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Posted: 12 years ago

#41

Originally posted by: Sudha-SK
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Rutu 🤗 Finally you are posting this 😊
Will read and comment real soon 😳
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A very different concept this one Rutu, and you wrote is beautifully. Some real intense emotions gushed while reading. The pain in Sharon and Swayam sure made its way to us readers. What amazed me was the bond you have shown on such a delicate moment and the hardships life had put them through. The lil touch's you gave with the pink lil flower and a touch of humour with Swayam and his thoughts of creating a dance team a nice touch. The last part masterly written, i sure remember talking to you on this and what kind of ending you are drifting towards and i must say, perfect ending dear..just perfect.

Sudha🤗

Yes i finally posted this, I know I took long for the same. Anyways being a sucker for sad intense stories, I had intended to show the ending a bit sad, but just couldn't do it. I would have been a sadist if I would have done that. And that is the reason it took long for me to end it.

But thanks for the review on this update.😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

#42

Originally posted by: abhilasha_dream
Simply loved the OS !!! It was beautiful... You really emote well with ur pen...

Thanks for the comment. Glad you liked it😳

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Phantasm

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Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: -Nia-
#Apologies for unreserving this post late,I,erm had exam issues.😳

This was such a wonderful concept,Rutu.And you have written it so well.The pain and agony was so well described.This was an intense one,so SwaRon like.I love the pink flower part.How symbolic and how beautifully described.

This was an extremely polished and enriched piece of work.I'm glad reading it.Well done!
Keep more of'em comin'.

Thanks for the PM.

Studies first Neha, no need to apologize dear.

Yeah this was intense just like the SwaRon we all knew once upon a time.😳

Anyways thanks for the review😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

#44

Originally posted by: kool kanz
extremely adored it rutu,,,,fab work...swaron always 2gether...😊

Thanks for the comment and yeah Swaron are meant to be together come what may.😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

#45

Originally posted by: Madhura..
Rutu, reading your work 1st time, you write beautifully.
Atm am reading hardly any stuff, so will read in Diwali vacations and give feedback.
Description is superb, way u described their emotions and the pain of not having baby, beautiful.
Swaron bond and 6 babies, great concept!
Thank u for pm.

Madhura.

Thanks Madhura for the comment, sure you can give feedback whenever you are free.😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

#46

Originally posted by: dips098
hey Rutu ...this is indeed an awesome OS ...i loved the way u portrayed the emotion of happiness and sadness at one go ... swayam's footloose dream team was icing on the cake😆 ... their undying love and support for each other ... beautiful piece of work 😊😊😊

Thanks Deepika for the comment. Glad you liked the aspects of this update😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

#47

Originally posted by: tanukaswaron
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RUTU 🤗
another os from u and i am the most happiest person in here😃

Amazing os !!
fantastically written 👏
swayams dream to have 6 kids to make a footloose team was funny 😆
the way u expressed all the deep emotions and the hurt of sharon and swayam was brilliant.
the way u compared the little pink flower with the unborn baby was really nice , it touched my heart.😊
loved the way swayam became sharons strength and did not let sharon getting engulfed in extreme depression and also to keep believing that sharon will conceive again and they will have a happy ever after .
thanks for the happy ending rutu.
in all it was a pleasant read and beautifully written.👍🏼
keep coming up with more such wonderful swaron write ups ..
thanks for the PM.

Tanuka🤗

Thanks for the review dear. And as you mentioned Swayam was indeed the pillar of support for Sharon and he did believe that they both will find happiness soon. And in the end his undaunted efforts paid off. To tell you the truth I was not going to show a happy ending, but I was well aware of the outburst that would have happen. So I gave a happy ending😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: Suku_SwaRon
Rutu so beautifully written piece of work. Yaar after the pain when Swaron are happy it give me immense happiness too. Thanks yaar, it is really so nice to read your works. Aw the pain really Rutu hats off to you it is so vivid, the swaron love has its testing times but still they overcame thanks to our majnu . Hahahaha swayam wants 6 kids to compete for footloose, that was hilarious😆 It is absolutely fantastic. Thanks so much

Yes Suku as you rightly said SwaRon's love was going to get tested, but due to both of them it lasted it the end, just the way it is meant to be. Special mention of Swayam of course, he was indeed able to get back his happy Sharon as well as their baby😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: ABBY92
That was a beautiful OS !! I loved the part where you used the baby pink flower to symbolise the lost baby !! That really touched my heart !! It was sweet how both Sharon and Swayam tried to comfort each other despite being in pain themselves !! And I'm happy that in the end, they got what they wanted and still had each other by their side, closer than ever !!

Thanks for the comment Abby. Your last line pretty much sums up the update😳