SwaRon OS : Eternity

Sabira Mirza

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Posted: 12 years ago

#41

Loved it :)
Res for lambi comment 😃

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Marium

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Posted: 12 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: Swaron4eva_Sabz
Loved it :)
Res for lambi comment 😃

Oh really? Make sure to unres this in 24 hours because i don't like resses a lot! 😈

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Simren

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Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Tanya sorry for commenting late sweetie, tu toh mera haal jaanti hi hai nah 😛 lazy hoon yaar kya karu, koyi solution nahi hai 😛

Acha mera bak bak zyaada hogai, coming to the update it was beautifully written...hayyyeee i so wished dat we would have got to see the same in the show... loved the way you showed Sharon getting impateint waiting for him, the love, the pain was beautifully described.

Sharon's and Simi's conversation was sweet, he entered her room through the window the whole seen was the same as shown in D3 but the diff was Sharon's POV which was amazingly penned down, The way u showed Sharon accepted her feelings was fab. and the mouth to mouth part was mind blowing.

At the end the confession was outstanding...loved the way you ended the OS...it was lovely, the last few lines were fanatbulous it gave a perfect ending to this beautifull OS.

She slept, it as the most peaceful sleep on her entire live. The most peaceful and lovely feeling was ringing within her now. She was alive again. She was breathing his breath in now and she wanted to breathe his breath till eternity. As eternity define them.

Good job babes, any work on Swaron written by you is a treat to read, loved this OS, it was super se upaarrr wala OS...luv ya ❤️

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Meera

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Posted: 12 years ago

#44

Tanya, that was refreshing and a very beautiful take on the actual track...did full justice to teh feelings of both and this is wishful scenario - so very much SwaRon 😳 u caught the pulse of SwaRon perfectly

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Aisha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#45

First of all i am soo sorry for being late. exams coming :(

and yes coming back to the os

it was awesome, fab work actually dont have words to describe how much i liked it. I loved ure take on the current swaron track. i loved each and every moment in this OS from sharon thinking about swayam coming to meet her and then sharon - simmi convo wich was one of the best parts of the OS according to me. Swayam jumping and sharon getting hypered was taken from the show but what i loved there was ure way of writing sharons monologue. The mouth to mouth scene well was quiteee... unpredictable... yet i can call it romantic . and even the confession ☺️...

in all i just loved the OS and even the last lines of it

She slept, it as the most peaceful sleep on her entire live. The most peaceful and lovely feeling was ringing within her now. She was alive again. She was breathing his breath in now and she wanted to breathe his breath till eternity. As eternity define them.

Also get well soon fast

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Megha

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Posted: 12 years ago

#46

rula daala tune thaanedaar!

kya story weave kiya hai...

i loved the fact that u showed swayam breathing in life into her...wo hi life breath in kar sakta hai sharon ke andar...

u r an amazing writer! 🤗 🤗

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Shahnaz

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Posted: 12 years ago

#47

finally I get the opportunity to comment on this piece of work..

sorry but I hope I am not too late..

I had read this days back but was unable to comment due to some reasons.. but anyways I get the tym today..

this was something really really amazing
Sharon was waiting for him.. aww.. that was so cute
the small text convo between Sharon n Simi.. Sharons thoughts..

suddenly Swayam entering her room with a thud
with that cute expression.. no wonder he looks adorable with those expressions..

Everything that u portrayed was just so apt.. I mean everything was so beautifully depicted...

and finally a kiss.. not really but a kiss

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