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Arjuhisis

@Arjuhisis

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

excellent one dear - enjoyed reading it - as usual, the way u wrote has touched my heart -

all the best for your future - i can understand how u feel when u are moving out - i have gone through the same - anyways, time will heal everything

thx for this wonderful OS nafisa

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annieK

@annieK

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

I'm in heaven ...it was so beautiful and sweet ...just what I've imagined their married life encounters to be ...lovely !

And prompts ? You want prompts ...on your own head be it ...I have a list ...get ready please 😆

Living alone can be tough and it takes courage to venture out ...best wishes and be happy !

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9424976

@9424976

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

oh
my
gosh
my
EMOSHUNS.
I loved every single word in this OS. This is really a piece of art. I just.. I'm kind of numb and speechless but I also have so much to say and so many feelings and I JUST LKDJFSLKDSJFK DS OMFG I CANT EVEN HOW DO YOU WRITE SO WELL?

NOW I WANT TO CRY CAUSE THIS REMINDS ME OF ARHI ON SCREEN.
OMG. I missed your writing so much and this was the best thing ever and I love you and just you are the best.

I really love how you described such a simple scene with so much context and significance. You executed this entire scene - of a husband being too busy with work and a devoted wife sacrificing so much, really really well. I love how you showed us how much they were both suffering and how hard it was for both of them. I loved the back and forth views of Arnav and Khushi, so much contrast but such similar thoughts, like 2 pieces of the perfect puzzle. You defined their entire relationship within an OS, not even an entire story, heck just one scene! How Arnav feels that he can be himself with Khushi, how one smile means so much (I JUST LITERALLY LOVED HOW YOU SHOWED HOW MUCH OF AN EFFECT IT HAD ON HIM!!). A good point was made when you said how with Khushi he's the one being dependent on her and not the other way around. How much he realizes that he hurts her and no matter what he does it isn't enough and he's scared of losing her, and how he says sorry through his actions. OMG it was perfect. And then oh gosh he was awake the entire time! And I just loved his thoughts. And then Khushi, I loved how she was observing Arnav, and then how she said she understood and you listed the reasons why - even though he yells at her, etc etc he still says thank you and he kisses her on the forehead. I love how they both realized the little things about each other and how it means so so so much to both of them. Argh I have so much to say about this, I want to sit here and analyze every single sentence but alas, I will probably end up writing an essay. I just loved this so much, it felt so intimate, so much like a real raw relationship, I felt so weird even as if I was intruding on something private. And omg I love this so much.
Will you please pretty please make more one shots like this? It just, after the show finishing and so many FFs being taken off due to stupid plagiarizers it's stories like yours that make me feel a bit closer with the show and just so happy

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IronButterfly

@IronButterfly

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

This was fab. So beautiful. Amazing how you described their relationship. Very well written. Enjoyed reading each line.

God bless

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CheshireBilli

@CheshireBilli

Dazzler

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

--to be edited--

*edit*

That was lovely. This is honestly what I'd always imagined Arnav and Khushi to be like after their second marriage. Arnav would still be the occasional ASR and Khushi would just be Khushi-- loving, slightly crazy and infinitely patient.

I liked this one specially because so little happened, yet every wayward thought, every emotion, every insecurity, every drop of gratitude and the enormous amount of love was all so beautifully captured!

When you write, I can almost SEE it all playing out in front of me in these poignantly etched images. Your Arnav and Khushi stay so true to the original! This is the man that I always see in Arnav Singh Raizada-- ruthless, a workaholic, short-tempered, hot-headed, secretly vulnerable, with a golden heart that overflows with love for his family and for Khushi especially, yet an inability to express that love.

Oh, and I missed devastatingly sexy. Even when asleep.

I don't blame Khushi AT ALL. If I'd been married to Arnav Singh Raizada, I'd never be able to look away. Embarrassment be damned.

This is one of those pieces that make me feel disgustingly mushy and happy inside.

And also make me miss the show so much. *bawling*

Edited by Semanti - 12 years ago

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ipkknd_gbdfan

@ipkknd_gbdfan

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

I'm glad to see you posting your writing on IF again.

This OS is good, but when will you continue all your other stories?

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avantika_2012

@avantika_2012

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

Originally posted by: -doe-eyes-

Read at your own risk😆

Risk? Okay, then I'm willing to be caught in many more similar risky situations! 😉 😆

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snoopy84

@snoopy84

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#18

this was real cute loved it

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dumas

@dumas

Stunner

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#19

awesome update beautifully done loved how they both missed each other loved their inner thoughts about each other and the feelings and the little thing that made each other their awesome beautifully done thanks for the pm

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...pinky...

@...pinky...

Explorer

Posted: 12 years ago

#20

You're crazy, you know that?

I mean, seriously, you call this OS not-up to par? I mean, "WHAT THE...!" Smh. I just don't understand you. This was amazing!! Loved it to pieces! C'mon, woman!

Great job! I really enjoyed reading this story. Can't wait to read more. Don't fret about what happened...Take it to stride, love. We're all behind you. 👍🏼

Cheerio