VIRMAN SS:||Jab Tak Tum Ho Mere Saath||chap 8 pg 16 *NEW* - Page 4

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Posted: 12 years ago
#31
Thanks Kulsum and it was amazing story dear
sorry for being late...but awesome one
👏 👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
keep it up
waiting for next part
update soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#32
hey dear i read all parts n its wndrful wrk !!!!!!!!! Luv each and evry character ... Jeeman, vm, vv bro, aarav evry one@@@@@@ litle upst wd manvi's mom...hope she will nt create any prblm in future in jeeman and virman life @@@@@@@@@@ wndrful wrk...keep it up **********
Thanx alot for pm,dea...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow! it's awesome...
read all the parts... very nice...
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Posted: 12 years ago
#34
Hey... awsm story, pm me when u updt... :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
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superb story👏 dear loved it :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#36
i m sorry i m in hurry today so i cant reply to the latest comments...but thnk u so much fr ur lovely comments...it means lot to me...
here is the next chappy...but its just half part...enjoy give me ur lovely feed back


Chapter : 4 (i)


(I told u abt Rajat Kapoor in CS)

*Rajat was in his separate office which is in his house only...today he is feeling restless that's y he didn't go to office...he choose to do some rest at home...though he don't like to stay at home as his daughters memories always make him weak...whenever he is at home he spend most of his time in his office...nobody allow to enter in his space except jeevika when she was here...only jeevika n this room knows who is real Rajat Kapoor...but still today is something different he is missing jeevika like a hell he want to see her, want to talk to her but again his big size ego come across his wish...He is resting alone on his easy chair with close eyes, clutching jeevikas photo fream close to his heart...bcs he cant do anything other than that...but today, god listened the voice of jeevikas fathers heart n fulfilled his unspoken wish...his mob buzzed

R: (he received the call without seeing the caller name bcs his eyes were still close) hello rajat kapoor speaking who is this?

J: (after a 5sec ...she spoke softly yet lovingly) PAPA

*this single word word like a magic...he open his eyes with a jerk...1st he though he is watching some dream but no after a few secs he realized that's this is not a dream its truth...his daughter, his jeevika is talking with him...he said thanks to the god for fulfilling his wish...he want to talk but words r refused to come out of his mouth...tears r rolling down frm his eyes...n his ears r craving to hear his daughter more...there where a silence frm both the sides fr some mins...but after so many tries finally a single word came out of his mouth n that's*

R: jeevika

*here jeevika was waiting too here something frm her dad...tears where continuously flowing her eyes...manvi was sitting beside her holding her hand tightly to give a support to jeevika as she needed that the most...n after a long silence she heard her name frm her fathers mouth...after a 2 years she is listening her name frm her fathers mouth...but that single word described her the situation on the other...rajats pain, his loneliness was completely reflecting frm his voice...after that she cudnt stop her tears...on the other side hearing his daughters loud cry his heart was bleeding like anything, he wanted to go to her, hug her tightly, consoled her...but again he cant do that...her cries told his how much she is missing him*

J: papa...papa I miss u so much...muze aaj apki bohot yad aa rahi he papa (crying her heart out) I miss u so much...(holding manvins hand tightly n controlling her hiccups) kya aapko meri yad nahi aati, kya aap muze miss nahi karte papa? Itna paraya kar diya he muze? Muze itni badi saza mat dijiye pls...pls maf kar dijiye muze...aapke sine se lagne ke liye taras rahi hu me...pls papa muze apki bohot jarurat he...nahi ji sakti me aapki is narajgi ke saath, mar

R: jeevikaaa (but before she complete her sentence rajat shout at her in loud n stern voice that refused her to complete her sentence)

