KR FF:(Obscure Concoctions)A Million Mistakes(Chapter 2-page 16)

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Himani

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Posted: 12 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: yogini64
Promise me.. u won't leave it in middle...😳😆

Vaise ab koi chance bhi nhi h.. kriyansh is back...😉

Seems mature n tough storyline...😃

I actually dont like to read character sketch... so i'll go with second option...😛

Promiseee ! Nahi chodungi yeh beech mein 😃😆

Okay thankuuu for ur opinion and glad u found it worth reading :D

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ArYa/Ash

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Posted: 12 years ago

#42

I'll begin with title..

and itss really Nyccc... <3

(I'm also very confused while deciding the titles)

The Synopsis and central idea seems interesting... *CLAPS*

Its a Yes.. to main rishta pakka samjhun

*FOR UPDATES*

I'm looking forward to know more..

So continue soon...

Edited by Dewdrops.ShaKun - 12 years ago

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Himani

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Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: Dewdrops.ShaKun
I'll begin with title..

and itss really Nyccc... <3

(I'm also very confused while deciding the titles)

The Synopsis and central idea seems interesting... *CLAPS*

Its a Yes.. to main rishta pakka samjhun

*FOR UPDATES*

I'm looking forward to know more..

So continue soon...

Thank u so much arya 🤗
I am so glad u liked the title ... I literally went mad while deciding it olz
Thank u so much ^_^
Yes pakka samjho 😆
Yes I have started writing it already
Will post asap ^_^

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Abhilasha

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Posted: 11 years ago

#44

awsum dii

love it alot..

eepss m waiting to read it..

update soon

PS sorry for late comment

PPS sorry for choto comment m hell buzy..

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Himani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#45

Chapter 1

Credits for banner - ( Aditi a.k.a Nxt_rockstar)

But there was a special kind of gift that came with embracing the chaos, even if I cursed most of the way. I'm convinced that, when everything is wiped blank, it's life 's way of forcing you to become acquainted with and aware of who you are now, who you can become. What is the fulfillment of your soul?

Denial . She was always denied of what every living human rightfully deserves . She was denied of love , of contentment , of belonging to someone , of possessing someone who makes you feel wanted . She was denied of something as essential as a family .

Rejection , she had faced rejection from every sole entity that existed around her , from the almighty and from life itself , even before she was big enough to understand what the grave word meant .

Negligence . She was neglected . She was ruthlessly ignored by every miniscule of happiness around her . She was sure that God , if he even existed didn't consider her as his child . She could bet her last penny on it .

She didn't care . No she didn't .These things had stopped affecting her since the time she could remember . She had guillitoned those naive sentiments .She claimed that feelings , emotions , sentiments were mere abstract nouns for her and nothing else .

She glanced the lifeless structure made up of bricks and cement where she had been living for the last 2 years for one last time . She is never going to return here . Never ever .

No she won't cry , not now , not ever .

This was probably her last foster home where she had been living or more precisely forced to live owing to the court orders . But now things were different . She had grown up , as the law claimed and she was mature enough to handle her own self . She knew she always was .

She needed no one , absolutely no one . She was capable for earning a livelihood for herself . She would never impose herself on anyone . She was strong . She possessed more strength , much more than anyone could ever imagine would exist in her petite body .

She was never afraid of her miserable life , Never had been , No matter how distressful the situation had been .

She stepped ahead as he made her way to a new journey altogether . She knew this was not going to be easy , but then when had it ever been easy ? She won't falter , because if the situation was cruel and catastrophic , she had learnt the art of being cunning enough to stand strong .

"St. George school of commerce and economics" , she read the words embedded on the entrance aloud as she stepped inside a world full of new beginnings and challenges .

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"Reyanshh " , she moaned as he bit her fiercely on the nape . He held her tightly across his manly frame in an attempt to gain more of her , not allowing even a pint of air to surpass between them .

She pulled the his midnight hair upwards with every cent of energy left in her as she craved for his rugged , tempting lips over hers and he gladly obliged thrusting his lips in her soft ones .

Their intimate moment was broken by an abrupt knock at the door and Reyansh pulled off instantly from her tight embrace . He eased the creases on his jacket and straightened his messy hair with all the composure in the world as she stood there , still dazed and partly shocked.

He pressed the door knob to find his best friend Rishabh standing at the door with an evident scowl on his face

" we are late for the class Reyansh , can't you deal with her later on ? " , he spoke , irritated. .

" Take it easy Rishi, I was trying to help our new classmate to get adjusted to the atmosphere out here , right Tanya ? " , he winked at him as he gave her a quick peck on the lips making Rishi groan in frustration .

" Now drag yourself to the classroom or the lecturer won't leave you capable enough of helping others ", he asserted in a higher pitch as he stomped off .

" Catch you later , beautiful . " , he spoke in his ever so pleasing voice as he walked off .

"You are an as* ! " , Rishi laughed as he joined him .

" Sounds good to me , but I prefer girls to mares ," he concluded with a smug , as both ended up in fits of laughter .

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Author's note :

Hello girls , so this is the first chap of the FF .

So did you presume Kria instead of Tanya's place with Rey ? :P . Tell tell ? :p

I decided not to give a character sketch as it would spoil the tempo of the story .

So how did you find it ? Good ? Bad ? Pathetic ?

I am tired of ranting regarding reviews so let it be .

I know it was short but this was how I wanted it to be , had written Kri's part long back but I was unsure of how to portray Rey's character ...

Those who spare their time to comment and review , a big thank you to you guys🤗.

For pms , buddy me , it makes my work easier .

Thanking you .

Yours ,

Mahi .

Edited by -Khwahish- - 11 years ago

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vaishali

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Posted: 11 years ago

#46

Oohhh that was awesome...

I loved how you described the various stages of kria's life...

And then how you showed her self molding out of it...

Amazing...

Then thw casanova rey...

Amazing portrayal again...

Awesomely shown in the way...

Awesome update...

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Sonia

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Posted: 11 years ago

#47

Awesum update...
Evn d Rey's part startd fr a fraction of second I thought it to be Kriya...
Bt den again I thought it very early fr KR to indul.ge in sumthng like dis..😉😆

it was a short one...
Bt good...

Do cont soon..
N thanks 4 d pm...

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Himani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: -Vaish-
Oohhh that was awesome...
I loved how you described the various stages of kria's life...

And then how you showed her self molding out of it...

Amazing...

Then thw casanova rey...

Amazing portrayal again...

Awesomely shown in the way...

Awesome update...

Thanks a lot yaar vaish 🤗
Glad u liked kria's portrayal ... I wasn't sure if it was good enough ^_^
Shukriyaa vaish for ur amazing review ^_^

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ArYa/Ash

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Posted: 11 years ago

#49

unres.

ahm ahm CHOTA hai...

bt chalo dil ko samjhaane ke liye

Kaafi hai di...

i love ur way of describing the story...

Hayeee... eagerly waiting fr.. next one..

plzz next time toda bada pleaaj... <3

Edited by Dewdrops.ShaKun - 11 years ago

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Himani

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Posted: 11 years ago

#50

Originally posted by: princessSonia
Awesum update...
Evn d Rey's part startd fr a fraction of second I thought it to be Kriya...
Bt den again I thought it very early fr KR to indul.ge in sumthng like dis..😉😆

it was a short one...
Bt good...

Do cont soon..
N thanks 4 d pm...

Thank u ^__^
Hahhaha yes it is too early for them to indulge into smething
like this 😆
Glad u liked it ^_^