SwaRon OS : Eternity - Page 8

Originally posted by: megsy

rula daala tune thaanedaar!

kya story weave kiya hai...

i loved the fact that u showed swayam breathing in life into her...wo hi life breath in kar sakta hai sharon ke andar...

u r an amazing writer! 🤗 🤗

Haila? Meri munni cried? Choti si bacchi hai kya jo itne main ru gai! 😆

Alle baby..hush hush.. kyun ru raha hai mera baby! 🤣

Chal done with bakwass!

Really happy that you commented! :)

Thanks for the sweet comment and luv u! ❤️

Originally posted by: -shenz-

finally I get the opportunity to comment on this piece of work..

sorry but I hope I am not too late..

I had read this days back but was unable to comment due to some reasons.. but anyways I get the tym today..

this was something really really amazing
Sharon was waiting for him.. aww.. that was so cute
the small text convo between Sharon n Simi.. Sharons thoughts..

suddenly Swayam entering her room with a thud
with that cute expression.. no wonder he looks adorable with those expressions..

Everything that u portrayed was just so apt.. I mean everything was so beautifully depicted...

and finally a kiss.. not really but a kiss

Wow! Am i seeing things! Miss. Shehnaz commented on my work! 😛

Thanks a lot Shenz for the lovely comment and i am really glad that you liked the OS! :)

Originally posted by: Hoppy

Tanya that was superb, no words actually. 😃

Sorry for late response but I am caught up with something

What I loved about this OS, was it was closely related to the show, and not an imaginative piece, so I found it more connectable👍🏼

You should often write OS based on this context.

Keep it up

Thankyou thankyouuu meri Pooh! ❤️
Thanks for the comment, honey! i really do wait for your comments! 😛

Originally posted by: freya123

amazing

Thanks for liking it! 😊

Originally posted by: additive_monaya

awesome os tanya

you penned it beautifully

wish we had got this in the show

thanx for pm

Thanks a lot Priyanka for the comment! ❤️
I wish same but guess it will never happen! 😛

Originally posted by: surbhimathur

Seriously i took real long for commenting here.
But you know the reasons :)

Anyways this OS deserves Awesomeness Mahn! Tanya you are a wonderful writer Babe..!
What a nerve wrecking write up dude.!
Thanks alot for showing sharon's p.o.v...it was so well penned that i was just glued to it.
Loved the starting when sharon was fighting from her thoughts...she thought she succeeded in her mission but at the same time she was like i should fail.
That was so brilliantly done.

And this swayam...thank god sharon hi thi koi aur hota toh jaan bachaane ke chakkar mei :* :*
Lol sry for my spontanity.

I really loved this OS tanya...its almost 4am nd i m commenting hre...you made me smile and smileee :)
The way you took off and landed the OS...the concept was same but yet at the same time it appeared to be soo unique and AWE-some!
I guess it was the best substitute for the real one...!

Keep it up Bebyy ;D

Oh, teri kher! Yeh kisne comment kar dala! Main tu khushi se hi marr jaungi!! 😛

Tunai kaafi days baad mere work pe comment kya hai tu now i can finally say that yes this OS is quiet nice! :)

Thanks for the comment Surbh! ❤️

Originally posted by: raveena2807

I wonder how do you come up with such beautiful stories one after another. This one is beyond beautiful. The way it started, exact portrayal of Sharon's state of mind. She wants to push Swayam away and at the same time wants to keep him with her till 'eternity'. A little gloomy in the beginning. But the moment Swayam entered, it took an entirely different turn. How i wish the actual sequence had also proceeded more or less like this. His concern for her and her trust in him, perfect.

P.S. Swayam noticed increase in "very' Sharon uses to say 'I like you'? Then again, knowing how he notices every little things about her, it doesn't come as a surprise.

P.P.S. You are extremely amazing writer. Keep it up.

Thanks a lot for the sweet comment and i am really happy that you liked this OS. Your comment means a lot to me! ❤️

Originally posted by: Trouble_Magnet

God knows how many times have I read and re-read and re-re-read it..

I just can't get enough of it..😆

You've penned it beautifully..:)

Arre wah itna acha laga!? 😳

Thanks a lot for the comment and thanks for making me over confident about my OS! 😆

Originally posted by: sweetcherry95

a nice,simple,sober and elaborated os

a different take and description of the scenario as compared to d3

soothing convo between the couple

the way words flowed from you pen is perfect

keep up the work

"is dafa diff tha , aisa kar ab toh demands pe hi likha kr and especially deeps ke liye , outcome acha hota hai hai lady ...(chod tera nick name nahi leti😛)"

P. S: di keep demanding !! 😆

Kya karun Deepy se tu mera dil ka connection hai is liye OS bhi direct dil se nikalta hai! 🤗

But ek baat tu maanni paregi jis din tunai yeh res edit kya tha usdin yakeenan kuch bohat acha hua hoga tu tunai kar bhi dia unres warna 99% post abhi tak res hain! 😛

Thankuuu aurat for the comment! ❤️

Ab agai se aise hi ache baccho ki tarhan comment karte rehna! 😛