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NaLeyton23

@NaLeyton23

Explorer

Posted: 13 years ago

#81

Woooahhh!

Payal having a affair??

That is so out of the box and amazing!!!

Wonderfully written!!😊

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rashgirl000

@rashgirl000

Voyager

Posted: 13 years ago

#82

its different.

awesome update.

loved the ending by the way

thanks for the pm

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aakriti

@aakriti120

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#83

heya..

interesting concept..

very well written..

loved how u picked payal and akash..

many thanks for the pm..:)

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fareeha

@pinkpearlz

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#84

That was really different!
And brilliant.

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subiscs

@subiscs

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#85

heyy different it is, and well written !!!😊

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Yellow.

@Yellow.

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#86

wow that's different of akash and payal... awesome

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shonagudia

@shonagudia

Rocker

Posted: 13 years ago

#87

Really a different one. Seeing Payal in that place is totally unexpected. But i love the way you showed their unsuccessful mrg and one mistake of her ruined everything. True they never ever worked on their relationship.

I liked the line you used for different context.

Sometimes she wondered if he's just played at being in love with her..

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JerryTheMouse

@JerryTheMouse

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#88

Passion and problems with Payal Akash! Finally!

This hold so much promise, I love the way you wrote it! Are you planning to continue? Please do!

Thanks for the Pm!

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Shamima

@-shamima-

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#89

I loved how you've done an os on Akash and payal because we do need to look into how their love developing and also their characters this os is like the future of them if they both don't try to anything in the present time (or more like the ipkknd team to do something about them two) because you can see that hole developing and also the fact that Arnav and Khushi would be their inspiration if it does happen but yeah a really nice and different os amazing as always 😃