'Zindagi – Ek Safar'Ep:34(Above18yrs plz) - Page 8

Originally posted by: nisisanjh

Kya horaha hai Boomi? what shock u r going to give us? Is she married? uff,i m so tensed now ....

dear, one think need to tell u i got so emotional reading the those 4 lines,
kya yeh Safar Yehin khatm hua, &a mp;n bsp; &a mp;n bsp; &a mp;n bsp; Kya yeh dard yehin dafna hua, &a mp;n bsp; &a mp;n bsp; &a mp;n bsp; Kya yeh milna sirf pal bhar ka tha,
Kyun aisa lagaa inhe miloo ka safar karna tha…

ek ajeeb sa ehsas hua... the fear as if i m going to loose something which i didnt even realised that actually i dont wnat to losse.... kuch aur hona tha, aur bhi bohot kuch pana tha... gosh, why i m explaining to u whn u r the writer ? story mey shayad yeh log mil bhi jaye but for real life these lines r so apt..

love u a lot my dearest ... u knw ive noticed so many times ..it's only u who can make me so emotional with ur writing..kab kaunsi cheex dil ko chu jaati hai pata hi nahin chalta ....pata nahi why it happns...

ok, no more senti baatein... waiting for the next part...post it jaldi ...

Hi Sara,.. u know those lines r my fav and while i was writign soem lines just add on.. i mean u dont have to think for teh next line..and these came just so easily and i can get what u r sying.... this situationin the story is different...but in our lives as welll it can fit in some otehr situation the lines just say the unfulfilled desires ..which we have to leave n go on....

Luv u too saara soemtimes when i write and read u got emotional. i feel oh what i did...but then the story chapter had to do the same..still dont know its not a great feelgin tomake u all so senti,,,,hmmm ab kya karein... yeh kahani hi kuch aisi hai....

next part ..yup will post jaldi.... 😆

Originally posted by: SuhanaSafar

oh wow...a shocking chapter! I wonder what news Pari's sister just told her. Hope she'll allow Vyom and Vani to help her. Continue soon.

Hi Rabia... As a writer u urself.. i think u can get to the story much faster heeh... u had few lines but wodnerful described the part..😃.. yup..lets see whats the news and deos she take tehri help... will continue soon...

Episode: 13

Vyom reached his house and Etansh silently walked inside. Vyom was upset with the way Etansh kept quite all the way to the home in the cab and reaching home made him more sad. Vani tried to tell Vyom , that Etansh is just having mood swings he will be back to normal,, but Vyom felt it very upsetting that how happy Etansh was in the train and again has become sad. Vyom tried to sit with Etansh and ask him whats gogin on in his mind,

Vyom: Kuch hua hai? Train mey kitna enjoy kar rahe the .. kitni sari baatein kar rahe the, yehan se wahan train mey ghumey, ghar atey hiii Etansh tum kyun ruthe hue se, pareshaan, lag rahe ho… beta kuch hua hai… bataoo .. Papa ko nahi batao gey …

Etansh: (he looked up into his father's eyes and cried hugged him tighlyt) Papa, mujhe phir akela kar diya…

Vyom: Tum akele kahan ho, main hun na, bua bhi to ayyi hai ..

Etansh: Nahi… iss ghar mey atey hi, mujhe akelasa hun mehsus hota hai.. aisa lagta hai.. phir woh log milengey jo mujhse Mammaa ke barey mey puchengey, phir wahi dost jo kya hua, papa dusri mummy larahe hain ya mumy dusrey papa, puchengey kya hua tha.. … Papa mujhe yehan aakey sab phirse ankhon key samne ataa hai…

Vyom just kept silent and was not able to say anything… he knew this society doesn't let him live peacefully , they cant even spare a child… but he tried to make his son strong

Vyom: Ab aisa kuch nahi hoga.. koi mere Etansh ko ab pareshan nahi karega…

As Vyom was talking and looking at his sons's tensed face , telephone rang, he took the call,

"Hello, who is it?' at the other end voice came.. 'Hello, Vyom.. Vyomesh ji.. main Parikrama bol rahi hun, train mey miley the…"

Vyom: Parikrama… boliye… (Etansh suddenly smiled as Vyom took her name)

Etansh: Papa Pariaunty ka phone ayaa hai.. (Vyom tellgin Etansh, ' haan !)

