FAN FIC - Page 16

erm....a bit long part pls read

Originally posted by: sidroobaba25

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Originally posted by: preeti_saarrthi

very cute one sia 😛 . update ur other ff too

thanks a lot dear😊

toooooooooo good sia !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

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just read both the episode s!!!!!!!! they were rocking..... 👏

a-b one was very sweet..specially the poem 😉

n s-m one... wow...... i mean i knew ki suraj itna handsome hai hi ki har koi uspe marne ko tayar hoyega...
u know its very nice to c a 3rd angle in s-m story...it always increses the love...n manavsi behaves soooo cute wen angry..n suraj appears soooooo cute wen he manaos her.... 😉

Next morning in heritage house….

Mv: suraj!!suRAJ!!SURAJ!!utho naa(literally shaking him to wake him up and removing the chadar from his face)

Su: (in his sleep) ohoh mansvi sone do naa….(pulling the chaadaar(sheet) around him again)

Mv: suraj……..tumhe pata hai kitne baj rahe hai……….subah ke 7.00am baj rahe hai

Aur tumhe pata hain naa papa kitne strict hai………(now a bit annoyingly)

Suraj gets up disgustingly and makes a face……..

Mv: (smiling) Good! Aabb chhalo jaldi jaakar tayar ho jao…

Suraj tries to sleep again….but mansvi catches hold of his arms and stops him from sleeping……….

Mv: Suraj tum bhi din ba din bachon jaisi hakat karte ho………utho naa suraj..

But in vain……suraj digs himself in to the pillows and mansvi is annoyed……khushi who is seeing all these drama from outside …thinks something and goes back to her room and comes with a cassette..

Meanwhile..mansvi is still trying to wake suraj up……then khushi comes and gives an expression to say that"main hoon na"😉

Mansvi looks on curiously…….khushi goes near the music system….puts the cassette and plays it……..

From the cassette a voice comes………SURAJ!!!!!!SURAJ!!

Well this is mansen's voice recorded by khushi…

But seeing no response from suraj….khushi increases the volume………

SURAJ!!!!!!!!!!!!!SURAJ!!!!!!!!!!

The whole room gets surrounded by the echo of the voice………

Suraj gets up startled……….

Mansvi and khushi laugh out………😆

Suraj looks here and there confusedly thinking where is this voice coming from????????😆

Mansvi and khushi keep on laughing………and then khushi stops playing the cassette……..suraj understands their trick …..… and looks at mansvi and khushi narrowing his eyes………..

Su: oh to ye tum dono ki chaal thi!!!

Mv: hum kya karen(standing up) aap uth nahi rahe the…..to hume yahi karna pada….

(looking at khusi smiling) waise kuch bhi kaho khushi…..tumhare papa unke papa ki baat nahi taal sakte ……..yeh to sach hai

(standing along with khushi smiling and looking at suraj)

haan suraj sach keh rahi hoon na main….

Suraj smiles…….

Su: tum dono ne mujhe uthane ke liye aisa mazak kiya

Mv: hmm……

He gets up from the bed……slowly approaches mansvi and khushi….

Su: ab nahi chodunga tum dono ko…huh!!

Seeing this mansvi and khushi start running in the room itself……

Mv: suraj!! Achcha baba maaf kardo naa…..

Su: (smiling)hmmhmm kaha bach kar jaaogi!! Huh!

Mv: suraj!!

Suraj is successful in catching them both………but khushi manages to escape out…….

Seeing khushi escaping….mansvi too tries too break free from his hands……

Mv: khushi!!!!

After a second…….

Mv: aa suraj chhodo naa……

Mansvi is still tightly holded by suraj in his arms

Seeing this suraj becomes a bit romantic…….

Su: chhodne ke liye thodi naa pakda hai……(whispers in her ear)

Saying this he starts kissing her hairs……her face……

Mv: (feeng shy) suraj!!!!!😳

Su: hmmm(still kissing her)😳

Mv: suraj koi aa jayega……

Su: aa jaane do…….

Making his grip on her waist tighten……

Su: I don't care……..

Mv: but I do naa……come on leave me now…..

Su: mansvi(looking at her) kya tum sach main chahti ho ki main tumhe chod doon….

