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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

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Posted: 9 years ago

#951

Originally posted by: simple2joy
Hammie ,hi again. good to hear you are enjoying the story
Now on chapter 17.
I m as frustrated as baji is,
Come on itna bhi kya galti kardi usne, wont he b able to enjoy his bhaus engagement?
Jail chala gya itna saza kya kam na thi ? not even bhau's best friend is above the law
I loved loved d tasha scene here.dutta desperate to see nakku even if its against d rules.I found d scene really cute😉
So hammie r we heading towards a grand wedding ?
ahh,the wedding.. every one's demand.. so you can anticipate one... keep reading ,yours hammie

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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#952

Originally posted by: NusiSg

hi nus me here finally
Hmmm done with 17.. yaar I felt sometimes datta consider baaji inferior to him.. taken him for granted. .that's wat I didn't like about datta in actual serial too.. dost dushman ki pehchaan nahi usse... I kno baaji ne chhupaya sach.. but datta's behaviour sometimes really extreme.. it seems he doesn't consider baji as roops best match..khair.. still being an army man n he goes to thaana himself fr his friend was a great deal in itself I guess.. but baaji jesa friend deserve more than that I feel.. meko tere datta pe thora gussa aaya hammie..😉
its how a brother would react.. the insecurity his sis was being romanced..under his nose and he was inthe dark..
Datta's excitement on his own sagaai is really cute.. his zid n stubbornness on seeing her face only once before sleeping was endearing. ..thoroughly loved the scene..
the man loves to tackle challenges... the soldier in him ..charge!!!

Datta mama confrontation scene indeed was to tying the loose ends.. finally mama now on good terms with datta... loved datta's homewrk before ths meeting. .datta was smart n two step ahead of mamaji.. cant wait to see mama's argument with brig paarekh..
Very well written update..love reading the pre-sagai preparation the most..
Will b back soon hammie. . Come n gve us ur darshan here.
Waiting... ... ...
thanks for giving such a positive comment.. pardon my late arrival.. you know living my life in bits and pieces... yours hammie

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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#953

Originally posted by: simple2joy
Hammie hammie hammie, hi taz
Hellooo back again ur lazy n busy reader...eyeee..are you saying me is lazy..glaring at you
An episode full of baji rao chap 16.
It was a great way to show dutta bsji bonding which brought d true essence of laagi.
I remember the rakhi scene where dutta gifted naku on behalf of shethji n kala badmouths naku. yes.. and dutta wanted to give naku pressies.. yaad hai she returned them
Kala was fun today,MY BABY?seriously? 😉 yes...even in LTL she was very touchy ,feely with dutta's face... it was a declaration of ownership to all.. as no one bar aye sahib could be affectionate with dutta..
I loved d whole concept of bringing d background of rakhi and dutta forgiving his sis.
in LTL..he kicked her out of both the house and patil vaadi
I felt it extremely touchy , specially when dutta was calling roops chotti...d bro sis relation is heavenly. yes the serial had some moving scenes between him and roops...
So dutta sher again.ROARRR.
look a leopard never changes its spots
thanks for writing so many things for us its really entertaining.
taz... stay entertained and not up to mischief! 😛 your hammie

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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#954

Originally posted by: NusiSg
Done with chap 16
"the most unkindest cut of all"...Shakespeare
Ohhh Hammie baaji was great here.. u wrote baaji's emotion guilt, love of his only known reletionship, fear all with perfection.. jst loved his breakdown n I felt his pain so deeply..
Raakhi's celebration came vry timely indeed... jst love datta chhoti convo.. I loved her referring him as her father... 😳 humm.. tender moments of dutta's weaknesses.. his maa .his family, baji and naku
The last heroic measure of datta saving baaji frm trench was filmy bt I jst loved duji interaction there... especially baaji giddy act was heartwarming hammie... yes baji and nautanki
All in all a vry vry emotional chap bt I'm glad ths duji confrontation comes timely.. I jst love love love ths dujified chap...romance ki khair hai.. wese b thora zada hogya tha..😉 will b bac soon fr 17.. ok nusi.. hammie complacent you and taz are reading and enjoying.. yours hammie

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simpleAnna

@simpleAnna

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#955

👏Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie,
👏Pata to chal gye hoga k whatever i read, i found it absolutely fantastic...

