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ansah

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Posted: 14 years ago

#31

awww that was just OMG...really oved it

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LD-Radha

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Posted: 14 years ago

#32

- Nursing...more medical...why am I not surprised...although I do like how you bring your personal experiences into your writing

- It's nice we got some background information about Geet's life before you actually introduced the rest of the family. I like Ketan and Nisha but Mahi was all I needed to hear to break into a smile. :D

- Ketan...being the boy...little MSK? I like that and that was a pretty hectic day she had for mother's day! Poor Princess :(

- Awww...Mahi is so adorable...I got so emotional at that part...

- The ring idea was just PERFECT. Just PERFECT Jaz!

- Haha and then Ketan turns to normal again.

- I just noticed now when Geet says duty calls that its Geet thats working and tense...and Maan is all relaxed and with the kids! HUH..isnt this interesting?

- Maan didnt even snap at Ketan...he just said thats no way to talk to your sister...some role reversal I see...

- I loved how you explained the children sleeping on the couch and then Geet's like my babies...how cute. Near the ending, honestly I saw a little bit of Jaz come out. Like you were the one saying all of it and not Geet, as if you were the character of Geet. It cant put it into words.

Anywho, it was a great OS to write for mother's day and of course Jaz HAS to have a little bit of tragedy in there somewhere :P LOVELY though. :D