Life is so unpredictable (SWARON)

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beeny

@beeny

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: marauder
I must say I am surprised that too pleasantly. After reading the character sketch I was wondering how will the story proceed. But seriously quite nicely written. Nice build up for the upcoming chapters. Looking forward to the next update.

thank u so much😃
it really means a lot😊

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Mihika

@Legilimens.

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#32

Nice update!!Update the next part soon!!

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Riya Kapoor

@RiyaArShaKapoor

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#33

Loved it..it was awesum n rey toh bhagwan bol chuka hai swayam ko uski partner se mila do..toh bhagwan itne handsum guy ki baat kaise mana kar sakte hai.. :p n sharon to going for charity even..i think dey r going in d same one..n wahan dono milenge..hope so..excited to know..update soon..n thnks for d pm..

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Rose

@--Rose--

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#34

Wow Its awesome:-):-):-) plz pm me when u update:-):-):-)

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Gunpreet

@gunnu1

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#35

two pages late??? Meri to pitaiii!!!

bhaaagooo!!!

Atlast...

Here I am...

aaj mar lo chappal agli baar se pm se pehle pahunch jaungi...

acha acha abhi mai reply krti hun...

u knw dat guys tok was sooo real...aise laga jaise mere side mai baith ke guys baat kr rhe h 'cause d language used here is what dey actually use!!!

"teri waali" being one of 'em!!

Swayam: Rey tu Kriya ke saath rehke senti marne lag gya h!! hahahahaa God...! apni best friend ki bezati...

Annanya ???

usse bolna Swayam se durr rhe!!

vilage trip...

papa bhi maan gye...

aa gyi hamari Sharon ji...taaliyannn!!

Charity Event??

wahi milwaoge ya thoda tadpane ka plan h???

ya phir waha bhi ladai?? hehehee

abhi I can't wait for d second chapter...

mujhe to pta krna h ke ab kya hoga!!!

update jaldiii se! phir balloon dungi! hehehee

pls update soon!!

nd agar spam krwana h to m here!!

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pratik vyas

@pratik54000

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#36

Hey Beeny congratulations for first update of your very first FF... i am glad to see very nice response to this FF...

Now about the update it was a perfect start to your story...first intro boys gang was discussing about their dance trip and all. They were planning to visit swayam's home town in the way as it was near to place where they had to perform and everything mentioned in the convo was really nice...

Than swayam and Rey convo where they were discussing about love and all was nice...i can sense that swayam hates the love feeling and all... i can bet you those who say they hate love actually turn out to be the most loyal towards this feeling...

and then girl inclusion came which was also nice...girls played their part so nicely...this ananya chick is really odd...i mean she is in group everybody is planning for trip to village and that madam wants go abroad amazing... i hope this girl doesn't turn out to be a looser villian in this SwaRon Story...

And swayam and his father convo was nice and sweet... we got an indirect hint that how swayam and sharon are going to meet through this convo...

and finally you introduced sharon in the story...man she is really different and she is wearing ethinic indian...i am eager to know more about sharon now...

nice update to start of with...please update soon..

Regards

Pratik

P.S, sorry for being late in commenting and reading...i hope you will understand why i am late... and ya everything is nice about your FF but if you can change style of your fonts it will be very nice... i personally don't like this fonts... i dont know if anybody has quoted about this or not... but if its possible than change the font style please... rest everything is just up to the mark...you will surely kill it with this one...