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MemoriesDieHard

@MemoriesDieHard

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Posted: 12 years ago

#301

U are one great writer woman!!!

I read the whole of it in one go.

U have a way with words Juhi and that makes u a successful writer.

This piece of work, I must say, has the very ability to pierce through the soul of the reader even when he/she is in no way connected to the show or the character.

I am at a loss of words Juhi...

I could feel that lump in my throat when I was reading the part where Khushi's assault and Arnav's helplessness was portrayed.

I loved the very way in which she immediately ran into her room and did every possible thing to disown evrything that made her a woman, HIS woman.

And I would like to quote my fav part from the story(Though I find it hard to say this a story, This is far more than that)

"I felt this way because you were also the man who secretly gave me silver coins, just to see me smile. The man who bought up all the doves, just to fulfill the wish of a little girl..the man who is aloof and reserved, but still guards his family with his life.."

She brings one hand up and lays it on my chest.

I look down at it, overwhelmed by the fact that this is the first time she has touched me..

"I came back because you were the tycoon who didn't think twice before serving food to people, just to help me out..Because you were the man who gave me the beautiful gift of those bangles..the man who danced with me even though he hadn't danced for years.."

She raises her other hand to touch my face, and I raise mine to cover it.

"I am here because you are the man whose eyes make me feel like a woman..whose touch sets me on fire..because you are the man who makes me feel alive.."

There are tears in those eyes now,and I raise my other hand to wipe them away.

"It's very simple, really. I am here, with you, because I love you. I always have, and I always will."

I smile as she echoes the words I had said earlier.

when I had completed reading this part, I felt my face wet and a wide grin of satisfaction and contempt on my face.

Sometimes words are more than enough to make u happy. And this was one such pice of work.

Thank u so much for rendering this to us...

P.S. UPDATE SCANDALOUS Soon😉

Edited by ForeverArhi - 12 years ago

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Kittya Cullen

@Kittya_Cullen

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Posted: 12 years ago

#302

Very beautifully written. I admire you for even beginning to take on the task of conveying these feelings, and the consequences for those who have been victims in so many ways. You've told the story of both the victim of the assaults and those who are in the limbo of seeing them suffer without being able to help. Of course, you've emphasised the importance of love, and the fact that sometimes it just takes the trust and love of one person to help heal some of the damage that was there. Excellent effort, and a very lovely epilogue.

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..SankiMedhz..

@..SankiMedhz..

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Posted: 12 years ago

#303

Posted this in the first thread...then thought I'll put it here instead.😆

This is the first time I'm reading something written by you, Juhi. :)

And I would like to thank Vee (V323) for giving me the link to this one.

I liked the sensitivity and the mature way you have written this SS. I've only read four chapters so far..but will read the rest soon. Thank you for writing on such topics.

The scars inflicted by such encounters take time to fade away...and it requires a LOT of support from people around as well. This is a fitting tribute to the braveheart...who fought till the very end. And I salute all the women who have fought such evils and continue to do so. I hope no one has to EVER go through such situations in life.

This is seriously not an easy story to read. So I can only imagine how hard it must have been for you to think and write all this out. Your words have the strength to move me...and make me feel the emotions that the characters are experiencing in the story.

The part which touched me was where Arnav finds out the weapon with which Khushi had been defending herself from Shyam - a broken part of her bangle. The guilt which Arnav experiences...I get it. But what would be more better would be if he helped Khushi come out of her pain, rather than concentrate on his anguish...as he himself realizes later.

Society.You know the victim has gone through hell, and is still going through hell. Yet...the callous comments are thrown not caring if they're heard by people or not. It is this uncaring attitude of people (not everyone...but one bad person is more than enough) that affects the victim deeply..making her question herself when she shouldn't be doing any of that.

Juhi, you made me cry while reading this. The way you write just goes straight to my heart. And that food scene...was just BEAUTIFUL. And the part that followed...where Arnav started opening up to Khushi..letting her know that being Khushi isn't bad..I'm glad with the approach Arnav took there. :)

This man Arnav has caused so much pain...and yet Khushi asks him 'Why?'. Brilliant writing.

