'Zindagi – Ek Safar'Ep:34(Above18yrs plz) - Page 10

No words to say...ur story has got so many elements...and a serious issue too.

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool

bhoomi i am speachless with the way you have delt with such a sensitive topic lovely part cont soon

Hi Jyothi.... hmmm ur speechless .. dont know what feelign i have to read the comments.. this is the first tiem have attempted such s concept...and after Adhvika story .. after logn have tried this one... hope u like the remaining parts as well when they come up.. 😃 ur comments really booosted my spirit.. 😃

Originally posted by: mad_lovee

No words to say...ur story has got so many elements...and a serious issue too.

Hi Himani.... ki haal chal hai tauda.. had a goodtime reading this story... hmmm story has got so many lements.. aww thats a great great compliment... and serious issue ..yaa and its so sad it has become so very common in life to see peopl esuffering yet awareness ke naam pe nothing... chalo cheti cheti.. meri jhappi paa lo🤗

Episode:17

It was half an hour and Parikrama and etansh did not return, Vyom went out to see what they were doing. He saw a pool of children surrounded Parikrama, Parikrama was battign and apart from Etansh all other children looked disappointed. Etansh and Parikrama were only batting..

Vyom went and asked Etansh what was happening ..

Etansh told him that Pariaunty has told that when she will be out only then the next batsman can play or else only Etansh and she will be batting… and it has been so long none could bowl her out.

Vyom smiled and said to Etansh: Kya Etansh ur Pariaunty is asking these children to do the bowling, woh kitni baadi hai, bade bowling kareingey to ek minute mey out hogi… sab bachoo ko pareshan kar rakha hai… (he laughed again…)

Parikrama heard and asked him , he can also do the bowling…the children pulled him 7 requested him.. to plz bowl even they want batting… or else etansh and Parikrama will bat all through the day....Vyom agreed and he started his over…

On the first ball, Parikrama hit a 4, Vyom felt the first ball was loose..and now see the second… on the second ball she hit a six, Vyom was shocked and wondering he bowled the third ball ..and she hit another 4… and Vyom felt too embarrsed and as he saw Etansh face all shocked… he now came running.. and this time.. Parikram was bowled…. She was out and the whole gang of children along with Etansh jumped with happiness…. Parikrama looked at Vyom.. and as she was about to give the bat she asked Vyom. He should bat, she will trying to bowl atleast an over..

Vyom took the bat and looked at her face.. she smiled with an ease… as she took the bowl from his hand …on the first bowl he was bowled and Etansh again looked at his father and laughed loudly… Vyom with embarrsemetn just smiled.. and all the children around.. were silent.. and Parikrama couldn't control her laughter she laughed and so did everyone..

while Parikrama just took Etansha and returned to the house, Vyom followed them behind.. but in his heart he had that smile of her's and the laughter still making him smile…

Etansh had a great time. Vyom and Vani were also very glad with her visit. Parikrama went and she said she will meet them again.

Yeh khel khel mey 'haar' bhi 'jeetsi' mehsus hue,

Yeh khel khel mey Etansh ki hassi kitni dugni hue,

Yeh safar kahan ko rukh le muud raha hai,

Kissi meethe rishte key bananey ki dastak kya kismat de raha hai?

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Lovely Fic bhoomi darling........Tum to gr8 ho !! Alfaaz nahi hai tareef karne ke......You have touched such a sensitive issue of AIDS through this fic of yours.......!! 👏 Kudos !!

I read the 15 part at mrning but didnt reply coz it was so hard for me to collect right words to decribe what i felt ....the way u wrote i dont think i can make any comment on that...the only thing i cud say, as a story teller u really ve reachd such a position where u can delt with anything so powrfully ..it left such an impact that i wasnt able to make out how much i felt sorry reading n thinking that part ....

The next part was the sweetest ...oh the poem, kabhi kabhi ek halki si jhalak mohabbat si lagti hai,kabhi lamhe bina kuch kiye hi yaadein banjati hai''....I loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeed it .spe teddy hugs accept karo for writing these 4 lines...this one has entrd in my all time fav list..muah muah ...