On hearing this mansvi turns back to look at him and all her protests fall silent…….

Su: hmm bolo naa

Mansvi just smiles shyly……..

Just then a voice comes from behind…….

SURAJJJJJ!!!!!!

Both are startled and look back and find khushi again with a recorder playing that same cassette……

Suraj smiles…..he goes and picks up khushi in his arms…..

Su: khushi beta aapne to hume dara diya hmmm…….(kisses her cheek)

Mv: achcha main jaakar apke bhai ko phone karti hoon……janab ka koi phone nahi aaya hai……..

Meanwhile in nainital………

Bhumi goes to wake up arjun who is dreaming as usual abt girls but this time only one girl bhumi…….

Bhumi enters in the room………bhumi has already bathed……her hairs wet………..wearing a blue shalwar-printed white kurta along with blue dupatta combination…

She finds arjun still sleeping in his bed and smiles and goes to wake him up but stops seeing him………

She keeps looking at him thinking how handsome he is looking even when he is so sluggish and sleepy and feels shy and again smiles and she comes forward to kiss his forehead…..😳

Arjun opens his eyes as bhumi's hairs wake him up……but bhumi doesn't notice it….but arjun does a trick and

A: AHEM!!AHEM(coughs loudly)😉

Bhumi startled that whether he is awake suddenly comes up……but arjun closes his eyes and pretends to be asleep……..

Bhumi feels relieved and again feels shy and laughs to herself and gets up from his bed……..

But arjun catches her hand and she is stunned and she looks back only to find arjun awake and looking at her with his lazy eyes…..she is surprised😳

B: tum……arjun…tum to………..

He doesn't say anything just keeps looking at her………

Then suddenly all of a sudden pulls her to him and she falls on him with her elbows on his chesh…arms in his arms and her face…so near to him…her hairs falling all over his shloulders …..

Arjun looks in to her eyes lovingly and she too…and they get lost in to each others eyes….suddenly arjun took one strand of her hair in his hand and said ….😳

A: bahvri……..u look very beautiful…..tum bahut khoobsurat lag rahi ho…..(slowly rubbing her hairs in his palms)😳

Bhumi feels shy……….

B: (slowly feeling shy) arjun yeh kya kar rahe ho……

A: (lookin at her) pehle tum batao tum kya kar rahi thi……..

B: main..... main kya kar rahi thi……main to kuch bhi nahi kar rahithi……

A: achcha!!(tauntingly)….jooth mat bolo main jaanta hoon tum kya kar rahithi…..

Spreads his other arm over her

B: (pretending to be innocent) main kya rahi thi………..main to kuch bhi nahi kar rahi thi

Tighetens his arm around her……..

A: main uski baat kar raha hoon…..jo tum thodhi der pehle kar rahi thi…mujhe soote huye paakar….lekin…..

B: par tum……..(stops……feels shy and tries to break herself free from him)

B: arjun chhodho mujhe……..chintu bhi neeche hoga….use…mujhe

A: (drawing her face further close) chintu…..vintu sab intezaar kar sakte hai………..main nahi bhavri……

By now bhumi is feeling so shy that she doesn't even look at him…..her face fully red….

A: to bolo….

Bhumi looks at him…….He looks at her lovely

He draws her face towards himself......

When suddenly the phone rings again….this time his cell………..

They both are startled and arjun gets annoyed……..

A: ye phone bhi naa………hamesha galat samay par hi aata hai…..

Bhoomi gives out a short laugh and arjun loks aanoyingly at her……..and smiles annoyingly………

Bhumi gives him the phone and says

B: mansvi bhabhi

A: wow!!……kabhi keshav bhaiyya to kabhi mansvi bhabhi sab galat samay par phone karte hai…tabhi jab main……😆

Bhumi is still leaning over him although he had released her….she keeps her finger on his lips and says

B: hmmmmm….baat karo…bhabhi se

He annoyingly takes the call………

A: arre bhabhi

Mv: arjun kabse ring jaa rahi hai……..tumne itni der kyun ki …..phone kyun nahi utha rahe the…ghar par bhi phone nahi uha rahe the……..