I am giving comment on 3 chapters together.i dont want this thread of urs get closed. it has d last remnants of ur hardwork on laagi, yes we can bring a seperate thread but we can't bring back the old mates..

Annotate karne me itnaaa der kardi apne k abtak main wo lines bhulne laagi jo mujhe touch kiya hain. nuspa is a better doctor than me usse bohat yaad rehta hain apke lines n she gives better comments.
well i loved d Ram-Dutta convo, really really it shows modern thought process from an educated person.Dutta k isi baat pe fida ho rahi hu main😳

The scene between Ram's wife and nakku was even better. How can u bring d tension of marrying a fauji sooo sooo beautifully. i feel this is d true essence of this story, true beauty of this story... Dutta as a fauji.today i was going through an epi of laagi, 24 march. youtube has blocked my opportunity to watch laagi in sequenc i m just watching whenever i come across a video which is not blocked.there r ways to download a blocked video.but i cant download all epis of laagi thats going to b hectic.to kya kehrahi thi this 24 march 2010 episode , wo dutta remninded me of this dutta when he said "ye mangalsutra kisi bhi waqt utarna padh sakte hain''.i think it was a brilliant idea to replace don dutta by fauji dutta.wahi swagger hi reh gye, d way he was handling d pistol...hayeee.
it was really touching when nakku was getting to know about d life of a fauji's biwi, how it feels.and es faujis fight battles of outside but these biwis fight battles on both inside and outside.they have to take d responsibilities in d place of an absent husband, and yes they miss their hubbies.and this is d toughest battle of all.

what i loved most is d dutta munno chemistry. d kid is introducing dutta to another phase of his life. How it feels to have a baby boy close to ur chest, whose blood flow through ur veins.
dutta must admit what he was feeling, and nakku, enough of teasing bechara dutta, he is a fauji he will b able to handle d baby properly, itna bhi kya tease karna hain usse.

just read chapter 21, parting is a sweet sorrow. u showed ur excellence i terms of expressing dutta's emotions.a writer is successful when he makes d reader live d moments himself, considers himself as the character...here dutta, his struggle to stay away from nakku, failure, feeling her physical presence for the last time before a short separation ... so beautifully u described, i loved every bit of it. basically i m never into this much of romantic stories, rather i love subtle things, speaking with eyes, chup chupke kind of stuff which i got to see in laagi...never liked romantic stories much but this comes as an exception.. in these kind of scenes with the desperate attempts of dutta to meet nakku for d last time , making her feed vada paw, drinking from her glass of water...this cute romantic things have really really touched me.this chapter is something i would like to read again.

I beg u not to keep urself restricted in a small forum.Allah blessed u with graceful pen, so that u can spread joy to others...never stop doing that.
love ur writing.
take care.

Edited by simple2joy - 9 years ago

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simpleAnna

@simpleAnna

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#956

Hello Hammie,
I m back.Going to comment on a few more chapters together.Hope nuspa will understand my impatience.Time is something that never returns, time may not come if i let it flow.as a fan of ur pen, i must finish whatever it created on time.i read BB,i read wedded bliss, now here on PR chapter 22.

I loved the chunni scene, i think it's my type of scene😆 subtle love feeling the presence of ur love. the cutest thing was d sandwich.AWWW Dutta is a real sweetheart.
I loved the ending para, full of surprise. but d best part was Dutta nakku meets each other in their respective uniforms.This is something I really liked, carries a lot of depth to me.

Chapter 23,24.
Hammie I m in an illusion created by u.whatever u wrote about d army life ,it felt like u lived such a life.alarms baje, sab uthkenduarke bhagrahe for assembly, duttas classes n lectures,about TEAM SPIRIT.really awesome.
Nakku too is bz with her PT session with nandi.u have shown the difference in lifestyle so beautifully.two people, different profession, different life, enjoy a common thing ,LOVE.
awww it really came as a shock when nakku comes to meet dutta.

