OS: Farewell Prt 2 pg10 Jan 6

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johnangad

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Posted: 14 years ago

#71

wow! this was beautiful! and wat a fitting punishment for dev!

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Shabz.

@Shabz.

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Posted: 14 years ago

#72

Jaz i absolutely love ur work.....i was sooo relieved when maan found his geet, but the poor lass was living in such poor conditions and i really felt for her when no one was willing to help an 'unwed mother'...just like always, maan stepped in and ended up being her saviour and he gave the onlookers an earfull...yay maan!!im glad geet held maan back in the hospital and asked him to stay with her throughout the labour,that in itself showed how much geet considered him as her other half awww. the following paragraph summed it all up for me:

At that very moment, Maan said farewell. Farewell to lonliness, farewell to sadness, farewell to sorrow, farewell to depression, farewell to darkness. He said farewell to a life without Geet, as he welcomed happiness and love with open arms.

Hello to Geet's Maan, and farewell to cold, stone hearted Maan Singh Khurana…farewell.

geet truelly is his sunshine, no geet=no life!

i love a happy ending..thanx for the pm :D

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-Premeena-

@-Premeena-

Voyager

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Posted: 14 years ago

#73

loved it .. maan finding geet and finally found her in her arms awww...!!!

amazing do write more =)

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chsweety22

@chsweety22

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Posted: 14 years ago

#74

it was such a beautiful OS....

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mirnalini

@mirnalini

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Posted: 14 years ago

#75

Loved the ending!!!😳
The last stanza, and I say stanza and not paragraph becuz it was absolutely poetic, has been beautifully phrased.👏
Loved the way you gave a word as "farewell", that carries with itself the pain of separation, such a happy context and meaning.
Gr8 job👍🏼

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Mirela

@Myra.nelly

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Posted: 14 years ago

#76

Ok...i didnt cry at the first part which was the heart breaking one...but i did cry at the happy 2nd part,call me nuts but he deserved all the pain of loosing her cause his ego as a man was hurt when he knew she was with another man... 😕 But usualy men are like that...anyway her letter made him eat his own words,for doubting her...jaz,u were wonderful with this emotional torture!...when i read part 2,i was dancing around when i saw what u did to dev,brilliant idea jaz wish dev was punishedin the serial too just like that...Yes,i shedd a tear when she gave birth,she was so scared and made him stay with her...ohh...that was the final drop that field the glass and the river started flowing 😭 How kn u do that jaz,realy girl u are one of a kind...i love ur work,ur mind,ur imagination...wish i met u in person!! Take care...me off to another one to read!!