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Annie12

@Annie12

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Posted: 13 years ago

#581

Long and satisfying update and or of the best

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undercoverhappy

@undercoverhappy

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Posted: 13 years ago

#582

Fantabulous update, heart breaking, soul searching, wonderful quotes, gripping and what an ending. I was hoping he would bump into Kushi & as a reader I just got that😃

Vile, cruel, trophy… trashy relationship… silences… screams… pain… alcohol… pills… pining… chaffing, hurt… loathsome, despicable… competition…his mother, his father, his sister, his relationship, verbal diarrhea, memories, disdain, self-loathing, life… torment, convulsions, thoughts, voices…

"How can you f**king parade me around… I am not a trophy!"

"Get her away from this house"

"You cruel and vile person… I can't believe I am stuck with you"

"I refuse to have your parade your wh**e everywhere"

More coldness, more bitterness, more agony seeping out from him.

Loved the way u summed up his feelings 👏

Mahesh, Arnav… vile, cruel… the voices in head got mixed together and formed unison. Now, they took upon insulting him together. They were screaming. He was in pain. They unrelentingly screamed in his head. Something snapped, something exploded. 🤗🤗

He did what he had never done before. He screamed a blood curling scream. It pierced through the night. He screamed loud, he screamed until his insides hurt, until those cracks in his conscience completely broke it free. He screamed until the stuffiness in his head cleared out. He screamed until his insides begged him to stop. He screamed.💔

He was now a broken fissure. He could hear his own heat beat and now his thoughts were clear. They probed him and asked him as to explain his actions from the past 11 months. Tears clouded his vision. Hot, fresh, tears leaked out of his eyes and burned his cheeks. His emotions were now pouring out. He had run his full course. From guilt to anger to self-loathing to heaviness to stress to numbness to frustration. Now he felt free because tears finally cleaned out any remaining remnants and tar from the previous 11 months. He placed his head on his now drawn knees and cried. A small voice meekly spoke from somewhere in his thoughts.

Very touching, thoughtful words u chose wisely to describe the torments, his dark thoughts, his vulnerability. Something we all deny some stage in out life.

"Over the past few days I really thought I had judged you wrong. Your family is so wonderful and I thought… I thought you were good too."

Kushi's words killed him, hit him in the heart.

Had she seen any good in him, in his actions, his in words that she convinced herself to change her opinion about him? He now wanted to believe the good. He wanted to cling onto that. He so desperately wanted to.👏

That night, he did what he had never done before. He stayed in a hotel and he slept without alcohol.👏

~~oOo~~

When June was maturing, he packed his belongings and rushed home. The people he so despicably ignored and hurt, he went back to them. He went to the place where bad memories did not exist… only warm people and loving family existed. The bad memories were burnt down with their old house years ago. In this house, good memories existed. Memories with his strict (back when he was young) Nani, memories with his cousin, memories with his uncle and memories of his aunt. Somehow, as the old memories broke through him, he also remembered how affectionate his aunt was, and how much she used to pamper him, and how much he loved her. When he was young, and his parents used to unceremoniously deposit his sister and him at his aunt's house for the holidays, she used to care for them. She was a mother to him but over time, his distant grew, his memories had faded and he had faded into oblivion as well.👏👏

Now, he wanted to go back. He needed to go back. He was broken beyond recognition.🤗

That night, for the first time, he slept without any nightmares which were followed by many nights.👏

~~oOo~~

Thursday, June 28, 2012

5.32 PM Liverpool, England

He sat still, relishing the silence and soft whispers of the wind as it brushed past his cheeks. It was an embracing silence; a silence that provided him with a hum in his chest. It was a long time that he felt anything warm; usually he was at the other end of the spectrum. His appearance was improving if not the slightest. The sun was warm and summer was here with a new sense of possibilities, warmness and heat, cool breeze, crickets at nighttime, everything and anything felt new to Arnav. He realized how far he had gone. But was he completely back… he knew he wasn't. He didn't think he ever could be. He craved for alcohol at times, and those cravings rocked him to his core. But, he also knew that if he pushed past this, he would break free. And now, he was craving it less and less.⭐️⭐️⭐️

"Arnav, here is your coffee," a motherly voice broke through his thoughts. He looked up from his left shoulder and saw his aunt extending him a warm cup of coffee.

He sensed that she wanted to talk to him so he faced her slightly. "I just needed to know… I know it isn't my place but… those rumours… you were abusing things that shall not be named… and I just…" she couldn't continue because sobs wracked her frame. She placed her hands on her face and sniffed. He placed the cup beside him and hugged her.

But it was her place she's the only ONE whom Arnav found peace with.

"I did. Everything you heard." He murmured. She stiffened.

