Maaneet ff: My life's mistakes--(ON HOLD) - Page 13

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Posted: 12 years ago
omg!! awesome update

sameera is thingking gud for geet

yes maan was true geet is nave i know but itna to samjh sakti he na k ronit ki intensions kya he ...she is 19 after all ...how can she let her kiss her on his forhead ..
aur is ronit ko nahi pata k she is married i guess he wants to get kicked out from maan
i hope geet maan k dil ki baat samjh lew aur rohit ko apne kareeb na aane de
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome update
sameera cared for geet..
jealous maan
loved the update...

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Posted: 12 years ago
hey dear what a update
i think it was all vickey's plan
and ronit is also involve in this plan...
to bring maan and geet close...
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Posted: 12 years ago

Hi guys... another part…. Do like and comment…

Here a request… pls read the last part again.in pg 18.. I have made lot of changes as I felt it was not good...

Pls forgive me….. and do comment… how you liked the new one…..thank you

It was nearly 4 when I woke up… I did get a very calm sleep…. But now sleep was far away…. Geet was still sleeping in my arms… this felt so good… so much like home… I just want her to be close to me like this... I smiled at this thought… but why did I feel like this..??? was this love??? I thought love happened with people who share the same wavelength….. Who were compatible... but here...? Geet and I were so different….. What is this feeling that she evokes in me every time…? Why did my heart burn seeing Ronith with Geet…. I dint know the answers for these questions… I just looked at the ceiling….

He is my friend…. [check the note... pls read last part again.. pg 18]

Wo… wo….. Aap bhi my friend...

These words rang in my mind… was I just a friend to her… I was expecting her to say husband… but why did I feel the pain when she called me a friend… when she compared me to that Ronith… God… help me... I don't know where this is going….

Cos I don't want you to lose her also Maan… your aloofness would give her different signs and you might lose her forever…

Samira's words came back to me… was she correct… will Ronith take her away from me??? Was he better than me??? I asked myself…. Ronith was young…. Younger than me… I am 29 years… and Geet is still in her teens… and I'm gonna be 30… will I be good… will I be better than men of her age… I thought…. I was confused…..

I don't want you to be alone…

Those words… yes…. Samira was right… I cannot lose her… what if I don't love her; but she is my wife… and I'm her husband… I'll keep her happy… and will try my level best… I decided…. From tomorrow… I'm gonna try and get my wife closer to me…. Deciding that, I just turned around and hugged her… and sleep just followed…..

It was morning, and Samira got up with a smile on her face….. She dressed up and went down for breakfast… her dad smiled at her seeing her happy after a long time…

Kya bath hai beta…. You seem happy…. He asked her… hoping she would talk to him…

Hmm… nothing special… she said ignoring the hurt that splashed in his eyes….

Sam…. Beta…. Won't you ever forgive me… he asked with a painful voice…

Papa… pls… there is nothing to forgive you for anymore… she said eating…. She dint want to look at his face…

Beta… take this... pls see this photo... This is for your marriage… he said sliding an envelope towards her…

Papa… why are you doing this… she asked… her eyes were filled with anger… apko mujhe Maan se alag karne me khusi nahi mili ki you are behind me for this…. You know I cannot give the same place for anyone else… she said getting up angrily…

Pl beta… is was your mom's last wish... wont you full fill it??? He said trying to make her accept….

Papa… I'll marry... but first... I have to finish some unfinished business… saying she left the house… she sat in the car and took out the phone... She was really excited to know what happened between Maan and Geet last night… how was their date… she giggled…. She had heard Maan making plans… and now she wanted details….though she knew Maan would never tell her... but still that dint stop her from asking… happily she dialed Maan's no. and switched on her Bluetooth and drove……

I was in my office… as i had lots of work… and most of all... I had planned something for Geet… but before I did anything, I had told Geet that I would be taking her out... I seriously dint want reruns of last night….. I still felt guilty for what I did… and today, I would make things better… I would make this marriage work… and for that this was correct time… I had done the arraignments and was waiting for the clock to strike 8…..

Maan…. Why the hell aren't you picking up the phone…? Yelled Samira as she barged into his cabin… with Pinky and Adhi behind her….

ss...ssoo.oorr.y sir… ww...ee tt...ried to st...op her… bu…but.. madam… Adhi started saying…

it's ok Adhi you can leave..I dismissed him….

Tho.. Maan babu.. kya hua kal.. she asked with a teasing smile…

Huh… what do you want to know Samira… I asked in a bored voice.. as I knew what she was talking abt… but still I dint want to tell her anything…

Come-on Maan… don't act… I want details… what happened in last night's date…. She asked excited…

And what makes you think I'll tell you??? I asked taking a file

Cos.. if you don't I'll ask Geet… and she will tell me everything you did… she said giggling….

I know she was correct… Geet would tell her Samira di everything… and that was not good…

Ok Samira.. Nothing happened… we dint go out…. I said…straight to the point…

What??? But why… mene itna samjaya… why did you do this Maan…. She cried out…. Suddenly all her happiness vanished….

