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PhoenixTears

@PhoenixTears

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#141

Apologies for late comment, finally finished last two chapters and they were awesome, really fantastic updates. I love the way you use your creativity with tiny-weeny scenes from show, it looks like a prefect cocktail. Chapter 3 was very emotional and it was beautifully written. Arnav's fear of becoming close to Khushi's parents, his concern for her and my poor baby Khushi, hope she gets her share of happiness soon (not that I want you to finish this soon but I love happy endings 😊)

Chapter 4 was mind-blowing and I am glad you didnt use the suicide track, I too never liked that concept in the show. The way you reveal the truth to family members using Aman was brilliant, now Khushi doesnt have to explain anyone or prove her innocence. Eagerly waiting for next updates, just to see how you will make Arnav to apologize? Thanks for the PM, update next soon!

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monakaran

@MONAKARAN

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#142

Kaash all my wishes came true like this one did today...

I previously posted on your If only OS that you should convert or extend it into an SS or FF and little did I know you had already taken care of it. This is a well written piece of work and actually makes a hell of a lot more sense than what the CVs had given us!! You might want to consider doing that for a living :-)

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chibisuke

@chibisuke

Voyager

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#143

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Hey everyone!

I might not be able to reply to comments for the next couple of updates, but please don't think that I haven't read them. I love the support that I get from you guys, in fact I am addicted to it, it seems.

If it hadn't been for you, I would never have written anything.

So, please keep telling me what you liked/disliked about the update, and just ask me if there's something that confuses you!

-Chibi

Edited by chibisuke - 11 years ago

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chibisuke

@chibisuke

Voyager

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#144

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ashw99

@ashw99

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#145

Brilliant 👏
I wish actually something like this had happened in the show.
I agree that suicide thought itself was crap for someone like khushi to even cross her mind anyways
this was perfect how it would have been i loved Aman's thoughts ditto what he would do towards ASR also love for taking Akash into account he was always ignored.
Finally shyam is screwed perfectly thanks.

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Anjani Patel

@Titaliya_AP

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#146

Quote this for chapter three!

First Yayyy<3 it was super long and I loved it <3

Ok beginning to love ASR's point of view a lot more than Khushi's...

I mean, I understand both. But ASR is such a complex character and to show that is hard and you're doing great! I just love reading it.

The small moments with her and her family. So monumental in totality but so insignificant now...

The kitchen scenes! Both of them are so amazing... ASR finally is using his brains ^_^

Oh the If Only's will kill me!

He wants her. She wants him. And I want them togetherrr<3 Hehe :)

Oh no... Storm :(

Edited by Titaliya_AP - 12 years ago

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Anjani Patel

@Titaliya_AP

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#147

Four chapter four... I'm speechless <3

I loved Aman's point of view!

The entire chapter was so paced and suspenseful!

I'm leaving this comment short to read the next chapter!

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damon fan

@-damon-

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#148

I LOVED this update.. U added Anjali's POV- It was needed as she also has suffered much... I Loved that dream in the beginning..👍🏼 I loved that ques. & ans part by khushi's innerself...All in all I LOVED the update..!! 👍🏼

Edited by aman3354 - 12 years ago

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Ananya

@Anarocksick

Rocker

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#149

Damn girl... You're quick!
I'll edit both my comments in the evening, after I read them :-)

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This chapter was really, really good! I liked the confusion and all the emotions Khushi went through.

Khushi and Anjali supporting each other was a treat to read. Thank you for making Anjali accept the truth (unlike the show).

I want to hug Arnav! :-( yes, he needs his family! Nobody sees it though. Only Khushi does. And that's why I love this SS. you pick out the tiniest details and bring them to the forefront. Seriously, I loved the way you described Arnav here. Very real, very true to his character.

My favourite part of this update was the way Khushi reasoned with herself and I loved she came to the decision that it wasn't a matter if choice at all... She was just meant to be with him. And she sang a lullaby for him... Oh dear, that's the sweetest thing ever!

The last part was brilliant. I loved how positive she sounded. Yes, slowly they'd all rise up.

Bang on title.

P.s. - I have a lot of things going on... So that's why comments are late. Btw, I'm amazed at the speed with which you update!

Edited by Anarocksick - 12 years ago