"I still am… I don't …" he couldn't continue. This was his first conversation in days, weeks, months. She looked up and Arnav couldn't hold her stare. He simply bent down and placed his head in her lap. "I don't know why… those memories…" he hugged her tighter, burying his head in her lap.

"Your parents never had a good marriage… they just were different people. I knew this would happen one day, one day you will remember it all and snap. When you came back for the wedding, I thought I may have been wrong, but it happened. I could see it when you went to the hospital, I knew it. I still couldn't help you… you wouldn't have accepted. You were always the stubborn one… and as selfish as this sounds, you needed to come around it on your own or else you wouldn't have been able to start patching up like you are now. My son, your parents' despicable actions should never ever make you feel as if you are like them. The scars remind you of where you have been, they don't have to tell you where you are going," she said softly and ran her fingers through his unruly hair.🤗🤗

Wow, wow, wow it was wonderful to read, u have left me in an awe of your work. It took u an entire night to write part 14 I am not surprised, I can't write to save my life but u should be proud of your work.

👍🏼 XXX

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@flowers4u

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Posted: 13 years ago

#583

A wounderful read very devstating cant believe arnav went through that and came out of it still alive ...applading for arnav one brave man...continu soon

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Ann

@ipkkndank

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#584

Oh My God 😃 Well i normally say this AWESOME 😆 to almost every update you post but today i can't write it here because this chapter is the most awesome chapter i have ever read in your story up to now (well no offence 😃 i love your other chapters also but i love this one more).

Really awesome, Superb, Mind blowing update 😃 👏 👏

And i think this is the first time i complemented a chapter that's full of arnav and his routines 😃 😊. Well i guess i never read any that's full of him. Anyways Love the way how you have express his guilt eating him day by day, month by month and how he himself deteriorating and drowning in his own guilt 😃 😃 really Superb Update dear 😃 👏 👏

And after taking us a whole guilt realizing ride you have ended the chapter giving ourselves hope 😃 😃and rescuing us drowning from agony from the thought " When will Khushi step in to this???"

And i really bow you for that 😃 👏 😉

I really liked the way how you have written the whole chapter and also how you have included the whole story of arnav in to a one single chapter. Well that's really really mind blowing =) =).

And i think the time i spent to read this chapter didn't go in vain considering the fact that not only once i read it twice =) =) by ignoring the workload i have to do =) =) (No worries dear i'm not regretting it)

And i'm really glad that i found a story to comment in a lengthy way after a quite some time =) =).

And i do hope that i'll get that opportunity in the next chapters as well =) =) =) =). Ah must tell you waiting time for this one is worthy dear =) =)

Awesome update =) =) Fantastic =) =) Keep it up =) =) And Continue soon =) =)

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Joti

@winnie7500

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#585

Long update ke badh, long comment toh banta hai, nah?

First off,

Congratulations.

It's never easy to write on the topic of emotional breakdowns. What is critical of course, are the emotions. (Duh) And you've succeeded with that. You put in your 200% and we saw that. It all flows. The beginning where Arnav is teetering at the edge of the cliff. Then the middle, where he seems to have fallen off but is hanging onto a rock. And then the fall. The mighty fall of Arnav Singh Raizaida.

But not to worry, because he makes it through. And when we see him climbing back up that rugged cliff side, we cheer. We root for him.

You portrayed it all so realistically. We saw his pain, confusion, numbness, anger all leaking out of from your sentences.

Next..the metaphors.

Oh the metaphors! You've a gift for metaphors, did you know that?

-"And like an overdue earthquake…"

-"More coldness, more bitterness, more agony seeping out from him. Like puss, it was coming out… it was revolting, he was a revolting sight"

-"Completely broken like when the building is rooted from its very foundation"

And then there was this:

"He did what he had never done before. He screamed a blood curling scream. It pierced through the night. He screamed loud, he screamed until his insides hurt, until those cracks in his conscience completely broke it free. He screamed until the stuffiness in his head cleared out. He screamed until his insides begged him to stop. He screamed."

The scream. The god-awful, heart wrenching scream. That was the highlight for me, or at least the highlight in Arnav's emotional breakdown. The scream. (Which brought to mind the scream in iss pyaar)

Then there were the small tidbits here and there that caught my eye.

Such as: "the cauldron was over flowing". It brought to mind potions class..being taught by Snape in the dungeons (With both Gryffindors and Slytherins of course) 😉

Now to my absolute favourite part: Seeing Arnav back in his role of Khushi's knight in shining armour 😃

I absolutely loved Khushi's re-introduction. It was done splendidly well!

With that said. I am most eager to read about their meeting.

Update soon.

