Maaneet Scene-Wishful Thinking & Mo Upd 9/09 p147 - Page 74

Originally posted by: MaaneetDD

Hey Vroom,

I come back and see 3 updates!! What a bounty for the weekend!! Thank you babes 😃....

Ok coming to the updates

Journey to the truth

Before I forget, I love the titles- they give an inkling to where the story would lead to...

U have beautifully captured the various emotions that assail him when he thinks of Geet- U said it right - hormones overtake his logical senses and he is a putty in the hands of his lady Love though the lady herself does not know it 😆😆😆... Aah, the age of innocence 😳😳... Maan is the epitome of Maleness, arrogance and the fall when in love is definitely hard.. I loved how u portrayed him as a man of decisive action when Geet is not around.. So true, Geet makes him forget his surroundings...😆😆

Oh and how can I forget the playfullness when they were playing in water... I can imagine Maan with his smirk when he dropped her !! And how he wraps her duppatta- just like he wraps her dignity around her with his actions!! Is this a symbolism from u to where ur story may lead to **thinking cap on** 😉😉

Also u brought in one character that Geet would love to see though she may adamantly refuse to agree!! She would have wanted to see her sister Rajjo- and I remember we speaking if Gurvinder and Rajjo could have a romantic inclination.......... I see that there is a reappearance of this character in ur story too.....So is the story leading somewhere 😉😉😉...

Though Maan had to get hints about her past - I liked the concern that Rajjo showed. She asked about her , the baby and did not forget Dev - unlike the Geet in our serial who has one track mind...She forgets everything when it comes to Maan.. She forgot she has to prove that Sasha is the mischief monger, she has not thought about bringing Dev to justice.. See how LOVE changes ppl.....Now all she thinks of is Maan's well being!!

Truth ' The two sides of a coin and Part 2

Also, I think u have painted a realistic picture of the scenario in the haveli.. Yes, Geet's father would blame all but I think he would blame himself too cos he was too weak to stand up for his daughter when she needed him the most.. He would have hated himself for the helplessness!!

And I loved how u cleverly weaved something into the story - No matter how drastic a loved one's actions are, you will still love them.. LOVING A PERSON DOES NOT MEAN U LIKE THEM.. Perfect scenario here.. She did not like what they did , she cannot condone their behavior but that does not mean that the love she feels for the family is killed.. It just did not bind her to allow them to dictate her.. In a similar fashion, will Maan remove the binds of his failures to accept her and appreciate the courage she took!! This is 2 sides of Love - love for her child overtook the love of family because of the rightness in decision (for Geet)... Love for Geet would overtake the rejection or fear of failure for Maan... I hope I have captured the essence of ur writing and reading between the lines correctly,..

And part 2 - the way she thinks - why she does not dare tell him.. again a tantalizing glimpse to her insecurities!! Yes , she wants to but she fears the cost.. This has cost her her the separation from her beloved ones. She is truly alone except for the one stalwart in her life.. Can she lose him too.. Can she close her eyes and beleive that everything will be the same if she refuses to see it and accept it ?? (Maan's love).... I like how u write beautifully but just leave a few thoughts for the readers to understand and infere from.. No spoon feeding.. but at times u portray the emotions sooooooo descriptively that there is no doubts in our minds.. I am in love with ur writing style...

And the kisses - in my mind - it defines the person he is - a decisive person though bound by love does not hesitate to take what is his by right 😉😉😉... Yes,she is his!! And he would stamp his mark on her - not just physically but mentally...

Beautiful integration of the serial to this update.. It just feels like a continuation but with ur unique adaptation... 😆😆😆 👏👏👏

Love,

Rev

Vroom, saw the length after I posted it - Looks like a short story for u from my end 😆😆

Originally posted by: --Nargis--

Hi...Vrush...wow...three HP updates...excellent!! Loved the journey to the beginning. Thanks for including the hotel scene....you know I wanted that in there. Then update 2....wow....ky beach ka scene tha...makes me long to see it picturized in the serial.......at least some version of it.....so I will keep my fingers crossed. Now to the third update....I am glad Geet met up with Raji...her sister. I truly feel that there are a total of 3 innocent by standers in this whole fiasco....Geet, Raji, and their brother. The siblings have been made to be suffer from the separation....and i am happy to see some kind of a reunion for the sisters at least!! Looking forward to the next update....as it seems Geet will have to answer Maan's questions, first of her health...then need for a doctor, and the an explanation on Canada...they mystery will have to unfold!!!

