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suji5

@suji5

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#861

nice update
good that Arnav reached khushi before getting late
thanks to drunken shyam...
how cruel Malik is..he is the reason for the death of Arnav's parents

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horizon123

@horizon123

Inactive

Posted: 10 years ago

#862

grand update, loved it😊😊

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KeerthiRajkumar

@KeerthiRajkumar

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#863

awesome update
loved it
finally they are together & staying together
that is a big deal

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Jyothi Rockzy

@jyothirockz

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#864

Hey Suri,

That was just too good. I am so happy that Arnav percieved Khushi and got her out to be with him , so that he can keep her safe and be sure of it. But will Shyam keep quie ? He surely not one to accept defeat so easily. It's shame Lavanya harbors such interests on her brother. Will they come to know of it ?

I so loved the restlessness that Arnav showed at his housejust to have Khushi all to himself. The hand holding they needed to reassure themselves and for their peace of mind ..so sweet.

Hopefully next update wont be too late. But we understand when AD gets too hectic.

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arshi_sarun

@arshi_sarun

Voyager

+ 5

Posted: 10 years ago

#865

Superrr update thanks for the pm

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crazy4ArnavSR

@crazy4ArnavSR

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#866

Nice chap.

good to see it all progress in their relationship. I had liked the things u had planned for this chapter...but to be very honest, things were too hapahazard in there...MAybe, as i wud like to reflect on it due to ur hectic AD. Bcz otherwise i know u r a fantastic writer.

So, coming bk to glitches, there was too much jumping bk nd forth...at times creating confusion if two differently placed scenes are in continuation or different ones entirely? for instance, post-breakfast visit to AR nd dawn-visit to AR? the convrsation tht happend in two scenes seemed to be in continuation...but early dawn and breakfast indicate two different times :/

And then i felt a little of each of their POV's were missing here and there. For instance...the worry tht khushi felt for Arnav throughout could hv been vividly described bit by bit.

Then...Arnav's immedeate feelings (or a monologue at later stage) at words he heard rgt at khushi's door? Plus...Evn thugh he said...don't question..but jst come along if u trust...still...shudn't there be some monlogue in Khushi's mind? I mean i understand she knows he heard a part of her argument with her mother...but still...! I mean...she's just going away like tht? Shudn't she be worrying abt how and wat she's gonna answer to him? and wat all has he heard? and wat must he be thinking? and why is he just taking her somewhere?

Well...those are a few thing tht i felt were either missing or not right in chap.

If its okay for me to tell u...and if u plan to keep this story with you (which i know u wud obviously do) ...i wud want u to reconsider re-writing this chapter.

so that was just my honest opinion. But...u don't hv to pay heed to to it if u find me offending at any point. Blv me...tht is not my intention...!

Anyways...thanks for Chapter. Wud b eagerly lookng forward to next one. but i understand ur time space as well. :)

Love

Meg :)

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shalini_s

@shalini_s

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#867

Glad that he came for her... Loved the update..

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khareshelley

@khareshelley

Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

#868

long long awesome update..!!!

la is so delusional..!!!

that malik dig his own grave.. he told about how he deceive his own brother for wealth.. !!!!

and shyam is no less.. he will be getting high blow on his face..!!!!!
glad that arnav came on time and get her away form her family..!!!

hand holding for assurance.. to calm himself..!!!

finally they have conversation... they told told each other about what's bothering them..!!!

arnav is teasing her.. nice..!!

love the way he is talking to his family about khushi.. and khushi is wondering what's wrong with him..!!!
love the way their relation is progressing..!!!!

pls continue soon.!!!

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madhu1210

@madhu1210

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#869

Simply awesome update!

Arnav khushi had wonderful return bus journey.

I spite Arnav talk khushi misunderstood hin when La talked yo her father. .

Glad shyam n malik in their drunken state accepted what their evil plans .

Arnav thank god reacts fast n reach to khushi.

Totally loved the way Arnav asked khushi will u come with me without asking anything. .

Khushi went with him..

The way he kept holding khushi's hand was simply beautiful. .

Raizada Menston Mami Nani are superb..

Arnav didn't realise what chaos he is creating by making khu6 stay in his room..like the way Arnav said not yet married..

Anjali great time entry saved khushi n Arnav. .

Arnav the way he finally took khushi out from his family was nice..

The wag he told her whatever he can was superb..

Eagerly looking forward how and when Arshi will beat shyam n malik .

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Sheetal

@Prettycool

Navigator

Posted: 10 years ago

#870

Suri loved the way chapter 26 came along ... As always mentioned I love subtle romance in this too remind me swedes couple (just holding hand and feeling presence of others near you , considering person in with for life without saying and understanding meaning of it ) superb ...
Love... Mami ka dialogue truth to be told I fell down from my bed .. Real ROFL
Eagerly waiting to see how Arnav khushi take down chacha n Shyam ..
Still worried for Payal hope her mom didn't use her as replacement to khushi..but far most precap is very intriguing to me "love and marriage" .. Anjali's wedding and love confrontation between this two .. Seriously u have to come back sooner than this time with update

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