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Posted: 17 years ago
no thnx in freindship dear.. 😃 .another filmy dialogue. 😳 😳 😆 ..i'm too a filmy buff...i've grown up watching SRK movies... 😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
aaaahhhhhhh....u guys are tooo gud....iwuz wating sooo long.....for the continuation.....luv ur story..... 👏 keeepppp...it up.....can't wait for the continuation.... 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: Nandini Bhat

I'm back with the next part,guys....Rashi and Me helped each other and this is our continuation...hope u like it..... 😛

Recap:
Veer disguises himself as a Choodiwala and hez successful.... 😃

Contd:
Veer in the getup of choodiwala...

Le lo kanch ki choodiyan.... rang bi rangi choodiyan..... 😆

MC : Searching for veer... 😳

Veer : Aji sunti ho hum aapse pooch rahe hain. Aapke hathon mein yeh choodiyan bahut acchi lagengi.. 😉

MC : Hume nahi kharidni choodiyan.... 😡

Veer : Kyun kya hua...

BF : Le lo na.... yeh agar itna keh raha hai to le hi lo.... 😊
MC : Humne kaha na nahi lena matlab nahi lena... 😡

Veer : Kyun beti (giggling) kya hua aap kisiko dhund rahi ho kya? 😆Beti

MC : Kyun.... aisa kyun poocha aapne ... aur ha hum kyun aapko bataye.. aapko isse kya matlab hum kisiko dhunde ya na dhunde....

Veer : Nahi maine socha aapke saath yeh Bandar toh hai hi to aap kise dhoond rahi ho.... 😆

BF : Kya tumne hame Bandar kaha....Rajjya ke hone wale raja ko Bandar kaha.... 😡tumhari yeh jurrat.... 😡

Veer : Kya MAINE Bandar kaha.... Nahi ji aapne shayad galat suna... (giggling).😉 Maine kaha aapke sath itna bahaddur hote hue aap kisi aur ko kyun dhoond rahi ho.

(MC too giggling )

To kaunsi rang ki choodiyan doon aapko....mujhe lagta hai aap pe yeh rang bahut acha lagega.... 😳

MC : Ha de do... Yehi de do...( thinking that oh God yeh Buddha mera picha nahi chodega lagta hai..... mein ab use kaha dhundoo) 😭

Veer :Yeh lo beti main hi tumhe pehna deta hu.... 😳

MC : Ha le lo pehana do.... (looking here there) (Tu choopa hai kaha 😉 mein tadapti yaha 😆)

Veer holds her hand... 😛

Veer : Kitne mulayam haath hain aapke....kitne sunder....(Thinks...Mann karta hai ki kissie kar loon... 😳 )

MC blushing all the way....she looking at him and he looking at both the hands as well as her beauty...

(Choodi nahi yeh mera dil hai dekho toote na 😆)

BF : AE!!!Tum Choodiwale ho....apni hadh mein raho,Samjhe...Varna....(he pulls out his sword)... 😡

Veer : Haan,Varna? Varna kya kar loge? (hum bhi hai josh mein 😉)

There....Dharam is watching everything....

BF : Kya tumne nahin dekha mere haath mein kya hai? 😡

MC tries to stop him but she is unable to do anything...

Veer : Aise kitne hi talwaar maine dekhe hain....Waise yeh toh bahut hi chota hai,Beta!!! 😆

BF : Lekin kaafi asardaar hai!!!!Ab zyaada behes ki...toh yeh tere khoon se rang jaayega!!!

Veer : Woh toh waqt hi bataayega!!Ek chota sa talwaar hone par ghamand mat kar....agar maine apni talwaar nikali toh tumhe saari duniya Laal dikhaayi degi,Samjhe!!!! 😡 (Dikhave pe mat jao apni akal ladao)😆

BF : Dekho!Mere paas tumse behes karne ka zara bhi waqt nahin hai,Buddhe....Ab tak main chup raha...par ab nahin rahoonga....main....

