The Mumbai Trip - Part II (Final Part)

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sumona28

@sumona28

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Posted: 14 years ago

#11

Wah awesome update...

thanks for the update...

I want that Geet will ignor Maan and then Maaneet's conversation as you wrote...

If Maaneet will go to Mumabai I think the rain seq will happen and the accident part as you mention in your first part...and we will get to see a Maaneet hug...

Wonderfull written ...I am wondered why CVS ko ye Idea nahi aata...

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Durga

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Posted: 14 years ago

#12

wow part 2 !! i loved it completely ...

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mysterygurl1427

@mysterygurl1427

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Posted: 14 years ago

#13

why can't there be a 3rd part😡😡😡😡😡😡😡 lolz..

3rds a charm no?😆

brilliant brilliant job!!!!😭😭😭😭😭 loved it...thanks for writing it😛

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minnie_tweetie

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Posted: 14 years ago

#14

awesome
loved it
superbly written
i guess this can be extended further

Edited by minnie_tweetie - 14 years ago

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tanu

@Armu4eva

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Posted: 14 years ago

#15

Bootiphoolll part Opti 😍

especially

Geet smiled at him and said, "I know I will not, for I have faith in my love. My love is strong enough to bring you to me and I will wait to become one with you in mind, body and soul."

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saam123

@saam123

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Posted: 14 years ago

#16

so good . every word is very beautiful. please do not finish it .write it more.u done a wonderful job . please please write it more . hope cv will see this do like this . show will be on top. so good

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Opti

@Opti

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Posted: 14 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: serialwatcher16

Opti,

That was a good way forward. How I wish we could have atleast a part of it in the serial but conversations are something that the cv's don't even want to put their effort into. sigh.

Thanks Usha. I too hope that they give us more conversations between Maaneet and with Barry in charge of dialogues, I'm sure he can do wonders if only given the opportunity.

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Opti

@Opti

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Posted: 14 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: sumona_mona28
Wah awesome update...

thanks for the update...

I want that Geet will ignor Maan and then Maaneet's conversation as you wrote...

If Maaneet will go to Mumabai I think the rain seq will happen and the accident part as you mention in your first part...and we will get to see a Maaneet hug...

Wonderfull written ...I am wondered why CVS ko ye Idea nahi aata...

Thanks sumona. glad the story went as per your expectations.

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Lily201

@Lily201

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Posted: 14 years ago

#19

@Opti-- If the starting tugged the heart strings then the finale completely moved a person-- really I'm still recovering from the effects the story telling had on me-- tons of Kudos👏⭐️👏

You expressed from start to finish -complete with all the reasoning the various ups & downs, peaks & pitfalls one undergoes ,when a person has lost memory --but holds on to one figment of deja vu sentiments that ties one to their loved one...

The way you expressed Geet's grievance and Maan's undersanding of it plus his views on the matter were detailed to perfection--not to mention the involvement of Samira in changing his attitude to the worse and last but not the least the reconciliation😳😃

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tazeen_29

@tazeen_29

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Posted: 14 years ago

#20

This is amazing ..perfect writing which is needed in the show in current Maaneet situations ...they should show these actions and reactions with powerful conversations btw them like the dialogues you've written... are so perfect they should use in the Mumbai track..Ihope ...very well written ...👏 You should post this to Geet Cvs so they will get some idea to make the maaneet situations more sentimental...and attractive..superlike it dear ..WELL DONE😃!!!!

Edited by tazeen_29 - 14 years ago