and guide in
Aisha Aunty🤣

Me too would love to see Maaneet on Juhu beach
main bhaag ke jaaungi unhe ek saath dekhne😳

Aayege definitely aayege... I am adding to the story so that I can enjoy their long romance too. Just hope everyone keeps finding it worthwhile, warna I will still write it, regardless. That I have decided.
Loving the progress though missed Maaneet😊

🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: heytal

Chapter 11


This was truly painful Avi
song and update made my
😭 😭 😭

My heart went out for the younger Geet who lost her parents so early
Her bravery and way of life is what I am planning to show to Maan. She may be quiet but she is strong as steel.
and in awe with the man, Daarji
who single handedly brought up Geet
The small instances of him burning his hands, loosing parts of their land gradually was so heart rendering 😒
Parents sacrifice so much to raise a child. Here is the older person who did. It is important in her life, what has been sown in so will flourish.
The initial part finally gave a peek in young Geet's heart
pehla pehla pyaar☺️
Jhalli waiting for her prince charming then mentally smacking herself for her wayward thoughts
Haaye😳
I adore her shyness. I was the shyest person till I got married. My hubby laughed at how much attention I gave the floor and what all were my ideas about stuff. Now looking back, I realize what a hard time I gave him😆.
The decision😲
Maaneet🥺
Us😒
Avi

Continue soon
😃

🤗 You are caught up! I love that...
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ritzy09

Chapter 9

Absolutely loved it Avi and to an extent I agree with Dev. The way Singhania was asking for Dev's opinion it was clear that eh wanted bosses' touch. Sometimes it does not matter enough what is there but a special tick is required. Dev was doing his job as brand ambassador. Many a times, when senior stakeholders do not attend meetings, I ask my boss to arrange for the call. He chairs it, I present and decisions are taken. Only thing he does is sending the invite and opening hello and closing bye. But it still makes a difference as people come to the call and try to resolve issues instead of ignoring them. It is power of position.

While his comment is logical, that is Dev... Mr. Slick, charming enough to get away with everything.

I-Star is a power package''

But what is the mystery abt Pari and Dev'hmmm'yet to be unraveled.

Pari will be part of the story later on. She is a few years younger than him so as a teenage boy he found her irritating but now that she has blossomed perhaps he will change his mind..😉

Chapter10

Lessons of life and love'..those blissful days of college''I was actually ported to those days where every word, every glance had a special meaning. Today I felt as if romance is big time out of my life and I need to do something to get my kids grow up a little faster'LOL

Aww! Romance seems to get lost until we find a way to capture it back. I totally get that in this busy lifestyles that we have it is not easy to find the time to plan anything. A nice cuddle or hug goes a long way...❤️

Awesome update. Aisha taught him an important lesson ' think from customer's pOV not from technical and most importantly'be with her, she will be yours once she accepts your presence'..very very beautifully emoted. Just loved the concept. Actually this is the foundation stone of arranged marriages but I guess it works equally well when one is just beginning to feel the love.

Yeah Aashu makes her entry as Aisha..I figured with all the trouble he has had he needed someone to nudge him in the right direction.

Chapter11

It brought tears to my eyes. I just loved this update. It was so poignant yet so full of love. A grandfather trying to take care of his granddaughter'learning to take care of a child. A man of honor and full of love. It is so tough for me to explain the emotions I am feeling. It was one of the best chapters and one of the best narration of Geet's relationship with her family across FFs. It had simplicity and groundness of a village, simplicity of unadulterated love and respect in the heart of a girl for all her grandfather is and means to her. Very very well written'.

This one I think I am most proud of after Room 508. My feelings for my father played a big part in how it came about.

Ritzy🤗
I am glad you got a chance to catch up with the story. Finally the character sketch is done. I am trying to lengthen it for all of you who wanted an FF. Hope I can keep it interesting.
To have such wonderful comments from a writer whose work I love, is sone pe suhaga.
Thanks so much for so much encouragement you have given through out. Hope your work load lightens and you can enjoy with us some more.
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Posted: 12 years ago


Truly Avi
We write cos we like it
It gives us satisfaction
and I believe
Dil se likha dil tak pohuch hi jaata hain
I am always here cos I love TL
🤗


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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: heytal

Sorry forget to mention

Loved all the superb songs u used in all the chapters
👏 👏 👏

Thank you!
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Posted: 12 years ago
Finally made it here!

To describe this chapter in a single phrase, I'll say it was 'heartwarming'. Really touching with the way a few things were!

