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@pehlanasha.

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+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#61

Ahhh...Kill me deeps...grab a knife and kill me because i do not want to die under your such romantic swaron pieces...🤗☺️

Loved it a lot...OMG! it was beautiful...Muahhh!❤️😊

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Tanya

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lalita

@BusyIndivaBee

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#62

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-unres-

di when u told me that ur writing one that includes ur poem

i knew that it will make me feel out of the world again

how do u manage to write this way

👏

the intro was perfect

moonlight and all ⭐️

the way u described the moonlight trying to peep into her room

and an angel was lying in her baby pink night suit

wow

sharon is lying on the bed with her stomach pressed the bed and a pen pressed in between her lips

she was thinking hard

with a sort of confused expression on her face

hmmm

that's my position while i write my stupid poems

perfect!!

suddenly swayam appears and sharon is still lost in her dream world 😆

swayam took sharons diary 😲

it was then sharon comes out of her dream land ooopsss swayam land 😆

the score was 1-0 coz swayam had sharons diary in his hand

sharon was terrified seeing swayam for real and then warns him not to read her diary

unlike me coz i call my sister and friends and read aloud my poems even though they r not interested 😆

i force them to listen to my poems at any hour of the day

my poor cupcake and sis have to bear me 😉

ok lets come back to ur os

then the score was 2-0

swayam says unke beech kuch personal nahi hota

he starts reading the poem

and sharons reactions n expressions were penned down perfectly

finally the score is equal

2-2 😳

their love was pure and the moon was jealous to see the beautiful sight in front of it

hehe

poor diary was ignored and it was crushed under their weight 😭

meri diary ke saath agar koi aisa karta toh main usse maar dalti and i will kill that person for sure 😡

diary ko care n love se handle karna chahiye

but no complaints in this coz voh meri nahi sharon ki diary hai 😆

the diary 👏- perfect title

amazing di 😊

Edited by sajan_swaron - 12 years ago

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Monica..

@Monica..

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#63

hey deeps..🤗
dat was awesome...i reallie loved it,..i had a wide grin throughout d reading,
swayam teasing sharon n den deir tom n jerry chase,.dat was cute,,
n yes d poem dat ws too sweet..keep posting aisi sweet sweet os..
N yes apni ff b update kr diyo..:-)

Edited by SwaRonLuver - 12 years ago

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Aruba

@sweetcherry95

Rocker

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#64

it was so so romantic

me in dreamland of swaron

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Phantasm

@Phantasm

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#65

A one romantic OS, wonderful di🤗 quite contrary to your other works. Loved every bit of it, from Sharon missing Swayam, then dreaming about him, but actually it was reality.Aww😳

Coming to the poem, kya baat hai, as I said your Hindi is really good (kuch words samjhene mein I needed time😆) But it was marvelous and I really liked the way you revolved the other things around the verses. Fab job!!!

Please write more such wonderful OS's!!

PS: I didn't understand the score thing. And very soon I'll comment on your two FF's, sorry for delaying🤔

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shaani2209

@shaani2209

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#66

Beautiful one deep...

thanks for the pm...

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sky_fighter

@sky_fighter

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#67

the start the end the mid

all was mind blowing along with swayam i was also smirking when sharon thought she was dreaming of him. The poem was so romantic that was my fav part of this os

and as u must have figured out by now i am a die hard fan of urs so wht ever u write WILL be appreciated as u are an awesome writer

waiting for ur ff updates also

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Mihika

@Legilimens.

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#68

Hey Deepika Di,

Amazing OS..I loved every part of it..From the part where Sharon thought that she was hallucinating about him to the very prominent kiss..everything was perfect.

She counted in her mind…you cant loose it Sharon….SharonRaiprakash…correction….Sharon Swayam Shekhawat ne harna nhi sikha….she told herself….

I seriously love it when Sharon calls herself "Sharon Swayam Shekhawat"..It was a pleasure to read.. :)

Her big beautiful hazel eyes…..he was drowning in those …they were his personal brand of alcohol…

Score 2-2 …it was a tie….finally….

Certainly the best parts..lovely OS and well penned..I loved the way Swayam was teasing Sharon..those words in the diary were well written..And the ending was awesome..

The Diary….

Which was getting crushed under the weight of two angels …..busy making love to each other….

Amazing OS..Loved every bit of it..!! Do write more.. :)

-Mihika 😊

Edited by tanha29 - 12 years ago

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Destiny_015

@Destiny_015

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#69

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Dat a ws vry swt os deeps di...😃

Luvd it a lot...😳 U shud wrte os' mre often.. Now cmn 2 d updte.. Sharon ws so cute in d begnng f dis updte... Lst in her hubby's thoughts nd pennin dem in her diary... Nd our majnu cme sch naughtily..😳 Deir kiss ws rly passionte... Hot.. Awesme...😃 Swayam suprsd Sharon by cmn bfre... Sooo swt... Luvd SwaRon's chasin portion... U mentiond d height diff... Dis ws a vry swt portion... Nd dis spcl thng bout TanHa.. Deir height diff added sch a swt dimension 2 SwaRon... Imgning sneha tryin 2 reach shantanu's hand... Sooo cte... Thnk u fr givn sch a swt scne... I didnt knw u cud wrte poems... Well u shud wrte mre often... Dey r rly gud... Luvd d poem... It totally potryd Sharon's longin Swayam aptly... Mtchd d situation cmpletely... Swayam readin dse lyns ws rly gud.. Can imgne Sharon's exprsns... Luvd hw u ended it...😊

Gr8 os once again... Awesme writin...😊

Thnx fr d PM...😊

Edited by tannu_swayam - 12 years ago