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Yuppiee. . . .
We got chap 1 . . .
Hurriee. . . . .
Wondrful start. . . . . .
Vicky's feeling towards neha r so strong. . . .
Life cycle of taani was nice. . .
**no more comments on her. .hope u undestand**
aww. . . .
sharon feelings towards swayum were fully justifd. . . . . .
I noticd 1 thng,
and vicky,taani and sharon's monologue swayum was the common topic. . . . . . .is anythng special tat they were talking about him as a helper or an idol or an lover?
Nvr mind. . . .
Mindblowng update. . .
Update nxt part realy soon. . .
And m egarly waiting 4 kriya's entry. . . .
Pls update soon. . . .

superb update nivi

yipppiee we got chapter1...

so the center of topic was SWAYAM...

be it vicky,sharon or tanni...swayam plays every role perfectly for everyone...but bechare ke liye kon perfect role play karega uski load shedding ke liye...

loved everyone monologues their Pov was written beautifully...

but wat's tensioing swayam???is something serious????

plzz jaldi se update karo or yeh suspense disclose karo...waiting fr next part...

thanks fr d pm...

Originally posted by: pallavi.14

yipppiee we got chapter1...

so the center of topic was SWAYAM...

be it vicky,sharon or tanni...swayam plays every role perfectly for everyone...but bechare ke liye kon perfect role play karega uski load shedding ke liye...

loved everyone monologues their Pov was written beautifully...

but wat's tensioing swayam???is something serious????

plzz jaldi se update karo or yeh suspense disclose karo...waiting fr next part...

thanks fr d pm...

Swayam K liye perfect role uski load sheddin k liye ek e insaan ho skta h n thts KRIYA :)

amazing update

Awesome start dear...
Loved it
beautifully written..
Viha part was nice.. Hope everything got sort out b/w them..
Sharon swayam ke bhare me soch rahi thi... Awww so cute
what is bothering swayam... Diclose it soon
update soon
thnx for pm

p.s. As i m loyal kriyaansh fan, so cnt see rey with anybody else.. Thats the only reason i ask that question to u...
But in this chappy, u had nicely explained taani pov to us.. Nd i dnt hav any problem with taani but dnt want kria to cry again for her love...

awsome update...
U r a gud writer...
Bt to b true...
Plz make conclusion soon that it'll b a kriyansh or tanni nd rey...
I m a kriyansh fan
nd don't lyk to read nd watch abt tanni nd rey that's y had left d3 a long ago...
Nd don't lyk to read abt tanni also if she goin to cum b/w kriyansh...
So if there will b pairng of tanni nd rey then sorry hv to leave reading this one...
Thankx 4 d pm

Nivi Nivi you are here with the first part of you much awaited series...you know when you posted the concept my curiocity levels were zooming up and i was eager to see what is in store for us...and i think you just gave a perfect reason to let us wait because nivi never fails to amaze us...

well well i should sick to my words that you have some kind of magic in you...i mean to come up with a suitable start is not an easy task to begin with...i can see why you said that after all brain storming seasons i have managed to come up with this update...but can i just say that you brain storming seasons were successful to the core because the update looked beautiful really nice one...

Girl you are so young and yet you depict feeling of 18-19 years persons so beautifully...man i can just praise you all day long for showing a sense of matured thinking to all around whether it was vicky,taani or sharon in the end...now i know you are madly in love with swayam and he is a character worth it...so i can guess why swayam brings a little edge here but trust me he desreves the treatment you have given him...so kudos to you nivi...

now comming to all individual pov's to start of vicky is shown valunerable for the first time towards neha so its indeed a new turn...i liked how you are using realisations dawn on vicky...but i can realte and understand vicky's feelings and puzzled in himself state...you showed and cleared it perfectly why vicky was deciding to talk to swayam instead of his besties Rey or Nilesh...and that really made a sense to go with because swayam is rather more mature than most of all in the gang and he has this composed nature in him...

now came the taani pov...basically before i comment on this i would say that neither i like taani as character nor i hate her...basically i haven't just concentrated on her...but kudos to you because for the first time i liked reading something about taani...whatever she thought made a good damm sense in her life...man they way you have shown this maturity of taani you have really made me believe that she is indeed a mature and good character to go with...the way you shown her disturbed state with all that she though about her and rey's feelings, thinking, emotions, or relatability towards eachother was really nice, it was simple yet a pleasure to read...the thing that touched my heart about taani is the way you used that phase where she thought how her parents avoided her as she was a gilr child and how swayam and his parents always loved her like their own part...lastly it was indeed pleasure to read that taani being a sister adored, loved, respected, enjoyed being with, affected by actions and still making swayam a ideal person in her life...its just you know made me smile seeing a sister thinking about his brother with that care...loved the way you emoted taani's guilt over shivam matter and her thinking about how will she face her brother or rey or entire gang was perfect...

now coming to sharon's pov...i was captivated with this part...i mean the simplycity that was there in whatever sharon thought was just more than pleasent feeling for me...i just love the way you showed how much swayam means to sharon...how even the smallest things of swayam affected her or didnt go unoticed by sharon...loved that phase perticularly where sharon was thinking swayam as perfect boyfriend and lover...i am just so happy and pleased to read sharon pov...

now in between you showed some movements of neha which were nicely done...and also a start with rey sharon lil sharey moment...loved that really...and liked the way you showed rey when taani was seeing him when she was thinking...and finally loved the way you showed lil lil things of swayam...though he didnt had any dialogue but still he was the most attractive part of update...the way you showed him thinkong and worried when sharon was looking at him it really made me curious why he was like that knowing sharon will get hell affected by him...

loved the whole update to the core...thanks for PM...do update soon...super excited about this FF now...and dont forget you have another FF The Brevered to update which is due for long now...

Pratik...

WOW Awesome 👏
Loved It...Update Soon & Thnx 4 d PM 😊