the day i fell for you..arhi os - Page 2

Oh! and post in IPK forum!! :)

Originally posted by: Omoraboti

You have nicely written Khushi's feelings! The use of words was wondeful. Enjoyed reading it. :)

I will agree with the suggestions with devilindisguise. Make the story easy on the readers' eyes. Add spaces and use shorter paragraphs! :)

thanx..means alot to me...😳

Originally posted by: heckwidif

thanx..means alot to me...😳

ohoi!!!dil me laddu phota
lol u no my spellings are bad
do i see u grinning lik an idiot???

That was good. Arnav Khushi confessing their love and inspiring their son too. 😉

Originally posted by: aquagal

That was good. Arnav Khushi confessing their love and inspiring their son too. 😉

thnx...

Originally posted by: ..MorningStar..

Hayyye! Such a beautiful OS!

Very Sweet for a first time writer 😳

But I have issues with the spacing out of the paragraphs, the typos and the font size. Try proof reading before You post.

Otherwise the concept is just too cute and Lovely! 👏

And Do PM Me next time when You post something New.. :)

Will Be waiting. 😛

Thnx for the PM~!

P.S- Hadiqua.. You have a very pretty name ;)

thank you so much!..this is the best comment i received and about the font and typos my system wasn't co-operating then ...thank you so damn much..u r adorable as well. 😃😳

Originally posted by: devilindisguise

ohoi!!!dil me laddu phota
lol u no my spellings are bad
do i see u grinning lik an idiot???

well yeah!!!...😃😃😃😃..dil mein laddu nai jalebi phuta!!!

Originally posted by: heckwidif

well yeah!!!...😃..dil mein laddu nai jalebi phuta!!!

lol
jaldi update more den

This was good! Too big a speech for Khushi, just edit and cut it into paragraphs, it'll seem smaller. Just something I thought I should say.