Ahaan..that criket match ...again something happing in my heart from Voym..his light smiles making me thinking abt him...lol...

next part plzzzzzzz....

just read 4 parts together they were so well written. U have handled such a sensitive issue with ease. Though HIV + is a reality in todays world but people dont want to talk abt it. No one has proper knowledge abt it.

It was sad the why Parikarama's jijaji had got the virus without any mistake of his. But happy to know Her sis and the child are fine.

Now coming to Etansh he is so sweet he is sleeping so that his dad does wat he wants to.

Pari and cricket it was total fun. Vyom got out first ball. But happy to see etansh so happy.

waiting for more.

Great part! Parikrama sure showed him! But I'm glad that Vyom is not angry or resentful...Seems like he's falling for her already! 😳

Originally posted by: togepe30

Lovely Fic bhoomi darling........Tum to gr8 ho !! Alfaaz nahi hai tareef karne ke......You have touched such a sensitive issue of AIDS through this fic of yours.......!! 👏 Kudos !!

Hi Vandu..... am so happy to know that u liked my ff.. main kahan gr8 its just that I am having a great sangat.. to sangat ka kuch kuch asaar acha ahi horaha hai😉😆.... and ya the issue is sensitive and really i wanted to write this.. hopefully my mood gave green singnall... ur appreication really made me feel so good... luv u 😃

Originally posted by: nisisanjh

I read the 15 part at mrning but didnt reply coz it was so hard for me to collect right words to decribe what i felt ....the way u wrote i dont think i can make any comment on that...the only thing i cud say, as a story teller u really ve reachd such a position where u can delt with anything so powrfully ..it left such an impact that i wasnt able to make out how much i felt sorry reading n thinking that part ....

The next part was the sweetest ...oh the poem, kabhi kabhi ek halki si jhalak mohabbat si lagti hai,kabhi lamhe bina kuch kiye hi yaadein banjati hai''....I loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeed it .spe teddy hugs accept karo for writing these 4 lines...this one has entrd in my all time fav list..muah muah ...

Ahaan..that criket match ...again something happing in my heart from Voym..his light smiles making me thinking abt him...lol...

next part plzzzzzzz....

Hi Sara,

U read the 15 part but didnt know what to write... kya aisa hosakta hai.. hey comment karneka pura huq hai tumhe...but .i know what u want to say.. soemtimes we get a reality check and we get a bit distrubed ... As a writer I really dont think i can take up anythign an write powerfully.. its just that when i feel something from deep within my heart aI want to do something.. I kept listenign ab Aids adn felt sorry that tehre was no awareness how could i try my bit i felt..When i was makign this story in my mind.. this segment on AIDS came up with the story and I wanted to write this ff..

yaaa heheheh that poem even I like i mean it came lookign at the pics of Rajeev and payal in the that part i felt Rk's that smile in the pic made me to give those lines... am so gald yaar u liked those lines..😳.. Ohhh wow!! teddy hugs i looooooooooooooovvee it... and muah.. 😆awwww luv u dear...

and Vyom ke liye ur feelgin bhi na... thoda control kahin Parikrama ne sunliya to..😉

Originally posted by: golu_1677

just read 4 parts together they were so well written. U have handled such a sensitive issue with ease. Though HIV + is a reality in todays world but people dont want to talk abt it. No one has proper knowledge abt it.

It was sad the why Parikarama's jijaji had got the virus without any mistake of his. But happy to know Her sis and the child are fine.

Now coming to Etansh he is so sweet he is sleeping so that his dad does wat he wants to.

Pari and cricket it was total fun. Vyom got out first ball. But happy to see etansh so happy.

waiting for more.

Hi Golu....am so glad that the sensitive issue which i tried to brign up throguh this ff was taken well from u all... 😊.. Ya we hear millions spent on the awarenss of Aids and for this we have got so much money frrom other countires as well the medicines r gettign cheaper etc but the most imp thign is awarenss and nothign in reality ishappenign on that front.. atleast for hte common man...

