Life is so unpredictable (SWARON) - Page 5

Originally posted by: d3riya

Loved it..it was awesum n rey toh bhagwan bol chuka hai swayam ko uski partner se mila do..toh bhagwan itne handsum guy ki baat kaise mana kar sakte hai.. :p n sharon to going for charity even..i think dey r going in d same one..n wahan dono milenge..hope so..excited to know..update soon..n thnks for d pm..

Originally posted by: --Rose--

Wow Its awesome:-):-):-) plz pm me when u update:-):-):-)

Originally posted by: gunnu1

two pages late??? Meri to pitaiii!!!

bhaaagooo!!!

Atlast...

Here I am...

aaj mar lo chappal agli baar se pm se pehle pahunch jaungi...

acha acha abhi mai reply krti hun...

u knw dat guys tok was sooo real...aise laga jaise mere side mai baith ke guys baat kr rhe h 'cause d language used here is what dey actually use!!!

"teri waali" being one of 'em!!

Swayam: Rey tu Kriya ke saath rehke senti marne lag gya h!! hahahahaa God...! apni best friend ki bezati...

Annanya ???

usse bolna Swayam se durr rhe!!

vilage trip...

papa bhi maan gye...

aa gyi hamari Sharon ji...taaliyannn!!

Charity Event??

wahi milwaoge ya thoda tadpane ka plan h???

ya phir waha bhi ladai?? hehehee

abhi I can't wait for d second chapter...

mujhe to pta krna h ke ab kya hoga!!!

update jaldiii se! phir balloon dungi! hehehee

pls update soon!!

nd agar spam krwana h to m here!!

Originally posted by: pratik54000

Hey Beeny congratulations for first update of your very first FF... i am glad to see very nice response to this FF...

Now about the update it was a perfect start to your story...first intro boys gang was discussing about their dance trip and all. They were planning to visit swayam's home town in the way as it was near to place where they had to perform and everything mentioned in the convo was really nice...

Than swayam and Rey convo where they were discussing about love and all was nice...i can sense that swayam hates the love feeling and all... i can bet you those who say they hate love actually turn out to be the most loyal towards this feeling...

and then girl inclusion came which was also nice...girls played their part so nicely...this ananya chick is really odd...i mean she is in group everybody is planning for trip to village and that madam wants go abroad amazing... i hope this girl doesn't turn out to be a looser villian in this SwaRon Story...

And swayam and his father convo was nice and sweet... we got an indirect hint that how swayam and sharon are going to meet through this convo...

and finally you introduced sharon in the story...man she is really different and she is wearing ethinic indian...i am eager to know more about sharon now...

nice update to start of with...please update soon..

Regards

Pratik

P.S, sorry for being late in commenting and reading...i hope you will understand why i am late... and ya everything is nice about your FF but if you can change style of your fonts it will be very nice... i personally don't like this fonts... i dont know if anybody has quoted about this or not... but if its possible than change the font style please... rest everything is just up to the mark...you will surely kill it with this one...

Originally posted by: dips098

hey beeny ...m really sorry dear ...for commenting late ...was out of station ...first of all...a big congratulation for your ur fisrt chapter of ur first FF 🤗🤗...it was a pleasant surprise ...the way you moved the story from CS to first chapter ...it was really nice...loved REYAM bond ...loved the twists ...
"Rey jabse kriya se mila he ,senti ho gaya he" 😆😆
Swayam don't believe in love ...😲😲
Rey's prayer to god to get swayam his soul mate ...he is a true friend...😊

loved swayam and his father's convo...it was sweet...you gave a hint about Raiprakash family there...can't wait for SWARON meet...

I just LOVED the way you introduced sharon ...in the puja sequence...it was just like a sweet movie scene ... AWESOME part dear ...plz update soon...thanx for the pm ...