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mishti_17

@mishti_17

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#586

This was one fabulous update.. Kudos.. Its always difficult writing emotional breakdowns but u did full justice to it...
I loved the way u described his emotional breakdown which was long overdue.. He was just breathing and not living.. Khushi was the catalyst that made him come close to himself.. I so loved how u showed it thru days.. His turmoil. His breakdown.. HIM.. He wanted to hear something like Khushi threw on him to redeem himself.. He is a different person but the situations that he went thru made him seem like a beast... Things almost back to normal and woaah, the knight in shining armor saves our damsel in distress.. She has heard it all.. Take my wallet but leave her.. He saved her.. Once upon a time he literally killed her and today.. Life changes and people change too.. I hope Khushi is able to see this change in him.. I love how she is becoming a necessity in his life.. "Warmth spread thru his chest seeing her face" Well, new budding feelings.. ❤️ I want this to go a long way.. Thanks for the fantabulous update.. 🤗

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orchidpurple

@orchidpurple

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Posted: 13 years ago

#587

Finally got a chance to catch all the parts...
Its a beautiful story...
Loved Anjali and Khushi bonding...
To
Arhi verbal fights and Khushi's endeavors...

Waiting for the wedding to begin..

Thx for the PM's
OP

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daljeet

@daljeet

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+ 4

Posted: 13 years ago

#588

chander,IT WAS AN AMAZING JOB!👏

loved the chapter.well,i must say u hv gone a long way.

i had imagined all possible ways of arshi meeting again.wait,i've even thot tht arnav wud immediately go aftr her aftr the lst update.i thot tht kushi wud accidently end up working for him n contrcts,challenges n wat nots.but u wer DIFFERENT,n i mean it.

kudos to u chander.i imagined all possible intense scene if arshi meeting n u came up with a light hearted higly dramatic arshi meeting.now wat wud i say!🤣u had me at splits regarding their meeting(its a compliment only ok).

then abt arnav's turmoil;honestly speaking i nvr thot he wud suffer SO MUCH.yes,once u revealed those words bwn his parents,i cud sense kushi's accusations wud hv a deep effect on him.but i didnt expect it to be so worse.i mean tht man practically saw hell,n i even wondered if he deserved so much pain.

character problems is a blessing to the children of fighting parents. n ne being a business tycoon n in this mordern world it was not a crime ot hv *** many a times,though i ownt say it is not wrong.then abt the charity services,tht too almost everybody does.im not justifying by saying tht everybody does it n so it is right.but then everybody who does such kinda actions too hv t osuffer like this,but they dont,i mean not to this level.

arnav was cruel to kushi once he came to knw of it n i wont say kushi was wrong to accuse him aftr he threw away her book.tht was natural from her side.n she had been hurted by him bz she loved him.but then we must remember he wasnt aware of tht n she being in her teens just got out of reality n beleived wat the world offered.i mean it was not her fault but it wasnt arnav's fault too i feel.

n chander,i always find ym char reflection in kushi,n tht makes me conscious too.😊

i had read ths chap yest night,i had a throbbing headache n was just checking wen i saw ur pm.i cudnt resist n read,but i had to stop inbwn n take a breathe n by the ending my head was pounding out.lol,u can imagien my state reading such an emotionally intensified episode with a throbbing headache.i dont remember wen i hit my head on bed.lol.i thot of commenting tody morning fresh.i hope my comment has brought a smile on ur face😊tht was the reason i prefered to write wen im cear in the morning.

n one more thing,thansk for getting la out of his life n thanks for she realizing n moving out as graciously as possilbe in such a situation.i cant beleive she put up with such a state so long.applauds to her.i mean who wud allow a man to hurt u physically so much on a routine n tht too a man who loves u.i felt bad for la.but then it is good tht she moves away.n loved arnav's words t oher aftr the door was closed.i really felt so sorry for him chander.did he deserve this much????

the description was a bit stretched i feel.work on it next time.

n mamai-arnav bonding was soothing n made my eyes moistured.my heart went out to him wen he appeared at his family house in tht ghost shape.cud imagine all their faces n worry in tht scene.akash,mama,mami allacted wisely i loved it.anjali shud be more attentive to her bro i beleive.i mean just taking him for an atm is not roght.she shud be more of a sister,bz she was the only one he lvd in past.

arnav's parents past is stil la bit unclear to me though i almost understand.it was a cruel role of fate on them.i wonder who locked them in such a wed lock.n also one doubt wer is anjali n all this?isnt she arnav's sister actually????

update soon,thts the only thing ive to tell u.u dont knw how long ive been waiting for it.i had stalked r page often.do u knw tht.so better update fast.😃

n thanks for brigning kushi at the end atleast.i thot i'll miss her.

n i loved how he remebered her good words to him once he was rleived.aslo mami-arnav talk n the way he lay his head on her lap.wonderufl scenes chander.how he screamed n let it al lout n how he found relief n how his thot process returned.i hope his busines is now steady