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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: pree2605

Firstly u r such a great writer..u have shown a real girl story soo beautifully...

I mean like seriously d real world is sometimes cruel with some people...really felt bad for khushi thinking she had to see her father die before her eyes...as arnav said khushi is way more stronger than him...nd khushi she was soo concerned for arnav dat she just wanted to see him...waiting for khushi reaction after she has heard der talk...
Loved it..
Thnxxx fr pm


Thnx Pree😊

awww, so sweet of u , making me humble here.I am so glad that people are showing really gratitude towards it.Yes I did mix with many things but I am sure everyone can see the truth part .

Yes this world is full of many many people who do stuff beyond imagination and they hurt others without feeling guilty and that is what Arnav had shown Palo that he wants to be father of that girl whose father he has killed right in front of her
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: .ArshiHamesha.


Thnx Shreya , I am so glad that I have a superwoman here 🤗 who finished all so quick.

Share the secret 😊

Joke aside, thank you Shreya and don't take me serious, I am just like that.


Haww didu... Am not a superwoman... I might be a Supergirl but not a superwoman..

About secret... The secret is I'm still immature and I like doing things as soon as possible maybe due to excitement... Hehe... Even I don't know

And Didu don't worry I won't mind bcoz I'm your another version 🤗 Even I like joking around so don't worry I won't mind 😎
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Shreyapari


Haww didu... Am not a superwoman... I might be a Supergirl but not a superwoman..

About secret... The secret is I'm still immature and I like doing things as soon as possible maybe due to excitement... Hehe... Even I don't know

And Didu don't worry I won't mind bcoz I'm your another version 🤗 Even I like joking around so don't worry I won't mind 😎


😆 ok so I am getting my mini version here, oh God, have mercy upon me🤗

OK super Bionic girl , welcome aboard.I have many readers who are young,but if u ask me they are
way mature than any mature and adults down the lane.and if u understood my writing then der u are way mture than u think u re
Edited by .ArshiHamesha. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: .ArshiHamesha.


😆 ok so I am getting my mini version here, oh God, have mercy upon me🤗

OK super Bionic girl , welcome aboard.I have many readers who are young,but if u ask me they are
way mature than any mature and adults down the lane.and if u understood my writing then der u are way mture than u think u re


OMG Didu!!! I have never come across such an elder sister of mine who talks much in a riddle. I understood what you wrote but please I don't wish to become mature so soon... & tnx for the welcome Didu... Luv u... Muahhh..
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: .ArshiHamesha.


😆 ok so I am getting my mini version here, oh God, have mercy upon me🤗

OK super Bionic girl , welcome aboard.I have many readers who are young,but if u ask me they are
way mature than any mature and adults down the lane.and if u understood my writing then der u are way mture than u think u re


OMG Didu!!! I have never come across such an elder sister of mine who talks much the way I speak to my sisters here. I understood what you wrote but please I don't wish to become mature so soon... & tnx for the welcome Didu... Luv u... Muahhh..
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: xZoyax

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=49Yo4_9zNQ8[/YOUTUBE]

Yaara...
Manzilein ruswa hain
Khoya hai raasta
Aaye le jaaye
Itni si ilteja
Ye meri zamaanat hai
Tu meri amaanat hai aa...

Mujhko iraade de
Kasamein de, waade de
Meri duaaon ke ishaaron ko sahaare de
Dil ko thikaane de naye bahaane de
Khabon ki barishon ko mausam ke paimane de
Apne karam ki kar adaayein
Kar de idhar bhi tu nigaahein


Sun raha hai naa tu
Ro rahi hun main
Sun raha hai naa tu
Kyun ro raha hun main (x2)

Yaara...

Waqt bhi thehara hai
Kaise kyun ye huaa
Kaash tu aise aaye
Jaise koi duaa
Tu rooh ki raahat hai
Tu meri ibaadat hai


Apne karam ki kar adaayein
Kar de idhar bhi tu nigaahein

Sun raha hai naa tu
Ro rahi hun main
Sun raha hai naa tu
Kyun ro raha hun main


This song is lingering in my head with this chapter .Khsuhi just praying at heart while crossing that park just to see him, but actually she was pleading him to see her that she just wants him and nothing much.If she can cross her fears , why can't he step forward to hold her the very same way.

The red is her plea

and the purple part is her hope and dream

She is waiting for him since last 6 months and now she is seeing a ray of hope when he went to the same point, same waqt which has frozen for her all these years in the form of Palo.

I can't wit to see her reaction when she will know the reason or NOT





Zoya , you have swiped this update with this beautiful song and deep thoughts.Wah kia baat🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: .ArshiHamesha.



Roop, One bold line just had me, yes winning walk with his treasure, his Khsuhi

U brought that scene of his redemption, good one.
I really love this a lot though I was against the ide of redemption, because any eye could see tht he was redeeming every moment side by side to her.

Khsuhi and her past was a real scenario here nd I just had to script it without compromising anything.

Thnx yaara😊



you are such a humble and down to earth.
I found this chapter the most intense in many ways

Thank yo for such a brilliant story and the way you have weaved round a true one, simply remarkable👏 a standing ovation to you.
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Chaverah_TFC

Yaara, this is getting more and more intense. With every chapter, there is a puzzle being solved only to make way for a more complicated one. Its is really beautiful, the way you are weaving the story. If..U say that this is a true story and that that brave girl is among us, reading this, I'd like to say, I respect the both of you. No matter how much I am loving to know more and more about the story, it is honestly painful to know that a person, in real has gone through all this. I pray and hope that everything has a good and justified end.

Coming to the story, well laid, well plotted and more so, well connected. I like the way every dot is finding its line, getting connected to another. Its such a remorse to see how ones repentance cant mend back the broken things. Its too late, I agree. Cost too much, crumpled too much.

The way Arnav stood up for, one can live with their eyes completely closed, I tell you. Oh, BTW, I loved that body guard thing, lining on both his sides in the Mansion JPalo. Bloody damn powerful!

I like the pasts coming to light and makin sense, finally! And Gawd! This girl is one strong, stubborn one. Running all the way to his building? In the night? Bare footed?! God save me!

I like the content end after going through all those thrill, excited and distressed episode. Beautifully narrated yaar. Brillant work!


Candy dear, 🤗I am honored that a writer like yourself is really coming forward and telling me that this piece of writing is connecting hearts.Really , really appreciate that.

Yes she reads with you and reads u too,

There is no question she is one heck of a strong person, when u see nd meet people like her , u always forget your own pain.Life and its miseries seem small in front of that.

Palo was way strong , no doubt ,but every strong has a weak point.He loved Lidia like no one and in his revenge mode he killed her husband ,He wanted her child as his own.That shows how much he loved Lidia , upto the point of obsession,but he had no idea that the child he is looking for all these years to have as his own, is teh one who witnessed him killing her own biological father.

That one point made him dead, Arnav is right , he is a dead man , there is no reason to kill him again.

Once again Thank you so much dear ,means a lot❤️

Love&Hugs
Faiqa
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Posted: 9 years ago
[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e97zp99L2_c[/YOUTUBE]

PLEASE HAVE SOME MOMENTS LIKE THIS
Edited by Roop_P - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Roop_P



Zoya , you have swiped this update with this beautiful song and deep thoughts.Wah kia baat🤗



Thanks Roop devi, This Chapter took me some where .You are right, Simply the best!
Edited by xZoyax - 9 years ago

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