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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#957

Originally posted by: simple2joy
👏Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie Hammie,
👏Pata to chal gye hoga k whatever i read, i found it absolutely fantastic...
hi taz ... humm pata hai, nazar ah raha hai mujhe
I am giving comment on 3 chapters together.i dont want this thread of urs get closed. it has d last remnants of ur hardwork on laagi, yes we can bring a seperate thread but we can't bring back the old mates..
good chotti doc..you are wise
Annotate karne me itnaaa der kardi apne k abtak main wo lines bhulne laagi jo mujhe touch kiya hain. nuspa is a better doctor than me usse bohat yaad rehta hain apke lines n she gives better comments. well you know what refrained me taz..its not like its deliberate
well i loved d Ram-Dutta convo, really really it shows modern thought process from an educated person.Dutta k isi baat pe fida ho rahi hu main😳
I quite warmed to the character of Ram myself
The scene between Ram's wife and nakku was even better. How can u bring d tension of marrying a fauji sooo sooo beautifully. i feel this is d true essence of this story, true beauty of this story... Dutta as a fauji.today i was going through an epi of laagi, 24 march. youtube has blocked my opportunity to watch laagi in sequenc i m just watching whenever i come across a video which is not blocked.there r ways to download a blocked video.but i cant download all epis of laagi thats going to b hectic.to kya kehrahi thi this 24 march 2010 episode , wo dutta remninded me of this dutta when he said "ye mangalsutra kisi bhi waqt utarna padh sakte hain''.i think it was a brilliant idea to replace don dutta by fauji dutta.wahi swagger hi reh gye, d way he was handling d pistol...hayeee.
it was really touching when nakku was getting to know about d life of a fauji's biwi, how it feels.and es faujis fight battles of outside but these biwis fight battles on both inside and outside.they have to take d responsibilities in d place of an absent husband, and yes they miss their hubbies.and this is d toughest battle of all.
these were all memorable scenes for me taz.. the very pulse of Dutta ,and his way of life , past,present..
what i loved most is d dutta munno chemistry. d kid is introducing dutta to another phase of his life. How it feels to have a baby boy close to ur chest, whose blood flow through ur veins.
dutta must admit what he was feeling, and nakku, enough of teasing bechara dutta, he is a fauji he will b able to handle d baby properly, itna bhi kya tease karna hain usse.
i wanted to show him in a paternal scenario.. so used Ram and his family as a prop..
just read chapter 21, parting is a sweet sorrow. u showed ur excellence i terms of expressing dutta's emotions.a writer is successful when he makes d reader live d moments himself, considers himself as the character...here dutta, his struggle to stay away from nakku, failure, feeling her physical presence for the last time before a short separation ... so beautifully u described, i loved every bit of it. basically i m never into this much of romantic stories, rather i love subtle things, speaking with eyes, chup chupke kind of stuff which i got to see in laagi...never liked romantic stories much but this comes as an exception.. in these kind of scenes with the desperate attempts of dutta to meet nakku for d last time , making her feed vada paw, drinking from her glass of water...this cute romantic things have really really touched me.this chapter is something i would like to read again.
yes ,iam aware you like the snatched hush,hush romantic moments
I beg u not to keep urself restricted in a small forum.Allah blessed u with graceful pen, so that u can spread joy to others...never stop doing that.yes you said the same in our first meeting.. till now your bashan continues..
love ur writing. when you say this.. iam reminded of bart.. she has to be my most loyal reader.. even today I can vouch for her words about my writing.. she is a writers motivation to write..your zeal ,too along with nus remind me of bart..
take care. thanks so much for reviving this lost tale ,my first attempt... regards hammie

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Hamlet53

@Hamlet53

Sparkler

Posted: 9 years ago

#958

Originally posted by: simple2joy
Hello Hammie, heloo taz.. mera name,just the once?😛.. aacha hai
I m back.Going to comment on a few more chapters together.Hope nuspa will understand my impatience.Time is something that never returns, time may not come if i let it flow.as a fan of ur pen, i must finish whatever it created on time.i read BB,i read wedded bliss, now here on PR chapter 22.
i can gather from your text ,you ,yourself are ready to write.. sun, you doing a good job on Ishq,by writing,even bits on Laagi.. I enjoy it😊
I loved the chunni scene, i think it's my type of scene😆 subtle love feeling the presence of ur love. the cutest thing was d sandwich.AWWW Dutta is a real sweetheart.
I loved the ending para, full of surprise. but d best part was Dutta nakku meets each other in their respective uniforms.This is something I really liked, carries a lot of depth to me.
ohhh haan.I recall..her chunni became a replica of her ..this was the amorous dutta...😆..

