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Huma

@Huma0301

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Posted: 12 years ago

#51

U r an absoloutely amazing writer im really loving this story of urs its very different n her name manal its jus really really nice n unique im actually surprised he listened to her n sed that he is ready to wait until she is ready with it

i hope manal does be successful in changing her 'rakshas' husband then

thanx for the pm n i'll be waitin every weekend for ur updates 😊

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Afshan

@afshanmk093

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Posted: 12 years ago

#52

Awee tis is so cute elena!
First u hav written ff om my fav show humsafar nd nw u rwriting on zindapi gulzar hai! I love it
i thnk u r also fawwad kha fan like me!
Bt what an amalgamation of my fav shows with virman

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nikki1211

@nikki1211

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Posted: 12 years ago

#53

ohkay...so Mahnoor is so different...yes let me start from that...different...

wat is peshvas??? i am from india and a hindu...i know abt shararas bt not peshvas...

secondly i am finding it "different" seeing virat this controlling...it just goes against everything i hav known abt virat...i get he is possessive and domineering bt he almost forced himself on his wife...

i guess i will wait to form any judgement considering this is an adaptation...

i am liking how maanvi or manal here has this fire in her...she loves her husband yet is fearless enough to hold her ground...which is commendable considering the setting seems to be of a typical patriarchal society...

again the update was beautiful...you hav a beautiful and wonderful way with words...

so will wait till the next weekend...😊

take care...😊

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Syed695

@Syed695

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Posted: 12 years ago

#54

Awesome Update...~! awesome description on the kind of person Virat is...he is possessive n like controlling or say things he wants his way...He loves her...but Manal wants to take things slow, (like the way u have pened her nervousness n hesitance)...like that little family description perfectly shows the difference between her Maika and sasural...the over night change in the lifestyle n her mom's words...she is confused n taking in the present...towards the end got the glimpse of Impatient Virat...but like Manal even if he takes things in his own hands she wouldn't let that happen i guess...

Lovely Update...Thnks for the PM Elena...~!

Edited by Syed695 - 12 years ago

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Eleanor

@ElenaElenor

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Posted: 12 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: nikki1211
ohkay...so Mahnoor is so different...yes let me start from that...different...
wat is peshvas??? i am from india and a hindu...i know abt shararas bt not peshvas...

secondly i am finding it "different" seeing virat this controlling...it just goes against everything i hav known abt virat...i get he is possessive and domineering bt he almost forced himself on his wife...
i guess i will wait to form any judgement considering this is an adaptation...

i am liking how maanvi or manal here has this fire in her...she loves her husband yet is fearless enough to hold her ground...which is commendable considering the setting seems to be of a typical patriarchal society...

again the update was beautiful...you hav a beautiful and wonderful way with words...

so will wait till the next weekend...😊

take care...😊

Hey sorry, I should have used translated- pishwas (anarkali suit) but it's a tad longer. It's an urdu word. We use this word than anarkali in our house so it got stuck with me.

I like to use different traits of personalities of Virman in every FF of mine. This story is nothing like EHMMB. If I just have one type of personality traits for Virat in every story- it will get boring. My characters are made to be hated and loved at times. I like to write about imperfect personalities on their journey of life.

Virat did not force himself on her nor was he planning to. He tried to make her comfortable but she was nervous and he got that and blamed it on her nerves for the first night. She resisted him at times but at times encouraged his actions (arching her back and leaning into him). She is confused about him as he is confused about her mixed signals but when she clearly asked him to back off he did.

Thanks for liking it! (:

Edited by ElenaElenor - 12 years ago

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esha

@bunny007

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Posted: 12 years ago

#56

waaooo :p... that was one hot update elenor :D

starting from virat and manal's first night, it was hot plus u protrayed manal's feelings beautifully.. her uncomfortable behaviour towards virat and her inner turmoil was explained fuboulously... awsome

the next day was day virman's little banter in the bedroom was veryy intense yet subtle and light... it wass beautiful... loving mahnoor ff elenor keep it up :)

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Geminimanna

@Geminimanna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#57

Hi Elenor,

I don't know how to describe my feelings in words. It was beyond my expectations, imagining Virat And Manvi playing Virat Akhter (Fawad Khan) and Manal. This is such a beautiful fusion as the original characters are not that bold as is needed in certain situations. 😉

Manal is a strong headed and confident girl. She is a fighter and knows her rights very well. While Virat at the moment is only concerned about his right over her as a husband.But he is trying and learning to share his life with the love of his life. They both don't know the depth of their relationship at the moment but I guess they will in the future.

Virat's family is a sweet one specially Jeevika. This family is different from her family.

Thanx for the PM and a great story.

(When are you planning to update TTOML?)

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kulsum_virman

@kulsum_virman

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Posted: 12 years ago

#58

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wow this one is really interesting ya 😊
virat so much into love bt manvi still nt feeling the same
virat with lots of attitude and manvi no less giving him competition 😉
pls can yu change manal into manvi we wud feel more familiar to it ...
its jst a request 😊
love ur writing its done with maturity and i jst love reading them ❤️
thanx alott for the pm 😊

Edited by kulsum_vish - 12 years ago

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Maridda

@Maridda

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Posted: 12 years ago

#59

Beautiful update! Loved it to the core. The concept was great, as usual. Loved the way you portray their emotions and the way you describe everything, it makes me feel like as if I'm watching the update rather than reading it. Continue soon! :)
Marissa