J: (she felt happy seeing his reaction n smiled lightly) agar itni hi fikar karte he meri, itna hi pyaar karte he muzse to jatate kyu nahi? Kyu nahi maf kar dete muze...muze aapki ye nafarat aur bardash nahi hoti papa...(looking at aayan who is sleeping peacefully) aapke pote ko apke ashirwad ki jarurat he, apne nanu ke pyaar ki jarurat he, mera aur viren ki shadi bhi apke ashirwad ke bagair adhuri he papa (she said all this in flow without realizing she is talking abt viren also)

R: (hearing virens name again The Rajat Kapoor empowered on jeevikas father...all those bitter memories running in front of his eyes...he grit his teeth in anger, he don't want to listen anything abt vadheras n now he is talking with their bahu not his daughter...thats y in anger in cut the phone) wrong number

J: (here jeevika who was talking continuously frm 1 side didn't realized her fathers anger n when he cut the call) hello...he..hello papa...hello (n then she realised that her father don't want to talk to her anymore she even realised the reason behind his sudden reaction) (she hugged manvi tightly n cried her heart out) vo muze kabhi maf nahi karenge maanu...kabhi nahi...wo aisa kyu kar rahe he mere saath? Unhe mera dard meri taklif najar kyu nahi ati? Kyu khudse itna alag kar diya he muze...muzse ab ye sab banrdash nahi hota manu nahi hota

M: (she is also crying but still wiped out jeevikas tears) sab thik ho jayega di...dekhana vo aapko jarur maf kar denge...(but still jeevikas tears r not ready to stop) di...aap bohot thak gayi aap thodi der so jayiye...aayan ka dhyan rakhne ke liye me hu...aaap aaram kijiye

*jeevika was also feeling tired bcs of so much stress n crying...she fall a sleep within few minutes...manvi covered her with bedsheet n caressing her forehead lovingly, placed a soft kiss)

M: I promise di...rajat uncle aapko aur jiju ko maf karke apna lenge aur hamare aayan se bhi bohot pyaar karenge...vo din jarur ayega di...jarur

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*after dinner all went to there respective rooms...viren and virat noticed some change in their behavior from the time they came back frm office...both r exceptionally quite today n specially jeevika...but they thought its may b bcs of household work or may b ayan or aaravs tension...so neglect it but not completely*

Same day at night in virman bedroom:

V: tumhe pata he aaj vo mall wale shops ke silsile me jo meeting thi na bohot acchi rahi...bohot bade bade brand ke shops open ho rahe he...me to ab aur bhi excited ho raha hu...

M: hmmm

*virat was talking with manvi continuously but wasnt paying any attention on it...her mind is still revolving around afternoons incident (jeevika-rajats phone convo) standing in front of mirror, removing her earnings...virat noticed her 0 attention towards him*

V: (bit irritate) manvi tum sun rahi hu ho

M: hmmm

V: (angrily) kya khak sun rahi hu yaha me kabse akele hi bad badaye ja raha hu aur tumhara dhyan to kahi aur hi he...meri bat ki to koyi value hi nahi he

M: (came out of her strance) mmm kya hua...tum kuch keh rahe the

V: ha me keh raha tha ki tumahari maa pagal he

M: (angrily) virattt...khabardar meri ma ke bare me kuchhh kaha to muzse bura koyi nahi hoga bata rahi hu (pointing a comb on his face)

V: laga na? bura laga na?...same...bilkul aise hi bura muze bhi laga jab tum mere bat nahi sun rahi thi...yaha me itne time se akele hi bad bada raha hu par tumhara dhyan hi nahi he...aur upar se muzpar chilla bhi rahi ho (pout)

M: (felt sorry) achha sorry...vo pata nahi aaj kal bohot mood swings hone lage he...bas usi wajese...tum bolo kya bol rahe the...me sun rahi hu

V: (his eyes popped out n jumped on the bed with extreme happiness...manvi gave him weird reaction on his sudden action) kya??? Sach??? (holding her by shoulders) manvi u mean me papa banane wala hu aur tum maa...u mean...i mean...really? (manvi was giving him shocked yet confused expression) omg omg omg manvi me bohot khush hu...tumne pehele kyu nahi bataya...(holding her wrist) chalo sabko batate he

M: (slapped on his arm) shut up virat...kya bole ja rahe ho...me koyi pregnant wegnant nahi hu...break lagao apni gadi par...kuchh bhi bolte rehete ho

V: (sad) kya? Tu pregnant nahi ho...to tumhe mood swings kyu ho rahe he?