Parikrama: Main aap se kuch puchna chahiti thi, nahi kuch kuch help chahiye tha… shayad advice, ya.. (she was not understanding what she is saying.. as she was confused to take his help or not).. Phone pe kahun , ya aap se miluu… (she was asking this to herself)

Vyom: Ji aayiye…address to card mey hai jo maine aap ko diya…

Etansh didn't let him complete the sentence and took the receiver from his hand…

Etansh: Pariaunty aap ghar pe ayiye na.. mujhe aapse aur bhi magic tricks sikhne hai aur haan stories bhi, chocolates bhi khani hai… Pariaunty.. aap kuch boliye … pariaunty.. Vyom Vyom took the phone and realised Parikrama had disconnected the phone. Etansh was very upset he went inside his room, and sat near the window. He was lookgin outside and about to cry… Vyom didn't feel much for Etansh state but felt for Parikrama. He knew she had called as she was in some trouble and needed help, and here Etansh took the phone away, he felt don't know what she must be feeling…

Soon Etansh ran out of his room and rushed towards the stairs, Vyom got very scared and realized Etansh was so upset what is he upto he felt. He followed him calling his name… Down near the building gate he saw a cab and Parikrama was sitting in it. Etansh opened the door and hugged her, Parikrama had a smile though her eyes were full of tension. She came out of the cab asked the driver whether he will wait for half an hour, the driver said, 'No'and Vyom took out the luggage and as Parikrama walked ahead with Etanash holding her hand and taking her towards the stairs… She realised that she hasn't paid the driver and she looked back saw Vyom paying him and felt disappointed at herself & her absent minded ness.

All three of them entered the house As Parikrama stepped in,

She felt scared of what and why she came in here, she had to be at her didi's home. They need her she felt. Still she was confused, Vani shook her asked her what is she thinking, to sit, and she will make some coffee for her. Parikrama said she didn't want anything, she just wants to ask, talk and enquire few things… (In her heart, she was literally cursing herself; why she came here; and will these people know anyway to help her out?)

Vaani realised Parikrama is much tensed and Etansh was making her to see the house and room while she was worried, as she had to talk soon and get to her house. Parikrama just asked Vyom, "Aap yehin ke rehne waley hain, aur.. (she again got confused what to ask?) Vani realizing her state took Etansh with her to bring some snack for Pariaunty.

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omg, don't leave the suspense!!! What's happened at her sister's house?!?!?! I can't wait to find out.

awesome bhoomi. so the guess is rt vyom is divorced. Really sad to see etansh sad.Pls cont bhoomi dont leave it here. Want to know why is parikarma so disturbed wat has happened to her.

Yeh kya bhoomi..suspense pe suspense...:p Meethi lassi namkeen lassi sab milegi par suspense toh open karo;) woh bhi cheti cheti.

👏 lovely part and an amazing way of describing emotions

Originally posted by: SuhanaSafar

omg, don't leave the suspense!!! What's happened at her sister's house?!?!?! I can't wait to find out.

Hi Rabia... ahhaah I am not leavign the suspense.. post karungi ekdam fatta fat😆.... yup wht happen at her sister's house.. it will be out soon...

Originally posted by: golu_1677

awesome bhoomi. so the guess is rt vyom is divorced. Really sad to see etansh sad.Pls cont bhoomi dont leave it here. Want to know why is parikarma so disturbed wat has happened to her.

Hi Golu.... Vyom is divorced??? Yup Etansh hope he gets happiness soon.. i wotn leave it here. will continue soon.... yup u will know why she was so ditrubed and so unsure...

Originally posted by: mad_lovee

Yeh kya bhoomi..suspense pe suspense...:p Meethi lassi namkeen lassi sab milegi par suspense toh open karo;) woh bhi cheti cheti.

Hi Himani.... Meethi lassi only... to meethi lassi agayi hain na ji.. to cheti cheti next part bhi comign haan... 😉

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool

👏 lovely part and an amazing way of describing emotions

Hi jyothi.... gald u like the style and enjoying reading...😃

Episode: 14

Vyom came and asked her,

Vyom: Parikrama, I am sorry U were so tensed and Etansh just snatched the phone away and I can understand how much stressed u r. What u want to ask, enquire?

Parikrama: aa.. I dotn know.. what I am doing here… I don't know whether I can trust u all.. still I felt helpless and felt should get some information and then go to my didi's house or else I will be going and just crygin with them.

Vyom: It's very easy to say u can trust me… but I can just say... u trust urself…

Parikrama:( trygin to figure out why she wants to trust this person) Actually my brother in law was unwell and my didi , my sister is pregnant so I was coming here to take care of her and look after the house chores, as she cant.

Vyom: Ok.. (Trying to listen to her voice clearly ...as she spoke in a choked and soft voice) Parikrama: When the train was about to start She informed me her husband is going through certain checkups and I tried to make her calm and not to get anxious, her blood pressure may rise. Vyom: Hmm I saw, after u spoke on the phone u had tears in your eyes, I had observed it. Parikrama: Those tears were just the beginning of the crisis we had to go through.

