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Posted: 13 years ago
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Beautiful explanation by Maan.
Well written..
Geet was ready to intimate with Maan as he is her husband and she felt it right.
But for Maan.. It was merely an physical touch without love in it.
He cant remember anything to do with Geet. So when they got closed.. he jst got carried.
Geet pour out everything..her feelings.. the way she feel humiliated when Maan rejected her.
Maan understand how Geet feel when he pushed her. The guilt ate him..
Loved the way Maan explained to Geet. What he felt and how is he feelings.
Geet understood the reason Maan reacted so.. she is willing to wait for him..
They understand each other so well...

Wish the CV planned for such in the serial as well.. The current track seems to be out of story.

This idea is really brilliant 👍🏼

Aren't you planning to write any FF... Am so missing your stories...

I really love this line...
I do not want to merely fall in love with you, but rise in it. Rising is, however, slow and arduous, requiring a lot of effort and perseverance which I am willing to put in. Will you give me the time to understand you better and rise in love with you?" 👏👏👏


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Posted: 13 years ago
#52

Originally posted by: hegdemedha

Opti, I am glad that this scenario got you back to writing fiction again.

I have only two words after reading both the parts -- If only!!

Yes, Medha, if only!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#53
Opti, I have finally read the concluding part. I am amazed at how you modify your michi fics to suit Maaneet. You may remember my habit of visualization when reading FFs. Since you had not Maaneetified Great expectations, I thought I would not be able to visualize Maaneet in this. But I was wrong now and also the last time when you had modified the post-riot michi reunion to suit Maaneet reunion after khoon se bhara maang episode of GHSP. So I believe its the power of your writing.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#54
Opti u did NOT pm me about this...
me so angry...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#55

Originally posted by: jyoti06

WOWW Opti wonderful piece of writing 👏👏👏

I loevd the way how the whole situation resulted in MSK forced to tell Geet about his past affair which was just infatuation and not love ...CVs this way can actually close the Sam chapter in the show by telling us the reason why MSK turned all bitter towards love and relationships and why post ML it was difficult for MSK to believe that he fell in love with Geet 👍🏼...this is a perfect matured screenplay which CVs can implement in the show which gives way for a matured Maaneet conversation as well 😳...
I will really love to see such a high point between Maaneet in the show knowing that Gurti r fab actors who will do full justice to this complex scene 👍🏼

Thanks Jyo. As I had mentioned earlier, this and the earlier scenes were originally written for a Michi fic which had a totally different theme. When I had to adapt the scene, I thought it would be appropriate to introduce and also close the Sam chapter once and for all so that one of the existing loops can be closed. There can be the excuse that the pre-ML Maan had not confided in Geet about Sam because he was so much in love with Geet that he forgot he was once in love with another woman. The post ML Maan though remembers nothing of his love for Geet. The only relationship he could have been aware of is the broken one with Sam. This would give him a good reason as to why he could not believe that he managed to fall in love with any woman let alone Geet when he was avoiding women like plague. It would also explain why he wants to be in love with Geet again before taking their relationship further.
I agree that Gurti are fab actors who can portray any complex scene with elan. They are so good at bringing out subtle nuances in each and every line. Yesterday's episode was one more instance of their capability.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#56

Originally posted by: ajenn

Beautiful explanation by Maan.
Well written..
Geet was ready to intimate with Maan as he is her husband and she felt it right.
But for Maan.. It was merely an physical touch without love in it.
He cant remember anything to do with Geet. So when they got closed.. he jst got carried.
Geet pour out everything..her feelings.. the way she feel humiliated when Maan rejected her.
Maan understand how Geet feel when he pushed her. The guilt ate him..
Loved the way Maan explained to Geet. What he felt and how is he feelings.
Geet understood the reason Maan reacted so.. she is willing to wait for him..
They understand each other so well...

Wish the CV planned for such in the serial as well.. The current track seems to be out of story.

This idea is really brilliant 👍🏼

Aren't you planning to write any FF... Am so missing your stories...

I really love this line...
I do not want to merely fall in love with you, but rise in it. Rising is, however, slow and arduous, requiring a lot of effort and perseverance which I am willing to put in. Will you give me the time to understand you better and rise in love with you?" 👏👏👏


Thanks. Yes, Geet was ready to go all the way for he was after all her husband and they have not been initmate for so long but Maan couldn't recollect their life together and did not want to take advantage of the situation. It hurt her badly but once she knew the real reason, she was willing to give him the time so so wanted. Dont know what the CVs have planned but thought I'll put down my visualisation of such a scene.
No am not planning to write any fics in the near future as I am still recovering from illness.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#57

Originally posted by: Viji79

Opti, I have finally read the concluding part. I am amazed at how you modify your michi fics to suit Maaneet. You may remember my habit of visualization when reading FFs. Since you had not Maaneetified Great expectations, I thought I would not be able to visualize Maaneet in this. But I was wrong now and also the last time when you had modified the post-riot michi reunion to suit Maaneet reunion after khoon se bhara maang episode of GHSP. So I believe its the power of your writing.

Thanks Viji. I really admire your fab memory. I had to modify the scenes because the original was under different circumstances. I pick only those scenes which can fit into the prevailing Maaneet tracks with some changes.
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Posted: 13 years ago
#58

Originally posted by: spvd

Opti u did NOT pm me about this...
me so angry...

Sorry. If it is any consolation I did not PM anyone. I only put up the link in the Den. I am not too well.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Opti

Thanks. Yes, Geet was ready to go all the way for he was after all her husband and they have not been initmate for so long but Maan couldn't recollect their life together and did not want to take advantage of the situation. It hurt her badly but once she knew the real reason, she was willing to give him the time so so wanted. Dont know what the CVs have planned but thought I'll put down my visualisation of such a scene.

No am not planning to write any fics in the near future as I am still recovering from illness.



Yes plz do cont writing some OS bout Maaneet. At least we could feel relieve reading it here. The serial is jst making me go mad.

ill?? What happen dear. Are you not well.. Is everything fine with you

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: Opti

Thanks Viji. I really admire your fab memory. I had to modify the scenes because the original was under different circumstances. I pick only those scenes which can fit into the prevailing Maaneet tracks with some changes.

But Opti, I really miss Maaneet scenes. Why dont you restart it, these FFs are great platforms to give form to our expectations which were flying high at important stages of the show and that went unfulfilled. At least this willg ive some relief from the stupid tracks that keep springing now and then in our show.

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