M: urghhh chup raho virat...muze pregnancy wale mood swings nahi ho rahe he... (dispointedly he sat back on his previous position)...tum na virat bohot besharam hote ja rahe ho...shadi se pehele shadi karne ki jaldi, shadi ke bad honeymoon jane ki jaldi (again slapped on his arm) aur ab honeymoon se aye kuchh din nahi hua he ki baby ki jaldi...u r just impossible virat...(totally frustrated)

V: (bt he is enjoying his wife's antics as he love to irritate her...he caught her wrist n pulled her towards him...she land on the bed beside him...there where facing each other...he held her frm waist n again pulled her towards him...manvi put her hands on his broad chest to settle her in comfortable position) pata he muze...but tumhe pareshan karne me muze bohot maza ata he...(manvi made a pouty face) achha ab batao kya hua...jabse office se aya hu tabse notice kar raha hu, kuchh hua he kya aaj? (asking her seriously)

M: (hug him tightly...n placed her head on his chest) virat...woh...aaj na di ko rajat uncle ki bohot yad aa rahi thi to mene unhe kaha ki vo uncle se phone pe bat kar le...(starts crying lightly...but virat didn't disturbed hr n hug her back)...but uncle ne unse bat nahi ki...di bohot ro rahi thi...me unhe aise nahi dekh sakti virat (crying holding his t=shirt in her fist)

V: manvi...(released her from hug) dekho look at me...(wiped her teares by by his tumb) shuuu dekho meri taraf (she looked at him with teary eyes) aur meri bat suno (again took her in his embrass...manvi rested her face back to the previous place on his chest n listening him silently) manvi...bhabhi ko sambhalne ke liye bhai he...ye koyi peheli bar nahi he ki rajat uncle ne bhabhi se aise behave kiya ho...bhabhi aur bhai ne aise kayi sare situations ka milke samna kiya he...unka pyar bohot strong he koyi bhi musibat ko vo haste haste par kar jayenge

M: par hame kuchh karn chahiye virat...di aur rajat uncle ke bich ki is duri ko mitane ke liye

V: to tumhe kya lagta he hamene koshish nahi ki...bhai kabhi nahi chahata tha ki uski aur bhabhi ki shadi uncle ke ashirwad ke bina ho...but uncle bohot jiddhi he...unki jidh ke age unhe kuchh najar nahi ata...ham sabne manane ki bohot koshish ki...but vo nahi mane

M: par ye to sahi nahi he na

V: I know but ham kya kar sakte he...aur tum chinta mat karo bhai ke hote hua bhabhi ko kuchh nahi ho sakta (kissed on her head)

(he didn't get any response from her so he saw she is sleeping peacefully on his chest like a baby...he lied her down on the bed properly without disturbing...kissed her on her forehead...he wrapped his arms around her waist and buried his head in her shoulder...n both fall asleep)



To be continue...

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Posted: 12 years ago
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gthe father daughter convo was tooo emotional hope he lets ho off his ego sooon nd accepts virika's relation ...
the way virat said abt her mom to get her attention nd his excitment on the pregnancy thing was cute nd futnnty tooo 😃
the way he consoled and assured her was really understanding of him 😃
update next part sooon
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Posted: 12 years ago
#38
Awesome update
Loved it
Continue soon and please do pm me!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
#39
supebbb yr nia i like d whole update :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#40
Awesome updt...both r childish at 1 point yet mature at the other...rajat is rude hw can he treat jeevika like this?...cont soon

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