Through The Looking Glass| ArHi | Ch11Pg1 (14/08) - Page 16

Originally posted by: -doe-eyes-

AAAHHH!!! Cliffhanger!!!????

Tomorrow can't come fast enough and I can't believe I'm saying this when I have another presentation deadline to meet!!! That is not fair at all -_-

Now you know what we feel like with you stories! ;) :D

OK, I'm not sure what I was expecting, but whatever it was, the dialogue between the two of them turned out a lot more effective and impactful than anticipated. I loved the undercurrent of anticipation and apprehension beneath the nonchalance of both characters - the girl (who, from the vivid description you've given of her I'm pretty sure is Khushi now :D ) is hoarding a gangster at home and just offered him tea. Said gangster also takes it in his stride, instead of the cliche 'holding gun to your head demanding to know why you helped me' bit - and the conversation shared over the tea has got to be one of the most laden I've read, even though so little is revealed. It pitches the suspense and maintains it, and even I hesitated as she tells him to leave - the contrast between what they're talking about and how they are talking about it, the way he acts familiar enough to edge her out of the way and take over the tea-brewing, the whole act of familiarity, in fact, between two complete strangers and the litany of things left unsaid or hinted at - I'm dying to know what happens next

Pagal hain dono but kya karein... ;) :D

I liked how she clarified that she did not let him in, but brought him in herself - i.e. she is apni marzi ki malkin

And I also liked how he asked such a serious question with covered with slight humour - did she fear his getting hurt, or the police?

I am very, very intrigued now, unhealthily so, and you've not helped with the cliffy at the end. My brain is going to run out of fuel at the rate it's trying to figure out just what circumstances they'll meet under - though must say there's a dose of dread too, because despite her subtle but telling reactions to him and his attraction to her...there's still so much to them both I don't know

I am glad you are intrigued. A confession - the last line made it at the last moment to the update! ;) :D

And yes...I am glad that you are not taking this without a pinch of salt, there may be attraction, there may be a pull, there may be interest but there are other unknown things about the two yet.

Amazing update!! :)

Originally posted by: farheen75

Nice update... He likes her and wants to meet her again but she didn't show any such sentiments for him which is interesting since he doesn't know if she lives alone or with someone... Can't wait for their next meeting.

Originally posted by: raniluvsasr

Hey dis ws amazingly good. Enoyed it thoroughly. Dat means arnav and khushi meet each other evry day. Loved their little conversation. Amazing update keep updating.

Originally posted by: wonderblake

Chapter two was really interesting, but still we have to find out about the man and woman here. Their conversation was, I don't know the words to explain what I felt reading that part. The whole chapter was promising us a lot of things to happen in the near future. Looking forward to read more :)

Originally posted by: aquagal

Chapter-2

She is smart & confident. She didn't want any violence and blood in the chawl but she still saved a man who could be responsible for violence at many levels. There is definitely more to it.

The tea making scene and the the way you described the silence scene was superb. You bring life to it making it easier for readers to visualise the story.

There must be some truth to what Arnav said about whom she fears. Before he could invade her space more she so politely told him to go.

Loved it.. Brilliant...

Originally posted by: yush-swt

wow...so she helped him and they had a chat...i loved it...how he was so direct in her saving him...

who is she by the way...and she lives in a chawl...and doesnt worry about her modesty in order to safeguard a gangster...so is she also related to them in any way...

so he is interested in her...who would not...whatever he is a man nah...and i loved it that he had resolution of meeting her...

he meets her and im worried...i guess the meeting is all about her profession, is it so...waiting for chapter 3...

thanks for the pm and yeah sen you e mail id...would be waiting...

Originally posted by: arshiyakanishka

Right now i am more interested in knowing the girl.She has guts...she knew he had gun and was running away from the police...yet she saves him.Then offers him tea so nonchalantly as if he is a known guest and not an unknown gangster!Love the way she corrects him that she didn't let him in but got him in.

The guy is obviously intrigued with her and possibly makes the right guess about the reason for which she saved him.He is also attracted to her...the way he noticed each and everything of hers...beautifully done.

He makes his mind to meet her again and they are gonna meet...but in circumstances he never imagined or wished...now i am nervous and excited.

Originally posted by: fhussain237

Yay another story rae
Im super excited to read this ff
I love de movie gangster
With ur fanstatic writing n a great movie plot im sure this ff is going to be amazing
Pls do add me in the pm list
Cant wait to read more
Continue soon hun x
Ps I hope ur exams went well