The Truth – two sides of a coin – part 3

Mann reluctantly released her after that spontaneous kiss. He knew he should not let his mind be fuddled and he needed to get answers but she distracted him. Oh and he loved it, but he needed to get a grip on himself. Gurvinder and Rajjo were waiting for them in the other room.

He spoke softly as he put her away from him, "You know I came for you, why don't you admit it that what we have, this, is magical."

Just then they heard Raji calling out from outside to them. It seems they had to go. Raji asked Geet if she was would come home. Geet's shake of the head gave Raji a sense of desolation but she understood that her sister had been through too much and she needs time to come to terms with being back in Hoshiarpur. Once she stays here a few days, she will come around, she mused hopefully.

With promise to come again and meet her sister and bring their youngest brother too, Raji and Gurvinder left.

Munishiji then entered the circuit house to inform him that he had organized a driver for them to the lands Maan wanted to see. Maan cursed at the timing of everyone in his not being able to find out the answers to his questions he had raised to Geet. He felt she was evading the answers. But why?

As they went to the land, that had once been Geet's , they both looked at each other, remembering how she had fainted there and how he had taken her to her haveli. The signing of the paperwork had been tumultuous for her. It suddenly flashed to him that she has asked for the number of the agent who had sold the land to him.

He decided to ask Geet what was the importance, because she had agreed to sign the land papers to know about the land agent but had changed her mind after she had. There was so much he wanted to know today, whereas that day he had felt only victory at finally not being cheated of his money for the land he had paid for.

Today he felt differently, today he felt he had missed something that was glaring at him in the eye. Today he wanted to know everything about Geet. When had this happened? When had this stranger who had fought him all the way had become the most important person in his life? Today he had left all his work, even deals worth lakhs of Rupees to ensure Geet was not hurt. He smiled at the change this girl had brought in him. He felt revisiting Hoshiarpur was like solving the puzzle with pieces that were strewn all over Hoshiarpur from their earlier encounter. He felt it in his gut that there was something momentous about Geet that he will find here.

He looked at Geet quizzically trying to fathom her thoughts, but she seemed to be wearing a mask.

He opened the gambit with, "Ye tumhari zameen hai na Geet, jisse meine khareedi thi? why did you sign the papers without a hitch later on when you had initially protested vehemently?"

She looked at him with a sarcastic smirk lining her mouth, "meine kuch chor nahi diya, aapne khareed li thi aur mein woh baat kaafi der baad samajh payee." Trying once again to avoid the question. She remembered everything but she chose not to explore it anymore. She had been betrayed and now there was not point thinking why, if she ever found that man, she had vowed to herself that she was going to get her answers from him.

She added, to reduce the ire which she saw in his eyes, "Maan, bahut kuch hai, aur mein aap se kahoongi, sab kuch , jo sawaal aap kar rahe hain, sab sawaalon ka jawab doongi, par abhi nahi, abhi aap ye kaam khatam karein,"

Maan seethed but with Munshiji around he did not want to discuss anything so he kept quiet. Once they were back at circuit house he was going to get all his answers.

It was almost evening by the time they went back to circuit house. Geet asked once they were back whether they were to leave soon back for Delhi, but Maan told her that he needed to get the basics of the project sorted out before they left.

He then sat with her for dinner that was prepared for them by the staff Munshiji had organized. After dinner, they both retired to the veranda, where some chairs and a swing was kept to enjoy a moonlit evening.

As they sat in the chairs, just enjoying a cool evening with breeze and moon light for company and dim lights on the porch, Maan ventured into getting some answers.

"Geet, let my why you were at the Canadian embassy that day, the day I met you after I left you in hoshiarpur thinking you would surely were going to your certain death at the hands of your brother?" Maan asked softly, not wanting to get her on the defensive.

She gazed at him with unseeing eyes, "to look for an address of the man who had married me and left me at the airport….a day after… we…..got married…" she spoke haltingly.

He stood up, pushing the chair so hard that it fell backwards, "What? You are married?"

"No, the man already had a wife. So my marriage to him is illegal, but I came to know he is married much later." She tried not to break down as she spoke this, with almost calm in her voice that belied the churning emotions in her. She was surprised she could say this bereft of any emotions in a flat voice as is she was not talking about her but someone else.

Maan came to stand near her chair and she slowly got up and went up to the swing, standing holding the pillar looking out at the horizon. Maan walked behind her understanding that if he spoke something now, she will clam up… so he waited patiently; though he knew there was none in him where Geet was concerned.

She then took a deep breath and said, "Let me start at the beginning…"

Hey vru.....so happy to hv ur update as always..n well its awesome as always.. n so the truth has started to unravel now.....!! 😛