Vyom: What happen? what reports said…

Parikrama: Plzz just keep this to urself…I just want to know what should I tell them to do, what should I ask them to hope for, everything seems to be destroyed … My didi got married 5 years back and this is their first child, what wil they do.. how will they cope with this disease… (she was crying loudly ) What will I say, my hands r shivering with the news…how will I give them strength… Vyom took the glass of water and gave her.

Vyom: First tell me, which disease was detected?

Parikrama: (In a low voice with hiccups as she had cried a lot) My parents are in Pune, I will have to inform them too, they will be shattered…after knowing my bro in law is HIV+ he has AIDS. (She looked up at Vyom as if she was not wanting to say)

Parikrama: My bro in law is a very nice person…why did this happen to him. AIDS has no cure, the doctor is telling didi has to get checked as she & even the child can be carrygin the virus … The whole family looks like destroyed… the society will look down at them ..

Vyom: Hmmm (He thought for a while taking a deep breathe.) Parikrama took one sip of the water and looked at him, he sat silent and thinking, later he just searched for some cards.

Parikrama: I Sat in the cab and realised what will I say going there, they all r shattered and I will be one more to add. I am not aware of AIDS nor do I have any knowledge, which can help me to give them hope… AIDS… death is so close, the child, the mother .. what will I tell them.. I needed some help, some one to tell me what should I say .. how to cope .. I was shivering inside with the news.. so saw ur card in my hand and told the driver to take to this place… As I reached I felt confused and just called up… Sorry to bother u.. I shall move now.. to didi's house.. she must be waiting for me. (Parikrama was goign towards the door, she was so confused… and Vyom stood up and walked alogn with her through the stairs.)

Vyom: Parikrama, I am a software programmer and I have done programme for different hospitals to store their Data. I know few counsellers, If ur sister and brother in law r emotionaly shattered let them meet the counsellers and they will make them aware of each and every thing about AIDS. Also there is nothing to be ashamed of to feel others may look down at them. I feel proud u love them and u will support them to cope up and fight this disese. As much as I am aware of this disesse, The Human Immunodeficiency Virus (HIV) basically provokes an infection, which destroys the body's immune system. And AIDS or Acquired Immune Deficiency Syndrome is the advanced stage of this disease. Some HIV-infected patients progress to AIDS quickly while others can remain healthy for 10 years or more. They need their family's support and love. If ur didi is a would be mother, she has to get cheked in right time and there are chances which the doctors will guide u, and the child may not be carrygin the virus, just dont loose hope get the checkups in time. Even if ur Didi is HIV + the doctors can help so that the child doesnt get infected by the virus. Take these cards… Dr. Anand is a well known cousellor and specialist with Patients having AIDS… he will guide u more. Dr. Sudha treats HIV infected patients and am sure she will be of great help to handle the crisis.

Parikrama looked at him with tears dried, suddenly the whole feelgin that her didi's family is completely destroyed she now felt like there is so much hope and so much to look forward… life isn't over….

Vyom stopped a cab and put her luuggae in while Etansh and Vani were coming, Parikrama told Etnash that she will be coming and playing with him next time.. today she is in hurry.. as she was about to say bye and thanks… her eyes were full of gratitude for Vyom.. she knew now she could be strong enough and give immense strength to her didi and Jijaji..(bro in law).. She looked at Vyom… before she could say anything… Vyom said,

Vyom:

Zindagi – ek Safar hai,

Badaa kathin yeh dagar hai,

Safar mey haar na manoo agey rastey khulengey,

Kadam to badhaoo agey hausley buland hongey,

Zindagi – mey kal kya hoga humne nahi jaanaa,

Jo himmat na hare, salaam useey karta hai saraa zamana… (Vyom gave her a smile and salute…)

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wow, that was totally unexpected...omg, AIDS! I wonder who he got it from and when (was he cheating on his wife? 😕). I hope Pari's sister and her sister's child don't have it...or if they are HIV+, it doesn't develop into AIDS anytime soon.

Now i gt to knw what senstve n serious issue u wanted to touch ..n i guess, anothr serious thing will be revl abt Etansh mother ...dont think, divorce ...kuch aur hi hoga..

Ver well writeen Bhoomi...the description is very very gud n ovsly i dont even need to tell u that over n over again... this time dlgs r briliant ...u knw what , whn Vyom said, ''I can just say , trust urself'' I cud actually visualised Rajeev saying this .. I was like,yeh toh uski apni line hai , Bhoomi ne kaise likhdiya?

pics of this part were apt ... grt work dear ... i knw how tough it was to match them ... jhappis for u ...