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amritab

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Posted: 13 years ago

#31

A great start - you've captured the mood of the scene beautifully - I'm in!

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Peehu24

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Posted: 13 years ago

#32

thats definitely interesting! Loved the concept!

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norolim

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Posted: 13 years ago

#33

Originally posted by: amritab
A great start - you've captured the mood of the scene beautifully - I'm in!

Happy to have you! You're an amazing commentator after all :)

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norolim

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Posted: 13 years ago

#34

Originally posted by: MariahMohan
Hey girl, this is looking quite interesting.

I must say, the setting came as a surprise to me, but I'm really excited to read more. There's something so unique about this story- I can tell already.

I'm a Christian, and I find it heartbreaking that the riots pushed a person to lie about themselves in order to save themselves. Why can't they treat Hindus, Muslims, Sikhs, and everyone else with the same indifference they had for Arnav after realizing he was a Christian. Honestly, people in this world are s twisted. This sick partiality to suit their personal taste. Ugh.

I'm getting too carried away xD Anywho, I'm excited for more so keep me updated!
-Ann

Thats great! Always good to know that I have such a nice reader ready for the ride :)

You can? Well thats good. Because I cant -.-

Isn't it? But what to do, its the sad and pathetic way of the world. Anyhoo, thank you for the comment!

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Mariam Khan

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Posted: 13 years ago

#35

Girl this is intense and it's different from the usual stories its a big relief :)))

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807031

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Posted: 13 years ago

#36

WOW. Just WOW.
It was so beautifully written...
~Vani<3

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kriti_atharv

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Posted: 13 years ago

#37

wow awsuuum hun...seems ver interesting hun...please continue soon n thnx 4da pm dear!!!

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deepa

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Posted: 13 years ago

#38

different but very interesting. hope u continue soon

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norolim

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Posted: 13 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: GodnMe.Foreva
WOW. Just WOW.
It was so beautifully written...
~Vani<3

Thank you so much!

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Zunara

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Posted: 13 years ago

#40

Great concept genius, loved it like all of your other work so do continue writing this. Good luck and happy writing👍🏼

You picked up yet another sensitive topic, but very well portrayed. Partition of the sub-continent was a really bloody event and the loss of human lives whether Muslims or Hindus was and will always remain a sad event in the history of the Indo-Pak sub-continent, it was far too cruel and the killing of innocent humans should never have happened, it destroyed many lives and tore many families apart.

Anyways back to the SS, Again you are the Emotion Queen Avi, while reading it I felt like I went back in time and had witnessed the destruction of homes and human lives. I really truly felt Arnav's pain.

Khushi was clever enough to give him the rosary it saved his life, by the way good use of Urdu dialogues for Khushi.

Felt horribly sick to know that the burnt payal was Khushi's, hope wherever she is she's safe and sound and Arnav very soon finds her. So please please Arnav get up and find the strength in you to search for your love.

By the looks of it Khushi has no idea or maybe in the beginning of their love story she had no idea that Arnav was a royal. That will be interesting.

Again wish you all the best for this SS and update soon.

Thanks for the PM.

Edited by zunara_ali - 13 years ago