Look it was not my fault…. Geet went off with Ronith and came back late.. so how do you expect me to take her out… I said.. trying to clear off my name…

What??? What was she doing with Ronith so late??? God this girl.. here we are planning something good for her.. and there she is hanging out with her friend…. Samira spoke… she just sat down, defeated…

Friend… that mere word… did indescribable things to me… I just hated that word… God.. I dint want to be a friend to Geet… I want to be much much more… but who would explain al this to that jalli…. I thought…

What are you thinking Maan… Samira asked… scrutinizing my face…

Nothing… have a meeting… and will be busy today.. I told her… irritated… irrespective of everything… I still couldn't be free with Samira as before… something always stopped me from opening up to her again… was it that I couldn't forgive her betrayal or was it something more… I dint know….

Hmmm.. ok… I'll be going home… saying she got up and left the room….

I signed… Samira was correct again.. Here I was planning to have dinner and have her close to me… and there Geet would be lost in her own world.. with her FRIENDS… I moaned out loud…..

Aaachooo…. I sneezed again… why the hell I had to eat so much of ice cream.. I cursed myself… but what to do… today, Ronith was giving us treat.. and he took me to my favo chat place… we had pani puri eating competition and also ate so much of ice cream…. And now… I think I caught a cold… what the hell am I gonna do.. It is 6:30 already and Maan ji had asked me to be ready… as he would pick me up at 8…. I went into the room.. and saw a pretty white and red sari on the bed… I smiled.. It was beautiful.. but I dint know that Maan ji like sari… and what was the need to wear one as I wasn't very comfortable wearing one.. but still to keep him happy I freshened up and wore the sari… I took out jewelry to match it… and was ready… but what worried me was I was sneezing badly… I searched for the tablet box… and took 2 cold tablets… hope this would help… I prayed.. as I got down to the hall and waited for Maan ji… and as the clock struck 8, he came in…. and I saw him giving me those weird looks again… he stretched his hand and I placed mine on his… I dint know why I did this… it was just reflex… or was it.. I don't know.. but I just looked at him.. as though he was hypnotizing me with his brown orbs… there were so many unreadable emotions playing… I dint know when he led me to the car as I was still in trance and was just following him… he made me sit.. and we drove off… the drive was silent… and after traveling for abt 45 min, the car stopped…. He opened the door for me and both of us started walking… it was silent…. And dark…. But then suddenly… I came into a place filled with light… it was beautiful… the lights were from the floor…… there was a tent… and the whole area was decorated… with lights, and flowers… and the sky was twinkling with stars… it was so beautiful.. but what confused me was, why Maan ji had bought me here… I looked at him for an answer… but what I saw, made my throat dry… he was standing so close to me.. I could smell his cologne…. And his eyes… still boring in to me… I wanted to look away.. I wanted to close my eyes… but couldn't… his eyes just held mine…. And I was just drowning into them… Geet… he whispered… oh… my name sounded so .. so.. beautiful from his mouth… I just kept on looking at him… trying to see… what those emotions were….

Do you like it??? He asked in that sexy husky voice… did I just say sexy??? What the hell is wrong with me… I wondered.. what is happening to me.. I was so lost… he led me to the table…

Misty.. do you like it.. he asked again…

I just opened my mouth to say something… but what happened next… was something unexpected…. I just yawned… I was feeling sleepy… I saw Maan's face change… he looked hurt… what did I do??? I felt like hitting my self…

It's very beautiful… I said… trying to handle the situation that I had spoilt…

Hmmm he said.. as another guy came in with a tray and placed the food on the table… the food smelled so delicious… but boy… my stomach was so full.. how do I eat… I gulped…

Maan ji served me food and looked at me hopefully… I smiled.. and then took a spoonful of food… it was delicious… but how much can I eat… I smiled nervously its fab… Maan ji.. I said… as I ate one more spoon full…. My tongue and stomach rejected the food… but I forced it down…. Maan ji kept on looking at me…

Geet… he said in a stern voice…

Ji… I managed.. He came to me.. pulled me out of my seat and dragged me out of the place…. I dint know what was wrong.. I just followed.. He pushed me into the car and he entered and drove…… I tried to stay awake… tried to think… but nothing worked… I dint know when my eyes shut down and I slept off……