I'll be back with another comment as I finish more chapters. :)

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PixieFairy

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Posted: 12 years ago

#304

This was Such a Perfect SS read it in one go & Bawling my eyes out already your FF LOVE LIES Has Overwhelmed me alot we all Readers are Blessed to have Writers like you all enuf said *happy tears*😭😭

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hmm.. guess karo :P

@jas0308

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Posted: 12 years ago

#305

Hey.. I just finished reading this ss... And I must say you are a brilliant writer... Coz I know about writing arnav pov is very tough thing but am not a writer but as a human I am also very bad at putting feeling of myself and here you put someone else's... It might be more difficult to you as when you write so beautifully coz if there' any painful that whenever there is any emotional and painful scene my eyes filled up instantly and happy scene and lips involuntarily stretch at their own accord...

Really brilliant ss... Loved it to bits.

Am glad I came across this ss

Thanks for writing it

Would love to read more of your works

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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#306

EPILOGUE 1 left me speechless.

Such a different way to look at the whole khushi arnav relationship.

I was wondering if you were going to discuss the manhandling in this story..?

I know it is probably not about them, even if you make it sound like them.

Epilogue 2 proves me right.

Can i pick out my favouritest lines, even if it is all perfect:

"And the hero is always a shaitaan or raajkumar, depending on whether Khushi and I have had an argument or not."

"Because even after all these years, I still remember that image of her silent, withdrawn self."

"There were two good things that came out of those flights, though. I decided to buy my own private jet"

"And if you are planning to write in this now, then you must have committed a new sin."

"including the number of times you say 'What the f**k' in one day."

(The journal passing around reminded me so much of the shaitaan-rajkumar scene..you have really recreated it all..so much better this way, as usual!!!)

"Oh. That's fine then.She's really nice..I would hate to..hurt her.. We can go to the hospital now."

And then, I fall in love all over again.

Hitashi

ps. another one of your stories comes to end..and as always cant help but feel sad. Thank you for writing this..i loved every moment of it, even if someone were hard to read.

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ranogill

@ranogill

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Posted: 12 years ago

#307

arnav and khushi...what happen to us ...we can not have enough of them ...in any way ...in any form...in any story...in your story yet a different way to see them ..thank you once again...i have read your SS in one go ...and your writing style i like a lot...very big update...no dragging ...solid stuff ...loving your all story

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archmink

@archmink

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Posted: 12 years ago

#308

I stayed ip til 4am to finish reading the whole thing
That had never happen before with even my school exam
U r just too good
U also made me fall in love all over again when Arnav said that 'when I look at from her eyes to her mothers, and I fall in love all over again' it's the best concluding line ever

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awroneema

@awroneema

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Posted: 12 years ago

#309

2mrw is my xam...but i ws forced to read it all in a go...so beautiful...beautifully written...i wished it wud hapnd in the original ipk during the shyam's revelation!

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Perspectives.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#310

This was the first of your works that I have read, Juhi , thanks to the recommendation by NB, and it touched my heart. To take up he issue which had everyone distressed back in Dec/Jan and to write out on it is no simple task. And you have written it out in a manner that is unmatched, Juhi.

Arnav's regret for just one mistake of leaving Khushi alone that night is evident throughout the story. His turning to a diary to vent out rather than some person is so him. The reality of Shyam coming out was a shock to the family and it came out in such a horrifying way. The eye-opener was Khushi. Her reaction, her state of shock..I could imagine it all and I must say you did the research on that really well. Then the ice was broken and Khushi did talk to him. There is a whole lot to appreciate there, Juhi but I cannot put it all down. I will just say that you brought out the pain in both of them beautifully. The scars of the incident ran deep, yet time is a great healer. Liked how Khushi decided to break out of her present and move ahead in life and how La supported her all the way. Her coming back was a welcome to Arnav's life and his surprise to find her still not completely recovered as she still reacted untowardly to his touch ( I like how you didn't let the effect of the incident slack there) was lovely. The epilogue was a cherry on the cake!

I regret not reading this when you were still at it, Juhi..would have been able to applaud your work more. My comment probably does not justify my feelings for this SS but all I wanted you to know was that it was definitely worth the read!