Sry frnd for being late bt bcoz of some resn I hv changed a very little part of lst chapter so plz chek it out sry for dat ( updated on page 3)

Here is d second part of my ss hope I hv done good with it plz ignore spellings & grammatical mistakes

chapter 2

She calls tani & she comes & dono sath me pahunche college

As Sharon is d CS of d college sari preparesn use hi to karni he & so dey started with it & usne sabko instruct karna start kar diya & abt 11 o'clock sara arrangements & sab taiyar ho gaya tha abb baki tha to wo jo event k liye aa rahe the unka aana. Inka flight k ane ka tym bhi ho gaya tha & so abb unka wait kar rahe the & d gang come

( every one come except swayam wo call karne k liye bahar hi ruk gaya tha & sara gang enter in to d college)

Sharon: hii frnds I'm Sharon Raiprakash & I loved to wel come u all @ our college

All : thank u so much

Kriya : thank u Sharon for such a warm wel come

Rey : it's our pleasure to be here. :D😃

( with smiley face wel comed every one & take dem to deir rooms sab fresh hone k liye jate he & Sharon sabke khane ka taiyari karne room se bahar ati he & tab wo achcnk se jor takrati he niche gir jati he & our majnu boy also get down on her )

Sharon : (with anger without seeing his face) are dekh ke nai chal sakte kya?? Andhe ho??? & wt d hell r u doing here??

Swayam jo abhi tak uska face dekh raha tha jo gusse se red ho gaya tha he don't kn how to react & esa pehli baar hua tha k koi ladki uspe chilla rahi thi so he just stare'Sharon ko laga jese wo uski bat sun hi nahi raha tha & so isne swayam ko dhakka diaya & stand up & fir se start ho gayi

Sharon : tum dekh k nai chal sakte & yanha kya kar rahe ho?? & yanha ane kisne diya tumhe?? (swayam lost in her words) she wawes her hand & kya dekh rahe ho han?? Chalo bhahr. & uska hath pakad ke bahar khichane lagii

Swaym : hey just a second lisn one boy told me dat our rooms r here & so '

& by d wy u wer uncossiosly running & collied with me ntz my folt & y d hell r u angry on me??

Sharon: achacha don't try to b smart & let's go out

Swayam: bt y & y should I lisn u??

Sharon : coz I'm CS of dis college & me tumhe age jane ka permisn nai de rahi

Swaym : wt ??? Oh god plz save me ye kya zagdalu ladki se pala pada he & hw can I go der?? Plz god help me!!!

(Rey come der who is waiting for swayam & he herd dis fight & he comes fast

Rey : hey Miss CS he is with us & plz let him come inside plz. And ti kanha reh gaya tha kab se wait kar rahe he tera itna lamba call ha(teasing way)

Swayam:(dead look)🤢 are papa ka tha samje & abb Miss CS apki permisn ho cn we go inside ha???

Sharon : confusd manner) o..oh..k.

Sharon's eyes r stuked on swayam's face & swaym also gazing at her. Rey take him with him & when deir room come he turn back & agn see her face .

& den enter in d room

Rey : kya kar raha tha ?? itna lamba call ?? & uss CS se kyu fight kar raha tha?? Tu kabhi ladkiyo se dhang se bat nai kar sakta kya???

Swayam: woo woo lisn fistly me us se nai wo mere se fight kar rahi thi me nai wo mere se takrai thi & fight karna bhi usne hi start kiya tha mene nai wo mere ko enter hi nai hone de rai ti & call pehle hi bola papa ka tha bol rahe unhone call kar diya he & hamre sare arrangement ho jayenge so ..

Rey : chill dude get freshn up tab tak lunch ka tym bhi ho jayega so plz jaldi kar

Hey kriya plz come out na

Kariya no rey abhi nai abhi toda kam he kuch chize unpack karni he & thoda dance ke preprasn karna he

Rey : aa o na plz are wo to baad me bhi ho jayega plz .

Kriya: n rey abhi nai

rey push her hand & drag her at lonely corridor & take her to wall & came close to her

Rey: wt r u sying nai ana ha???

Kriya : w..wo k..ku..kuch kam tha. (try hard to get words)

Rey : ohh really & come more close to her

( dey both lost in each oders eyes & get more close o each oder & hardly inches a part )

Kriya: rey koi aa jyega ??

Rey : ane do

Kriya : are achaha nai lagega

Rey : buralagne do

Kriya : rey aap samj nai rahe

Rey : samja do

Kriya : rey plz chodo muje kaam he & koi aa gaya to sach me gadbad ho jayegi

Rey : put finger on her lip Shhh koi nai ayega & subhah se abhi to mily ho & jane ki baatkar rahi ho

Kriya : ( she also blushed) jyada romantic ban rahe ho (get eyez locked)

Neha call her name dey both come in sence & kriya ran towords deir room

Neha: kriya knha gait hi tum wo sab lunch k liye ja ahe the so ..

Kiya : kuch nai bas ese hi thoda dekh rahi th college

Neha:ok ab chale & Ananny tumbhi aa rahi ho na ??

