Arhi SS: Tewari & Sons, No. 23, Chandni Chowk (THREAD I) - Page 37

Though I am a South Campus product, I see that you have portrayed the K Nags & Arts Facs crowd brilliantly. So. Much. Nostalgia. Your writing is wonderfully vivid, but you already know that :)

You've created such wonderfully vivid and rich microcosm of college life inhabited by a bunch of mediocre people living their lives filled with petty politics, snobbery and petty cruelties

No one is distinguishable for anything other than their petty behaviour or their very mundane responses to situations.

Your Khushi is such a refreshing change from the larger than life Khushi we have got so used to. She is marked by her unexceptional mediocrity. Though there is a spirit in there that I suspect will surface at the right moment.

Loved the description of Khushi's failed attempt at earning extra money That is so typical of people to assume a bowl of kadhi would do or that one could adjust one payment against another.

It is as if these people are all plain caterpillars crawling about their daily business of everyday life and suddenly they may burst into becoming beautiful butterflies. How that will be is not clear as there is very little in their personalities at present that promises any such thing, they all will definitely evolve into moths. but something is brewing under the surface, something they themselves are not aware of.

Mr. Raizada literally dying on her is just the kind of thing that poor Khushi would have to find herself saddled with! There's something very funny in your telling of it, I'm sorry, don't know why I find it so, but do.

Btw, It always seems to me that there is a very subtle thread of humour lacing your very matter of fact descriptions of events. There is something rather poignantly comic about the situations despite the inherent and overt cruelty and unkindness in them. Or I have a strange sense of humour.

Originally posted by: archana.mh17

Hi Radhika! I have one simple question to ask-Where have you been all my life?!

That was brilliant! And, somehow, even that word seems inadequate!

And, this is probably as slice-of-life as a story is ever going to get!

If this is your first piece of writing, I wish you'd tried writing much before, & I do hope you'll continue writing, because you have a narrative skill that not many possess, & your story is intriguing enough to hold the reader's attention all throughout the chapter!

Kudos to you for another wonderful chapter! I am sorry that my comments are rather sproadic & I know your story deserves better, but I have been busy, & more often than not, I'm a little lost for words that would do justice to your chapters!

👏 👏


I absolutely second very single word that Archana has said in the above post. Yellowboots, you have an amazing skill in writing, especially in the vivid descriptions of the minutiae of life.
This is the one comment amongst the many brilliant comments I have read, that for me is a matching tribute to your writing skills.

@bold, that is how I exactly feel- very inadequate in being able to express my feelings for each of your brilliant updates.

Thank you Archana for saying what i wanted to say.😊

This story takes me back years - oh what it is to be young and in school!

Loved the chapter and am looking forward to Arnav's pov.

Someone please slap Payal for me!!! She is so rude! I hope Anand didn't die in front of Khushi...hope he just passed out! Please cont soon

Someone had commented early in the story is that the best thing about this is that - all of this could actually happen and yet it won't. The more I read of this story, the more I am convinced of this. It is as if, you gave a little bit of our lives to these characters. I hope you will give us an update this weekend.

Hi Radhika🤗

So I read the update yesterday (I can't believe you left it at that!) and it literally left me a little speechless - I had to ponder about it for some time, especially the ending bit.

And then I realized, I always assumed Arnav's dad is still alive. I think Anjali mentioned that both the parents had not visited her home yet (I didn't go back and double check on this so maybe it was just my assumption) and Poonam was once thinking of all the people in her life and their preoccupation with things other than money and she thought about her husband's love of golf (and I assumed that was in present tense). So now I am very confused - is he alive or not?? LOL add this to my list of questions I desperately need answers to. But whatever the case, I can see why this incident would shake up Khushi as a man collapsing like that in front of her is definitely not an everyday sight. And I have a feeling that Arnav might have said something to her about her being bad luck to people (i.e. Aman and now his Dad) - maybe that's the reason he still feels bad for what he did in college?? I should probably stop guessing and just enjoy this ride you are taking us on now, but my mind literally won't shut off.

Preeto seems like a good friend, unlike Lavanya who only liked Khushi when she felt superior to her. Maybe Khushi should introduce Preeto and Akash to one another - seems like they could hit it off. Akash is such a sweetheart for helping out Khushi - please tell me they are still friends to this today!

Thanks for describing all the little details about the college, the school rivalries, etc - it really gave me a better feel of the setting.

So Arnav does seem to have a Khushi complex, as Payal once mentioned. I was surprised, just like Khushi, to hear that Arnav told Payal about Khushi's job. For someone who acts so indifferent towards when others are around, it is weird that he would talk to Payal of all people about her (but obviously he pays attention to her, as evidenced by his memory of her crying for getting that B+!!) And maybe Preeto is right - Payal might be more mean to Khushi than other people because she thinks Arnav has some kind of interest in her.

I'm glad you are soon going to be giving us Arnav's insights on the past. It's been interesting that you have been sharing Khushi's history of the past and more of Arnav's current situation, so hopefully now that the past will be from Arnav's POV, we will get to see more of Khushi's current situation as well. Can't wait to read more😃

hi Radhika i really liked ur story

Hey Radhika,