the day i fell for you..arhi os

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hadiqua

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Posted: 11 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: maverickmartin
This was good! Too big a speech for Khushi, just edit and cut it into paragraphs, it'll seem smaller. Just something I thought I should say.
Overall, good work! I especially like the bit "her sister is cute too". :D Write more, dear. :)

thanx and about the paragraphs..well, it was my first short at writing on a forum so i'll take care of it later. thank you so much!!...😳...

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smitzy

@smitzy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#22

Hey!

I'm not going to write about the formatting as everyone has already written about it. 😉

I liked the concept of the story. Really beautifully expressed too. And the last part was really cute! A good effort for the first time writing! Continue writing and explore new genres to see what you are best at.

Cheers! 😊

Smitzy

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hadiqua

@adrastiathena

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Posted: 11 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: smitzy
Hey!
I'm not going to write about the formatting as everyone has already written about it. 😉

I liked the concept of the story. Really beautifully expressed too. And the last part was really cute! A good effort for the first time writing! Continue writing and explore new genres to see what you are best at.

Cheers! 😊
Smitzy

hey thanx a ton. btw am still witing for 101 letters...most ardently..😛