Annanya: no wayz I'm nt coming I'm ok with Juise & fruts

Kriya : (wih irritasn) as ur wish (monologue sach me agar ye swaym ki dance partener nai hoti to too too😡)

Neha : are ye kitna chidtu he & kud ko kuch jyada hi smart samjti he?? Agar swayam ki dance partner nai hoti to (cut her in middle)

Kriya : to hamme se bhi koi usse tolert nai karta & both reach at mess for lunch

Sharon: sab ka khana laga diya he plz take lunch & den take rest for some tym

Kriya :thank u.nice arrangements . ( par abhi tak boyz knyu nai aye??)

Boyz enter & sharon was going out for some work & swaym ws entering & agb both collied )

Sharon: agn in her anger styl dekh nai skte?? (without seeing up)

Swayam: hey uu agn it's nt my mistake u r coming inattentively

Sharon : are u mean me nind me chal rahi thi ohh tumhara dhyan kanhi or tha & tum mujse takraye Mr..

Swayam: Swayam . swayam shekhawat naam he mera & me kabhi bhi bedhyan ho k nai chalta smji miss CS

Agn d fight started & evey one seeing dem

Sharon: samjte kya ho apne aap ko?? Ha bahot cool lagte hokya ??

Swayam : wo to me hoom😎 koi shak he kya??

Sharon : he he cool nakchade ho jo baa baat pe chid jate ho?? Like like a bull 🤢🐷

Swaym : & u ?? u r jist like siron jo bajte rahti ho & always ready for fight like a wild cat!!

Sharam: wt ?? wild cat '. U monkey

Swayam: u like a like '..rey stopped him in middle)

Rey: swaym stop it man cool down sry sharon

Swayam : are rey tu usse knyu sry bol raha he ye ladki he hi jagadalu usse fight k liye reson ki bhi jarurt nai he wo creat kar hi leti he kanhi se bhi

Rey : are shant ho ja & ye kya tu ek ladki pe hyper ho raha he??? Kya ho kya gaya he tuje?? Ha itna hyper & tu hamara lead dancer & college ka cool dude ek ladki se hyper ho gaya & 1din nahi sirf 1 n half hour me hi do bar fight..;)😛😉

Swayam: rey ab tub hi mat suru ho ja are yar ladki ka muh he ya fire machine fight start kare to stopp hone ka naam hi nai leti

Rey : cool man & chal abb khana kate he & uske thodi der baad hame ek baar rehearsal hi karni hogi soo abb chale

Swaym : ha chal

Den sab khana khate he & thodi der rest karne k baad dey go for rehrsal janha par event hone wala he & janha k sare arrangements ki responsibility Sharon ki he & sab apna rehrs start karte he

Vickey : are arrangements mast he ha yanha ka kya bolta Nil

Nil : ha boss manna padega rehne ka & staze & sab mast arrengements he yanha ka . wese ye sab kiya kisne hoga itna chota shehr & college or fir bhi itne achche arrangements manna padega..hammm

Bharat: abbe tuje kya karna he kisne kiya achcha he isse matalab rakhna & apna rehes start kar

Vishakha: hey dude tum kabhi kisika tariff bhi thik se nai hone doge hena?? (With dead look)🤢

Rey: hey abb ye discsn band karo & jiske liye aye he uss par focus karo ya guyz so sabse pehle amar & rinni & vickey & neha tumhara hoga so let's start

Neha : neha always ready

And den sabka rehars start hota he & inke baad rey & den bharkha & Shinni ka & ubke baad annanya & kriya & swayam ka solo & last two of swayam annanya & kriyansh ka so sab rehars hone wala hota he & last me swayam ka pefomance ka tym ata he ''

All d girls completed deir rehrs & so dey r busy in girlish tolk & sharon also joining dem with tolks & der r talking like dey kns onanother form d very long tym & taking all d nonsense talk & when swaym stat his rehrs bt when he starts Sharon gets call & so wo call pick karne k liye bahar ja hi rahi hoti he & agn swaym ka koi dance stap & her accident met dem & swaym hold her in his arm by her waist & d great eye talk start between dem ''.

Wait for wt would be d result agn fight ya kuch or ???

Hope gyz u like it

Soo hwz d second part plz gyz give ur valuable repls & comments & all criticisms warmly welcomed so read & plz jaldi read karo & tell me dat it's good / better???