Chapter 23,24.
Hammie I m in an illusion created by u.whatever u wrote about d army life ,it felt like u lived such a life.alarms baje, sab uthkenduarke bhagrahe for assembly, duttas classes n lectures,about TEAM SPIRIT.really awesome...if you read into it taz.. he was the platoon commander.. traning cadets.. my BIL .. was fauji , he briefed me a lot..
Nakku too is bz with her PT session with nandi.u have shown the difference in lifestyle so beautifully.two people, different profession, different life, enjoy a common thing ,LOVE.
awww it really came as a shock when nakku comes to meet dutta.
carry on reading taz.. iknow the chapters were very long.. i had so much to write about then.. imgination just flowed.. regards.. yours hammie

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simpleAnna

@simpleAnna

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#959

hawww u already nnotated,i had to edit for more.just finished chapter 26.papaji k pant...
anyway hammieee wahhh u r sooo romantic, ye payelwala scene wass out of the world. and can blv u wrote this.and u announce that u CAN'T write romantic novel. Liar kahiki, PR is a romantic novel, isme sab romance hi to hain. added masala is dutta's fauji avatar which i m loving a lot.

Cham chammm payel baje on dutra's HAIRY chest.hahaha.hammie hammie hammie hammie where u got all these innovative ideas?ye serialwalo needs to hire u cz ur imagination knows no bounds.hahaha.
Khan sahiba kabab mein naye haddi kya?ye chirkut harshad kam tha kya?

Read chapter 27.hayeee Dutta is sachme gadha, he is demanding HIS chunni???hahaha.aur kia janoar ban jate, nakku k dupatta khicke le k gye.hayeee naughty naughty dutta.
Char lamho k mulakat fir lambi zudayiii...khan ko itna zyada attention kyun milraha in ur story?what is ur matlab?like bharti di merese bhi daant padenge.
Oh Allah how cpuld u write too many details about PT ???u show brilliance in ur homework as well.
Heading towards d next chapter.love u hammie.

just read chapter 28. Tide of men or something... hmm Harshad's chracter is uglier than i thought. hope he doesnt harm nakku this time. khan has become female antagonist or d inncent third angle? looking forward to that. their life of zudaai is continued.dutta n HIS chunni...hayeee...

Chapter 29.
Here u r determined to keep d reader glued to ur work shukar hain I wont have to wait for some friday for this update I will b reading again now???ughhh nooo why did u do this to me I have too many things to study na? Main socha k study karnese pehle thoda ye padhlu ab next chapter na padhne tak chain nehi ane wale.

chapter 30, 31, 32.
there is nothing good or bad, thinking makes it so.😆

hammie hammie hammie, ur dutta was breathtaking in the courtroom scene.but nakku stole my heart, sherni kahiki.
👏👏
dutta nakku romance continued.dutta mischievous, nakku besharam.hayeee hayeee hayeee kia kia combo.
lauren ka wo jo ahem...haan dutta dekh leta hain n nakku gaves her that look hayeee too cute👏Harshad was more than a kabab mein haddi.😡 disgusting admi hain.i m so pleased with the Saab who ignored the pic.nakku had d honesty to tell him and he didnt trust that picture evidence. reminds me of the scene from lagi, dutta says mujhe nakku pe shak nehi shak uske pyar par hain.

she has two medical conditions for which I am treating her, even a slight deviation from the controlled diet can also escalate her hypertension or aggravate her diabetes, so ensure she eats healthily , rests properly and is monitored carefullyhope the writer knows everything by heart😆

hawww dutta gussa, nakku ne jhut to na boli.and i hate this KHAN.😡bloody chipku kahiki.the basanti mango veeru scene is hilarious hamie, i loved loved ur sense of humor here.😆👏

abtak itna hi padhli, pappaji k pant to khatam honeka nam na lete.to abtak itna hi padh payi main

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simpleAnna

@simpleAnna

Voyager

Posted: 8 years ago

#960

Haye hammie haye haye haye ye sab maine kiya padh liya.chapter 33,34.
Ye dutta kyun itna gussa hota hain, kuch zyada over react nehi?n naku to maahan banti rehti hain bappa bappa karti lekin andarse shameless hain.
Miss nuspa, she is lagging behind, miles away.warna main uske saath maze le sakti thi
Ye kia likha apne hammie ji, thrills hi thrills milte rehe mujhe.Dutta k shower scene, uske soap aur shampoo tak ka description di apne.sare ladkio k band baj gye honge 😆 .lakin bathroom se nikal ne k baad apke lion ne jo dialogue mari hain nakku ko.that he will throw d towel away,sawariya ha ha ha ha sawariya ha ha ha ha sawariya ooo sawariya, jab se teri naina, meri naino seee lage reee , ahem sorry madamji...ahem nakku chahe jo bhi bole apne muhse k DON'T U DARE, lakin man hi man laddu to zarur aa rahe honge.haye haye haye... 😳 😳 😳 .aur jo tightly wrapped towel se nakku ko giggling miley na, haye I remembered john from dostana.

