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Posted: 13 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: freepink14
I have heard and seen abstract art , similarly abstract OS!!!

Not everyone understands it but whoever does, they really know what it stands for.

Brilliantly written! the hollowness of Aakash and Payal's relationship clearly visible and the ending! summing it up to show how neither of them tried to do anything about their love.

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IPKKND team may be or may not be doing anything with Payash track but you make it a point to write about them.
I see your frustration! . Relax , nothing can be done about it as of now. Hopefully the team realizes it sooner and does something about the parallel leads.
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Everyone in the forum is kind of disturbed by lots of rumors and also the way the show is being dragged making it hard to digest how IPKKND has changed over the period of time, a request - Can we get something fun and happy to read from Nayika please😊,so that it spreads happiness around!!!

I'm sooo glad you liked it! Honestly I wasn't sure about the reaction this one would receive being a Payash OS and that too about infidelity (kind of KANK inspired :P)

INR is all flowers and bunnies right now so that's your dose of happiness right there!

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667300

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Posted: 13 years ago

#12

Originally posted by: --Aartzz--
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I loved it!! I loved how it was between Akash and Payal. I haven't seen many Os's like that. I especially loved the end. I hope Khushi is able to clear things up between them!! Thanks for the PM! 😃

No, no, no! Payal has to take Khushi's example and sort out her own problems! I'm sick of Payal being spineless.

Thank you :D

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Farah

@farah53

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Posted: 13 years ago

#13

Wow!you did something I didn't think was possible...You gave Payal & Akash...Erm..well..CHARACTERS!!!

& if one has character,they can fail in it too😉It was a nice variation..Payal & Akash were two persons in this OS,granted flawed..But they were not just Arnav's brother & Khushi's sister..Which was nice to get reminded of..😉

Edited by farah53 - 13 years ago

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emistry

@emistry

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Posted: 13 years ago

#14

Oh interesting story! I like how you went abdiffeent direction with this one!

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fffan123

@fffan123

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Posted: 13 years ago

#15

Loved It. It was different and lovely. Keep on churning the stories.

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meenaluma

@meenaluma

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Posted: 13 years ago

#16

nice os

diffrent from all

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nimra21

@nimra21

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Posted: 13 years ago

#17

That was a lovely piece of writing! :)

Although I rarely enjoy anything Payal related because I really don't like her character in the show but I definitely enjoyed reading this. I really hope the Payal-Akash relationship is explored a bit more on the show with tracks that are not Bubbly or Payal dressed up in gaudy clothes attending office parties.

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ChocoBloc_12

@ChocoBloc_12

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Posted: 13 years ago

#18

It's so good to read about Payal and Akash for a change, it's like breath of fresh air...something different :)

It was a brilliant update...to some extent you can understand how Payal felt...to be shut out and not acknowledged by her husband as affectionately as he used to, especially in a new place...it must have been hard :S

Loved it... it was something different :)

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insanelycrazy

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Posted: 13 years ago

#19

u know while i was reading it, first i was like payal is wrong, and den i was like no akash is wrong, and den i was like no payalw as wrong!!!!! grrr!! it was confusing because u can blame both of them and at the same time u can't because technically they both were victimized by the situation they were in, so you can't really understand who's more at fault payal or akash!

loved the way you described payal's emotion's and akash's indifference in the beggining. i wonder what made akash change this much and his emotional outburst!!!!!!!! the way you brought out the emotions, it was kind of scary, u never expected such a loud, anger crazed akash .( not that u can blame him) and then a feeling of helplessness took over him and he had no idea wat to do, that was so sad!! 😭

the situation of this OS is so similar to what happens in reality. the guys become so worked up in their jobs they forget to understand they have a wife who needs their love that she goes to somebody else to seek comfort :( i get she was upset and everything and plus she was all alone and lonely, but cheating is something i can NEVER accept(even though akash was a part of it too, how can u leave ur wife like this alone in a foreign country?!). talk the problems out people before taking a decision you're gonna regret! beautifully written! i wish u write a FF or a SS about it, which would deal with how these 2 overcome their problems.

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Mira

@kyunki_iloveu

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Posted: 13 years ago

#20

wowww...love the new light that u showed payal in...
in the show she has gone into such a rut that it is hard to imagine her character as diverse as the one u protrayed beautifully in this...
i wish they would add to her character in the show...as u have shown..it would bring another angle to the show
amazing job
:)

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