'Darji had warned me against being friendly with city boys'
This is a strange thing. Why do we always see the negative first? The first thing that elders do is warn their children about the big, bad world out there. Even though the elders are right in warning us beforehand, I still feel that young minds should get a more positive overview of the things rather than the negative ones.

Geet's concern over what those eyes were trying to say and her self-chiding was so natural, something that you'd expect someone like her to do, someone who sometimes sees deeper than intended and then give a reality check to themselves. It was kind of cute, the way she scolded herself.

I was laughing throughout the part of the hostel-mates! 😆 The Guru girl, the official kicker and the victim Doc, the mysterious girl and the sweet padhaku, the cartoon-lover, the cat-crazy administrator, the computer whiz and the shayara. But most of all, Mrs.Yash. You made her a mother of a kid? Wo khush ho gayi? 😆

The way all the neighbors rushed to help Geet and her Darji in time of need only serves to prove that there still are people who care for someone other than their own blood-bonds, that there still is goodness around us and it makes way to us when we really need it...

I got a little emotional when I read the journey of a small orphan girl with her aging grandfather and how they both struggled to live, to live for each other. I could see everything from their walks to Darji trying to tie her hair, to her kissing his fingers to heal his burns. It was all like a life-story of someone running in front of my eyes and I couldn't help but be a part of it all; smiling to see the two walk hand-in-hand amidst the green, tearing up when he tried to do little things for her and chuckling when she punched a girl. Theirs is a relationship so deep that I can't help but be awed!

I can't say that I'm happy with Geet's decision to not return. But had I been in her place, I would have done the same thing; I'd have given up my own life to care for someone I love. She's not wrong in deciding to stay back, though if Darji has always encouraged education, he won't be happy about her decision. I loved the example of animals and their differentiation with humans. Indeed, humanity is what differentiates a man from an animal.

The song selection was perfect, aptly chosen for this chapter. And this is one of the songs that always leave me a little high on emotions.

Thanks for updating Avi! 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Finally made it here!


To describe this chapter in a single phrase, I'll say it was 'heartwarming'. Really touching with the way a few things were!

'Darji had warned me against being friendly with city boys'
This is a strange thing. Why do we always see the negative first? The first thing that elders do is warn their children about the big, bad world out there. Even though the elders are right in warning us beforehand, I feel that young minds should get a more positive overview of the things rather than the negative ones.
Love comes in many forms. One is the person looking out for every step you may take.
Geet's concern over what those eyes were trying to say and her self-chiding was so natural, something that you'd expect someone like her to do, someone who sometimes sees deeper than intended and then give a reality check to themselves. It was kind of cute, the way she scolded herself.
She is cute. Modeled after someone I know..😆

I was laughing throughout the part of the hostel-mates! 😆 The Guru girl, the official kicker and the victim Doc, the mysterious girl and the sweet padhaku, the cartoon-lover, the cat-crazy administrator, the computer whiz and the shayara. But most of all, Mrs.Yash. You made her a mother of a kid? Wo khush ho gayi? 😆
She was doing somersaults...😆.. All of you are crazy and that is why I fit right it...😆 Zarin is the only one who wants Dev..Her role is mast.
The way all the neighbors rushed to help Geet and her Darji in time of need only serves to prove that there still are people who care for someone other than their own blood-bonds, that there still is goodness around us and it makes way to us when we really need it...

I got a little emotional when I read the journey of a small orphan girl with her aging grandfather and how they both struggled to live, to live for each other. I could see everything from their walks to Darji trying to tie her hair, to her kissing his fingers to heal his burns. It was all like a life-story of someone running in front of my eyes and I couldn't help but be a part of it all; smiling to see the two walk hand-in-hand amidst the green, tearing up when he tried to do little things for her and chuckling when she punched a girl. Theirs is a relationship so deep that I can't help but be awed!

I can't say that I'm happy with Geet's decision to not return. But had I been in her place, I would have done the same thing; I'd have given up my own life to care for someone I love. She's not wrong in deciding to stay back, though if Darji has always encouraged education, he won't be happy about her decision. I loved the example of animals and their differentiation with humans. Indeed, humanity is what differentiates a man from an animal.

The song selection was perfect, aptly chosen for this chapter. And this is one of the songs that always leave me a little high on emotions.

Thanks for updating Avi! 🤗

Glad you enjoyed it.🤗
Edited by dqno1 - 12 years ago

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