Nakku singing a song for her saab, hmmm I love d song kyun hain roothe mose mohan kyun.
I loved d entry of aye sab n her health issues.jagadambe ab bappa k sath milke shadi karade un dono k, warna shadi se pehle hi un dono me wo ghatna ghat jayega.aur nakku k Bappa dekhte hi reh jayega. 😆 .
Ye apke 34 chapter wale doctor jo hain ikdam k ullu hain.abhi Hypertension kia ho gye hain stroke tak chale gye hain. Doctors aise na bola karte.every disease can lead to death.ab koi puche to unko agar prognosis bataogi , to ray of hope bhi dena padega at the same time.haan and everytime I have to say it is on Allah's hands.ab kabhito mujhse breaking bad news hote bhi nehi.I m too bad at it.but this doctor had a option not to give dutta a panick attack.

Chapter 35.hmm more of family bonding rather than romance.dutta and his concern for his mother.I loved the title.his mother, his widow mother who lost her husband in a war.then somehow managed to take care of all the children.
Duji drunk scene, ye hajam na hote mujhse.bekar shaukh of the rich people.that dutta was a don, it still goes.but for an educated army man dutta, ye kuch zyada hi lagte hain.nakku should have stopped him.
So dutta n his chunni is again back.lol.it is funny to see him possessive about d chunni.cute thing hammie.😳

chapter 36: hamlet k nakku pehenli helmet, ughh dutta unable to see her beautiful green eye, bechare.i must say dutta was hawwwtt in the bike.tum ho pas mere, pas mere... purane yaadein taza ho gye.i cried a lot after watching the film, jis tarha chinega, mujhse ye jaha tumhe...i love d way u add songs to any scene and dutta nakku feels every word.
hawww dutta ko papa banneka jaldi hain.rup tera mastana ,pyar mera dewana ,bhul koi humse na ho jaye...jmm ho na pae, nakku k bappa firse aa gye berahem. haye hammie apne readers ko kitne tadpayi hogi. no wonder the readers were crazy for fridays.ek insan k comments mujhe bohat entertain karte hain, meri bharti di.gussa karti hain, accha mast comment bhi karti hain, khush bhi hoti hain.😆

bohat ho gye, anno kardo.nuspa k bare mein maat socho.wo kachua hain.mere piche aag lag gye hain.mujhe jaldi khatam karna hain.fettered affection k prologue padhli thi, wo padhke laga k wo bhi bohat jamega, so abhi jaldi karrahi hu.apke writing padhke khatam karnese pehle agar mar gyi to?

Phew.finished thread one.dhinchak dhinchakkk.oye hoyeee.
Love u hammie.love ur pen.
Ab ye kabab mein haddi khan to apse kuch zyada bhao kha rahi hain.itne lambe lambe, acche acche uske gungan ...if u needed a fauzi heroine to nakkuko bana deti na.iske role kahi nakku se zyada na ho jaye.
Hammie hammie hammie, haye ye dutta bhi bappa jaise beraham hain.khud to romance karte firte hain, pyar k dushman ban gye.ye bechara dutta shave kyun karli? Nakku to ladki boli usse, main bolti chicken.lol.

Miss ur writing.
Miss ur writing.
Miss ur writing.
Miss ur writing.
Miss ur writing.
Miss ur writing.

This is what I found to b d best in chapter 37.there was almost a tie between two.
one can still love someone from far ,without any hope of accomplishing love in totality, for one still has within ones 'self the emotion of love for the other

Superb lines hammie. 👏 did u see my new siggi?I was asking for nice quotes.kitne sare hain.fir kisi ek take se uthake dal di, but now liking a lot others n that too more.U NEVER HELPED ME. 😲

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