MC : BAS!!!Ab tum apna muh mat kholna!!!Kisi buzurg se kaise baat karte hain...kya tumhe nahin pata???Hume maaf kar dijiye(says to Veer).....inki taraf se hum maafi maangte hain....woh....

Veer : Nahin!Aapko maafi maangne ki koi zaroorat nahin hai... 😡 ....jise maangni chahiye....usko toh maangna hi padega,aaj nahin toh kabhi aur!!!

BF : Tujhe toh main dekh loonga,Buddhe!!!Chaliya Rajkumari ji..Abey oye....Haath chod,bey!!!! 😡

He leaves her at once....while they on their way,she spots Dharam peeping!!! 😆

MC : Hmmmm.....Hum abhi aate hain....(to BF)

BF : Par....

She follows Dharam....he is unaware of her following him....he goes to Veer to talk to him...

Veer : Agar aaj woh beech mein nahin aati toh main us Bandar ko.... 😡

Dharam : Rehne do,Veer.....use toh saza milegi hi...tum jo ho!!!! 😡

Veer : Hmmmm...Mere talwaar se ab toh woh bach nahin sakta.... 😡

Dharam : (Making a face)....Waise ab toh tum khush hoge hi!!! 😉

The lovely background song Pa Ma Ga...in the form of 'Ooooooo'.....is played... 😆 and then veer singing 😛

(mein jat yamala pagla deewana 😆)

Veer : Haan...bas ek bar woh mujhse aake kahe ki woh bhi mujhse pyaar karti hai....toh main.... 😳

Dharam : Ahem Ahem....and he starts laughing!!! 😆

She hears everything...at this time shez both happy as well as angry!!!Shez not a girl who bears everything and so MC goes to the room behind that Choodi shop where they were chatting....

To be continued.... 😃

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nice continuation nandu loved it....... 😳

And check out d son's and correct them if they don't suit.. 😉

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: mad-about-Rajat

oh nandu and rashi. 😃 😃 ..this rocks yaar. 👏 👏 .....chudiwala 😳 😳 how cute 😳 😳 and especially this line ''Kitne mulayam haath hain aapke....kitne sunder....(Thinks...Mann karta hai ki kissie kar loon... ) '' 😳 😳

andu ur'e a real star..... 😃 😃

Oh thnks Reeti......😃

Now check out this one above this with the added song's 😛

hope u like these song sequences too 😳

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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: Twinz

aaaahhhhhhh....u guys are tooo gud....iwuz wating sooo long.....for the continuation.....luv ur story..... 👏 keeepppp...it up.....can't wait for the continuation.... 😳(Would really do but it might take time 😉)

Oyeeeeeee u liked it...😳

cho sweet............. 😛

🤗

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Posted: 17 years ago
wow!! so nice 👏
keep posting!! 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago

Originally posted by: Girl_2007

wow!! so nice 👏
keep posting!! 😃

😳 Thnks for ur response i

we would definitely keep posting dear... 😆

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Posted: 17 years ago
wow good going Nandini and Rashi 👏 👏 👏 . very good with the story line 👍🏼 . and the songs are awesome just suits the situation 😆 especially
""mein jat yamala pagla deewana 🤣 "" & "" hum bhi hai josh mai"" 😆 🤣
pls do continue guys 😳

wishing u a very happy new year🤗 😊
Edited by castrafa - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago

😳

Originally posted by: castrafa

wow good going Nandini and Rashi 👏 👏 👏 . very good with the story line 👍🏼 . and the songs are awesome just suits the situation 😆 especially
""mein jat yamala pagla deewana 🤣 "" & "" hum bhi hai josh mai"" 😆 🤣 😆
pls do continue guys 😳 (WE will definitely continue 😆)

wishing u a very happy new year🤗 😊

wow thanks for liking this story line.... dear..

wish u 2 a very happy new year🤗

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Posted: 17 years ago
Thank u everyone for liking it.... 😳

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