U r enjoyed the cricket match...😉... yup i will post hte next parts soon...😃

Originally posted by: SuhanaSafar

Great part! Parikrama sure showed him! But I'm glad that Vyom is not angry or resentful...Seems like he's falling for her already! 😳

Hi Rabia, Really glad that u liked this part... Vyom falling for Parikrama ..hmm lets see what happens... 😉

Episode: 18

Vyom, Vaani and Etansh were at a market place buying clothes. Etansh saw Parikrama at the market place and ran towards her, Vyom looked at him and before he could stop him he had reached near her and hugged her.Parikrama was very glad to see the love Etansh has for her.. She kissed him; She was with her Jijaji and didi. Vyom & Vani came near,

Parikrama: Vyom yeh mere jijaji Vaibhav aur meri didi Anurama… .. Aur didi..yeh Vyom hain ..maine aapse kaha tha na… inhoney hi train mey uss gunde ko maara.. Dr. Anand aur Dr. Sudha ka contact bhi inhoney hi diya hai…

Vyom shook hands with Vaibhav and as they were smiling, Etansh said,

Etansh: Aur Aapko pata hai... Papa to Pariaunty se bowled hain… (Etansh was laughing)

Hearing the line… all others were extremely embarrsed, Parikrama with her eyes looked at Etansh and told him to be quite… Vaibhav and Anurama were shocked… to clear the matter.. Vyom said

Vyom: Aa… he means when Parikrama had come and we all were playing cricket, she was bowling and I was battign so I was bowled… on the first ball..

Vaibhav still was a bit uncomfortable, it was actually not by Etansh's words but looking at the glow on Parikrama's face after meeting Vyom and Etansh...

Vyom could sense a bit uncomfort as Vaibhav was not looking at him with a smile… he would look at Parikrama and her excitement looking at what etansh had bought.. and feeling as if she was very close to the family.

Vaibhav: Very nice meeting u Mr. Vyom; sorry but we need to move now.. I have a meeting to attend… for whatevr u have done for me and my family.. My heart felt thanks… will try and get in touch later..

Parikrama looked at her jijaji…

Parikrama: but jijaji one sec. .. (Vaibhav interrupted)

Vaibhav: chal rahi ho… (looking at her with concern eyes…)

Vaibhav looked at her and she looked at Vyom and Etansh… she smiled with a feeling as if she wanted to talk and spend more time with them..she went away while Vyom and Vaani took Etansh for shopping.

Hum jab bhi miltey hain kuch apnapan sa mehsus hota hai,

Ek anjaani khushi ek rang sa chehra khiljata hai,

Safar manoo chalta jaa raha hai,

Lekin hum sath hi rahengey iska kyun ehsaas horaha hai…

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At home Parikrama's didi and Jijaji discussed how excited Parikrama is to talk about Vyom, Etansh everytime.

Vaibhav told Anurama she needs to Talk to Parikrama about this.. or else if she doestn control her heart she can take the wrogn route…which will give her only tears…Anurama spoke to Parikrama …

Anurama: Parikrama.. tu janti hai aaj tere jijaji kuch naraaz lagey hai naa...

Parikrama: Haan.. Vyom se milney ki mujhe jitni khushi hai unhe nahi huee... Woh jijaji ke liye kitna sochtey hain.. kitna puchtey hain.. fikr kartey hain..aur apdonone..

Anurama: Unhey bohat khushi huee lekin tujhi itni khushi kyun ho rahi thi.. Tu har din kitni baar Vyom ka naam leti hai.. kitna hamey kehti hai.. di woh kitna achaa gaatahai. Dii woh Etansh se kitna pyaar karta hai... Dii Vyom bohat samjhdar hai.. Diii unhoney aisa kaha tha... Dr. Anand se milkey bhi Vyom key kaam ke barey mey puchti hai...dii Etansh kitni meethi baatein karta hai..di yeh dii woh... kyun unkey baarey mey roz itna sochti hai.. ?

Parikrama: Dii asia kuch nahi..bas acchey log hain.. Etansh bohat pyaara hai mujhe.. Dii app bhi..

Anurama: ab tak to kuch nahi hai.. aagey bhi kuch nahi ho to hi achaa hai.. Etansh pyara lagey utna hi kaafi haii… aur kcuh nahi.. samjh rahi hai na..

Parikrama stood there silent.. not understanding why they r feeling this way..and also not able to make herself undertand why she speaks about him so much… is she doing something wrong? She felt confused and went to sleep…

Kuch to ho raha hai,

Anjaan dil yeh mera,

Kyun mann ikk taraf khichaa jaaraha hai,

Jahan nahi hai makaam mera…

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