Why is this happening.. what did I do wrong.. why does things like this happen to only me….. I saw her dressed like an angel…. She was really the angel of my dreams… all was good till we reached the venue… dint she like what she saw??? I really worked for all this.. she just yawned… can you believe this??? Wat a joke she made of my feelings… but still I tried to maintain my temper… and the food came… I saw her face…. She dint like it… she could nt even eat a spoon… what does she think.. does she take me for an idiot.. I can read her… she was forcing herself to eat it.. this was the height of humiliation… I'll never take her out for a date… this would be our last… I have got my answer… she is not interested in me.. she just takes me for a friend… ya.. That is what she thinks of me… then that is what she'll get.. a friend…. I pulled her out of her place and took her to the car.. as we drove off…. I saw her sleeping… I checked the time.. it was 9… was I so boring??? I wondered.. yesterday, she was awake for so long… but today she just slept… why??? Why was my feelings made such a mockery of… I felt the pain in my heart grow… I stopped the car and just left… I dint want to help her up or anything… let her sleep there.. I thought as I walked towards the door… but this heart… it again started annoying me… so I came back and lifted her up and took her to her room.. I placed her on the bed and covered her… and then came back into mine… what a day it was… whole day I was excited and was thinking of all the things we would do.. but irony.. look how it turned out to be… I felt like laughing at my fate…. Was I meant to be alone… was this written in my destiny… I thought as I lay down on the bed… I looked at the side.. last night…. She was here with me… but today… I was all alone… was this how I would be in future also?? I wondered as I tried sleeping… but how could I.. as images of Geet laughing and enjoying pani puries with Ronith flashed in my eyes… I felt the now familiar pain in my heart…. Increasing with every image…….

Precap: Maan what the hell is wrong with you… yelled Samira….

It was her Sam… I cried… as tears stung my eyes…

What???? She asked confused…

I saw a girl kissing Ronith in the lift… I dint see the girls face… but then I saw Geet with Ronith in the caf… she and the girl wore same clothes… I told her.. as tears ran down my eyes… and blood from my heart….

Rubbish Maan…. You must be hallucinating.. your mistrust and suspicion is playing games with your eyesight and brain… she said.. not paying attention to my broken self…

Shut up Sam… what do you take me for… I am MSK…. Do you understand… if she wants to go behind some Ronith.. I will not feel bad abt it… she can go to hell if all I care I shouted at her and left… I couldn't believe Sam was supporting Geet…

Geet had successfully snatched everyone from me…. I felt it only today…….

So this was really big Precap… I think it is a teaser than a Precap….

So what do you think abt this one??? The story is all set to move…..

Hey one more thing…. This story will not have a sad ending… this might be Maan's sprit doing the talking.. but trust me there is more to the story… not even half is done till now…

Guys… I need more readers…. Or more comments…. It really not so encouraging but still that doest stop me… but if you find it boring.. pls pm me.. tell me how or what you want to change in this…. And if it suits the story.. and my plan for it.. I'll defo do it…

Thank you and bye

Do comment and like…..

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Posted: 12 years ago
awesome upddate ...maan startec to love geet but geet is so naive that she does not understand his feelings or efforts ...
i want to kill that rinit ...always try to come in between maaneet ...
geet is naive i understand but she knows that she is already married to maan than y she let ronit come close to her ...
plz geet maan se atleast puch to sakti he na ronith k saath kahi bahar jaane se pehle ?
i hope precap dekh k lag raha he k sameera should make her understand about hubby n wify realtion aur geet ko ye samjhana jaruri he k ab usko sab se jyada maan ko attention deni he ...kisi aur ko nahi ...
plz geet should manaofy maan this time
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Posted: 12 years ago
Nice update
Thanks for pm
Glad Maan has feelings for Geet
When will she realize though
Plz continue soon n keep PMS comin
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Posted: 12 years ago
part 11
edited
nice one...
u have changed so much in this...
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Posted: 12 years ago



for part 11...

yes I liked this edited update...

so Maan knew that she is innocent and he was informed by Vicky...

but after watching her with Ronith he lost his control...he thought that he loved Samira but the reality is that he never loved Samira...just it is his ego to be dumped by her which is making him brood for what happened... he is jealous to see Geet with Ronith because he loves Geet now truely...

u edited that cheek kiss also and this is right to do...that was not appropriate...Ronith is friend to her so it is not right...

he is sorry to force her and she forgive him...he slept in her room in same bed with her...

now going to read part 12...

thanx for pm...


Edited by 6n6s6k6i6r6a6n6 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago



please yaar iss Samira ko beech mein se bhagao...

I can't stand her and her sweet talks...

I think she is planning a huge game...

why she is so much interested what happening between them...

on one hand shs is playing all goody-goody with Geet and concerning with Maan...and other hand she is playing with Maan's jealous natuer and temper...she is staying close to them on pretext of care so that she get all first hand information about relationship between them and then she will come close to Maan...she may be planning along with that Ronith to create misunderstanding between Maaneet...why will Ronith give such a party same day...

please don't kill Maan's character by let him make physical relation with Samira...some mistakes can never be forgiven...I will really hate him if he will do such mistake...

Geet is also so stupid...when she knew that Maan has asked her to go out with him then why she ate so much with Ronith...other take advantage of ur situation when u give them opportunity...she understands what Ronith wants but don't want to understand what Maan wants...she is giving too much importance to that Ronith...first she was uncomfortable with Maan but she has become so free with Ronith...

interesting update...

thanx for pm...


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Posted: 12 years ago
part 12
nice part...
oh ho not again...
yeh Geet bhi na...
Sam better teach her something...
poor Maan...
cont soon dear...

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