ArHi SS: Quiet places (Read warning) [Completed] - Page 4

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Originally posted by: Mirabell

WOW!!

How inadequate language seems to me... at this very moment... trying to respond... when it is that very language that yielded so beautifully to your poetic dominance!

This is storytelling at its best. You write like an old soul, wizened with the weight of all the magic and mystery your characters bear. There is an easy familiarity in the way you wield power over your language that she becomes pliant to your demands, bending and giving in ways that seem almost servile in supplication!

Quiet places it is...
Where stories speak their loudest
In between breaths
Where cadence is their racing pulse

I almost missed the story! The quiet spell that you cast with secrets you hide so well in between your sentences. But they are in plain sight for all to see! So, are they really secrets then? No, it is writing at its magical best..

Quiet places it is...
Where words put on their best shows
In between the pages
Where magic weaves a supple spell

Originally posted by: Raila1014

Isn't this every guy's secret wish to be dominated by their female counterpart but they may feel like they need to conform to what society expects of them - I.e. Be in control, take the lead and don't be overshadowed by the women? I love it that the tiger became putty in her hand when she lashed back. Yes ma'am, please and may I - not words we hear from the typical ASR. So yes just like Kushi, I am enthralled by this version of ASR. I think she is going to enjoy being in control for a while. I like that you leave much to our imagination. It makes it more intriguing.

Thanks for the scrap.

You half nailed the point. This story is about that very aspect - societal expectation and what one feels.
I like to leave everything else to your imagination because am totally abiding by the forum rules. They asked us not write. They never asked us not to enable your imagination 😆

Originally posted by: RockBarbie

You half nailed the point. This story is about that very aspect - societal expectation and what one feels.
I like to leave everything else to your imagination because am totally abiding by the forum rules. They asked us not write. They never asked us not to enable your imagination 😆

Originally posted by: Mirabell

WOW!!

How inadequate language seems to me... at this very moment... trying to respond... when it is that very language that yielded so beautifully to your poetic dominance!

This is storytelling at its best. You write like an old soul, wizened with the weight of all the magic and mystery your characters bear. There is an easy familiarity in the way you wield power over your language that she becomes pliant to your demands, bending and giving in ways that seem almost servile in supplication!

Quiet places it is...
Where stories speak their loudest
In between breaths
Where cadence is their racing pulse

I almost missed the story! The quiet spell that you cast with secrets you hide so well in between your sentences. But they are in plain sight for all to see! So, are they really secrets then? No, it is writing at its magical best..

Quiet places it is...
Where words put on their best shows
In between the pages
Where magic weaves a supple spell

Oh wow! Thanks so much for the lovely response. Its awesome to hear response in verse form :)
I am hiding behind language to avoid writing explicit scenes. There was this discussion on tumblr where one writer said he cannot write explicit scenes at all though such a scene was a necessary plot point in his novel. One of the (best) advices he received was that to write about such a scene but never explain what exactly is going on. Write about what the characters are feeling and where their head space is instead of explaining what they are physically doing.
So I got fascinated with the idea and trying to do this 😊

It felt like I was reading a fluid seemless poetry...its a rare gift to be able to translate almost abstract thoughts into words and somehow make complete sense...it was dreamlike yet it was very real😊

Originally posted by: meera30

Aha! Here I am!

Don't you write like a dream? And this is sex we are talking about - warning and everything!

Welcome back, RB! May this inspiration flow fluid till the end!

Cheers

Oh? Am not talking about sex at all :=) That's what you thought!

They could be moaning because of the awesome chocolate they were eating. They could be groaning because they bumped into something. They could be sweating because their AC broke and its hot as hell - weather wise.

What you think is all on you Meeraji 😆

Quiet places, indeed... it leaves everything else to your imagination.

Most women have little or no idea of what they can do to a man !

Very interesting. Looking forward to reading more..