Meanwhile bhumi tries to get up when she finds that her hair has been strangled in to arjun's kurta….she struggles to free that hair form the button…but is unsuccessful……

A: (not noticing bhumi) who bhabhi darasal baarish main(narrates the story)…………………… isiliye main ek friend ke ghar main aakar reh raha hoon…fikar ki koi baat nahin hai main bilkul theek aap w…..

Suddenly shouts……

A: OUCH!! BHAVRI KYA KAR RAHI HO……….

Bhavri was struggling to get her hair free from his kurta's button when she accidentally hits his face………for which arjun shouts……..

B: who mera baal atak gaya hai arjun tumhare kurte par………main kya karoon mujhe dard ho raha hai……

A: arrey bhavri tum(stops suddenly………realizing that he was still on line with mansvi)

B: tum bhi naa arjun thodhi madat to karo……

Keeping hands on phone……so that mansvi shldnt hear anything……….

A: arrey stupid……bhabhi hai line par……..aur tum…

B: Ohh(suddenly realizing keeping……… her hands to her open mouth)…bhabhi ne humari baat sun li hogi

A: Obviously!! she is not deaf naa.....is she?(gritting his teeth) ab thodi der ke liye chhup baitho…..

Mansvi on the other hand is stunned to hear the girl's voice and is thinking on what the girl just said……

"mera baal tumhare kurte main atak gaya hai………"

Mansvi gets a bit worried and she thinks hat what is her devar up to this time…..whaat is that girl doing with her devar so early in the morning….a thought comes in her mind and

Mv: nahi nahi mera arjun aisa nahi kar sakta……who kisi saath iss hadh tak nahi jaa sakta……..main usse achchi tarah jaanti hoon(to herself)

Mv: ARJUN!! Are you there

A: yes bhabhi!!

Mv: arjun yeh ladki tumhare saath kya kar rahi hai…..itni subah aur uske baal tumhaare coat main atak gaye hain …ye sab kya hai arjun….tum us ladki ke saath kya kar rahe ho…(her voice stern)

A: nahi bhabhi aap jaise soch rahi hai vaise kuch nahi hai

Mv: to phir…..

A: (looking at bhumi) who bhabhi…main…who bhavri hi ke

ghar main reh raha hoon….aur who mere liye coffee layi thi …tab…tab…who ……

huh….mujhse takra gayi aur …………….uh………uske baal mere kurte main atak gaye aur tabhi aapka phone aagaya(giving a reilieved smile)……….bas yehi hua bhabhi….aur ..aap jaise samaj rahi hai……….vaise nahi…..

By now bhumi successfully manages to remove her hair from arjun's kurta and tries to leave when arjun hold her and brings her back to him……..

Mv: arjun….baaki sab to theek hai naa

A: haan

Mv: chalo main phone rakhti hoon….w……

Before mansvi could finish her words……..arjun interrupts

A: theek hai bhabhi baad main baat karte hain..

And puts the phone down and heaves a sigh of relief

Mansvi on the other side is stunned on this behaviour of arjun and wonders….

A: huh thank god!!!!!thodi der ke liye to meri jaan hi chali gayi thi……..

B: (smiles) uhuh!!

A: aur aap(looking at her) aap mujhe chodkar kahan jaa rahi hai………maine ab tak apna jawab nahi paaya ki app yahan kya kar rahi thi……..

B: main……..(coming really close to arjun) main

Arjun feels delighted

B: (smiles) tumhe jagane aayi thi 😉

And breaks away from his arms and runs away……smiling

A: arrey!!(gets up and smiles)

erm ita a bit long part........pls read

Originally posted by: alvina

good work
i want more

thanx dear.....and just updated......hope u like it.......

Originally posted by: rima desai

good job

thanx a lot dear

Originally posted by: tunna

toooooooooo good sia !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1

👏

just read both the episode s!!!!!!!! they were rocking..... 👏

a-b one was very sweet..specially the poem 😉

n s-m one... wow...... i mean i knew ki suraj itna handsome hai hi ki har koi uspe marne ko tayar hoyega...
u know its very nice to c a 3rd angle in s-m story...it always increses the love...n manavsi behaves soooo cute wen angry..n suraj appears soooooo cute wen he manaos her.... 😉

oh dear thanx a lot........

It was 2 good i really loved the update continue the good work